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Comment from MelReyn
I've had a bad morning and a even worst night. I'm grumpy and I have the sudden urge to snarl. After reading this poem, I've chilled out. I'll drink my coffee and wait for the energy to hit. Your poem has helped spread a little love. An that is a wonderful thing. Your words have the power to make a stressed out mom smile. Now that's power!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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I've had a bad morning and a even worst night. I'm grumpy and I have the sudden urge to snarl. After reading this poem, I've chilled out. I'll drink my coffee and wait for the energy to hit. Your poem has helped spread a little love. An that is a wonderful thing. Your words have the power to make a stressed out mom smile. Now that's power!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Wow! That is great news! Smile, and have a wonderful Easter weekend.
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Thanks, you too!
Comment from Toney
Yes I liked your ottava rima poem. I could feel the meaning of love flow in those thoughtful and composed lines. I think I also liked your poem's intoduction. The beginning of your poem really set the stage for the rest of the lines to follow. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Yes I liked your ottava rima poem. I could feel the meaning of love flow in those thoughtful and composed lines. I think I also liked your poem's intoduction. The beginning of your poem really set the stage for the rest of the lines to follow. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Toney. I appreciate that you too the time to review and comment.
Comment from Glasstruth
Having Worked at Lockheed Martin and writing "Love is the Cure!" is quite a statement. Like the abab rhyming, flows, and isn't forced at all. Shows that love is the way, yet we stray so often. Well done! Les
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Having Worked at Lockheed Martin and writing "Love is the Cure!" is quite a statement. Like the abab rhyming, flows, and isn't forced at all. Shows that love is the way, yet we stray so often. Well done! Les
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you Glasstruth. I love my country too, enough to ensure it's well defended.
Comment from jaliscomel
Well done. A difficult form to work with but you have carried it off. The normal rhythm for this type of poem is iambic and you have interspersed that with anapestic which tends to give a somewhat sing-song rhythm. I love the message and agree wlholeheartedly.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Well done. A difficult form to work with but you have carried it off. The normal rhythm for this type of poem is iambic and you have interspersed that with anapestic which tends to give a somewhat sing-song rhythm. I love the message and agree wlholeheartedly.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you much Jaliscomel. Yes, I didn't I tend it to be iambic.
Comment from Indie Skreet
this is beautifully written and well deserving of the six I still do not have. Not an original message in truth, but one put in an original way. I particularly like the line, 'where eons of hatred as tensions swirled', even though I think should read 'swirl'? This poem shows a good heart - one I see so rarely in a man, so it gets my vote :) best wishes Indie
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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this is beautifully written and well deserving of the six I still do not have. Not an original message in truth, but one put in an original way. I particularly like the line, 'where eons of hatred as tensions swirled', even though I think should read 'swirl'? This poem shows a good heart - one I see so rarely in a man, so it gets my vote :) best wishes Indie
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you Indie. No not an original idea, but felt from the heart.
Comment from adewpearl
A wonderful picture of your daughter and cutie pie grandson :-)
Good strong rhymes in ottava rima format
good alliteration in truth of these trinkets
A wonderful poem paying tribute to love
and to families who share that love
I also love your thoughtful concluding message :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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A wonderful picture of your daughter and cutie pie grandson :-)
Good strong rhymes in ottava rima format
good alliteration in truth of these trinkets
A wonderful poem paying tribute to love
and to families who share that love
I also love your thoughtful concluding message :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Brooke. Take a look at my other poem, Poof. You inspired it doubly, first with your Whitney, Second with your Dandelion poem,
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A dear and loving thought presented in your verse. Nicely written and presented with the picture of your daughter and smiling, happy grandson.
God bless you all. Smiles. Robin :)
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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A dear and loving thought presented in your verse. Nicely written and presented with the picture of your daughter and smiling, happy grandson.
God bless you all. Smiles. Robin :)
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thank you Robin, you brightened my morning.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is lovely, Treischel, a beautiful poem for your daughter and grandchild. There is nothing as wonderful as a mother's love, (and father's!) This would have made a brilliant contest entry as well. Your words are such a pleasure to read, they just flow delightfully down the page, there is a lot of love mixed in with thew words! :) xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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This is lovely, Treischel, a beautiful poem for your daughter and grandchild. There is nothing as wonderful as a mother's love, (and father's!) This would have made a brilliant contest entry as well. Your words are such a pleasure to read, they just flow delightfully down the page, there is a lot of love mixed in with thew words! :) xsx Sandra
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Sandra. Your comments are very nice to hear. I appreciate this wonderful review.
Comment from Creative77
This is such a wonderful piece of writing! Your words are full of beauty and honesty; so powerful and strong. What a lovely picture too! Nice job!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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This is such a wonderful piece of writing! Your words are full of beauty and honesty; so powerful and strong. What a lovely picture too! Nice job!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thank you Creative. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for your comments.
Comment from country ranch writer
a mothers love there isn't nothing to compare. The closeness is always there with a Mom and her children Even if they are far away you think of them every day.
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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a mothers love there isn't nothing to compare. The closeness is always there with a Mom and her children Even if they are far away you think of them every day.
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much country ranch writer for the review. There is nothing more powerful than a mother's love that I've ever observed. For sure!
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welcome
