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Comment from gene roush
Very nice.
Expressing such a beautiful image under the constraints of such a strict rhyme and rhythm scheme is amazing.
I really like,"there's another race to run". It lends itself well to the mythology of the sun.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Very nice.
Expressing such a beautiful image under the constraints of such a strict rhyme and rhythm scheme is amazing.
I really like,"there's another race to run". It lends itself well to the mythology of the sun.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you Gene. I appreciate your insights.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Thanks so much for explaining the poem form; I have never tried that one. I would take the comma out after "For" in the line "For as the Earth's surface (and fix the spelling of surface) is spun,"
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much for explaining the poem form; I have never tried that one. I would take the comma out after "For" in the line "For as the Earth's surface (and fix the spelling of surface) is spun,"
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks Crystie. Fixed the spelling. Left the comma. Want that pause.
Comment from Redwing
One thing about a new day. It seems to take away the bad and the sadness of the past with fresh newness.Hope is in a new day and hope always makes you happy. When the sunshine is on your shoulder you can be nothing but happy.
Lovely
Betty
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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One thing about a new day. It seems to take away the bad and the sadness of the past with fresh newness.Hope is in a new day and hope always makes you happy. When the sunshine is on your shoulder you can be nothing but happy.
Lovely
Betty
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you Redwing.
Comment from SteveY
Very well done my friend. You seemed to be able to follow the format precisly and were still able to express yourself in beautiful poetry.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Very well done my friend. You seemed to be able to follow the format precisly and were still able to express yourself in beautiful poetry.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you SteveY. It's always nice to be affirmed in your intent.
Comment from ann marie mazz
five stars for certain
excellent presentation
never did you stray from the title
the words flow
the reader can recognize the attention to detail
wonderful work in all areas
thank you for sharing
may there always be a new day
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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five stars for certain
excellent presentation
never did you stray from the title
the words flow
the reader can recognize the attention to detail
wonderful work in all areas
thank you for sharing
may there always be a new day
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you Ann Marie.
Comment from poetbear
I am only back to review.
Tis reads and flows well.
The rhyme and feelings work well.
Great use rhyme and meter.
Imagey and image are great.
Makes sense and stays with you.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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I am only back to review.
Tis reads and flows well.
The rhyme and feelings work well.
Great use rhyme and meter.
Imagey and image are great.
Makes sense and stays with you.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you poetbear.
Comment from lorijean
A great verse, as each day enters it brings a new beginning, and more hope for the days to come, the picture is just right for this too....
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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A great verse, as each day enters it brings a new beginning, and more hope for the days to come, the picture is just right for this too....
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you lorijean. New beginnings every day.
Comment from JeffreyVPerry
I love it as a poem and as an expression of your title. I first thought that it was inconclusive in the thought, but as I read it all through it came together and remarked how a new day begins - in the turning "spun" of the Earth. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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I love it as a poem and as an expression of your title. I first thought that it was inconclusive in the thought, but as I read it all through it came together and remarked how a new day begins - in the turning "spun" of the Earth. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Wow! I'm blown away by this fabulous review. Thank you very much.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hello my friend I enjoyed this one. The promise of a new day and all that it entails - always fresh with no mistakes and a chance to do our best again. Lots of hope and beauty in this one.
It settles on our shoulders if we are willing to face the day. I felt its warmth, felt the faith within bloom and say thanks so much for sharing this one.
Beautiful art work too:)
Maureen
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Hello my friend I enjoyed this one. The promise of a new day and all that it entails - always fresh with no mistakes and a chance to do our best again. Lots of hope and beauty in this one.
It settles on our shoulders if we are willing to face the day. I felt its warmth, felt the faith within bloom and say thanks so much for sharing this one.
Beautiful art work too:)
Maureen
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Thank you Maureen Napier. Your review clearly captured the essence. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from 9999pool
This is a wonderfully penned poem with a a clear message stroy of another day with another sunshine. We are usually given chances in life - to redeem and to reconcile.
The Rondeau redouble meant that we have redouble our efforts to find that solution in life, to walk again and then to run when possible. Another day, another chance to do it right which is on a similar theme to my "To be or not".
Excellent write. Well done!
Cheers, Ritchie.
P.S. I shall be away from FanStory on occasional breaks to better manage my time. My apologies if my reviews come late.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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This is a wonderfully penned poem with a a clear message stroy of another day with another sunshine. We are usually given chances in life - to redeem and to reconcile.
The Rondeau redouble meant that we have redouble our efforts to find that solution in life, to walk again and then to run when possible. Another day, another chance to do it right which is on a similar theme to my "To be or not".
Excellent write. Well done!
Cheers, Ritchie.
P.S. I shall be away from FanStory on occasional breaks to better manage my time. My apologies if my reviews come late.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Thank you Ritchie. Thanks vor your wonderful encouragement.
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Hi Tom,
Excellent write and the many 6-stars you received is indeed prove that this is a great poem.
Cheers, Ritchie.
