Nostalgia (haibun style)
Reserved for the aging, it summons all other emotions.45 total reviews
Comment from Sirach11
evokes the essence felt as nostalgia , very good.
nostalgia personified....
my favorite insight is : Youth has no use for you.
good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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evokes the essence felt as nostalgia , very good.
nostalgia personified....
my favorite insight is : Youth has no use for you.
good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Sararb
A very nice write demonstrating emotions. You showed a lot of different emotions in this poem. I really enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest. Sararb
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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A very nice write demonstrating emotions. You showed a lot of different emotions in this poem. I really enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest. Sararb
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. We are all on the path of life. We pick up memories along the way.Nostagia helps bring them back when needed. We often do not take the time to really enjoy a happy time. The memory will come back and you can give it the attention is needs. Great work.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I love the picture. We are all on the path of life. We pick up memories along the way.Nostagia helps bring them back when needed. We often do not take the time to really enjoy a happy time. The memory will come back and you can give it the attention is needs. Great work.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thanks, Elliejean. appreciate the review.
Comment from BeasPeas
Your work is exquisite. Particularly enjoyed, "power to persuade me to tears and launch me to laughter." However, the entire piece is wonderful from beginning to end. Putting words together in this fashion makes it a joy to read.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Your work is exquisite. Particularly enjoyed, "power to persuade me to tears and launch me to laughter." However, the entire piece is wonderful from beginning to end. Putting words together in this fashion makes it a joy to read.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your kind review.
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It got my vote.
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:.)
Comment from Child of the King
This write was a little busy for me as I felt it jumps a lot from line to line with random words. Just my opinion.
Best wishes in the contest
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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This write was a little busy for me as I felt it jumps a lot from line to line with random words. Just my opinion.
Best wishes in the contest
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Thanks for reviewing. I may not be doing it correctly but I thought that was the point of the haibun.scattered and random thoughts similar to stream of consciousness writing. Will be taking a class in it this June. Thanks again for the input.
Comment from hifein
I was very taken by your nostalgia (emotion) poem. never thought of nostalgia as an emotion before, but why not. this was beautifully written and within it you allude to other emotions. . the language of the prose portion is very poetic, rife with metaphor. the little poem at the end, although really nice i don't think is really necessary, especially since it speaks of a future, yet unknown as opposed to the nostalgic look backward. all in all a beautiful piece of work.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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I was very taken by your nostalgia (emotion) poem. never thought of nostalgia as an emotion before, but why not. this was beautifully written and within it you allude to other emotions. . the language of the prose portion is very poetic, rife with metaphor. the little poem at the end, although really nice i don't think is really necessary, especially since it speaks of a future, yet unknown as opposed to the nostalgic look backward. all in all a beautiful piece of work.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the in depth review. The haiku at the end is part of the form.
Comment from Indie Skreet
another beautiful write Dallas. I wasn't keen on the presentation if I'm honest, but I sort of get why you have done it so - and anyway, just a question of test and in the end did not detract from your capable write, best as always Indie
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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another beautiful write Dallas. I wasn't keen on the presentation if I'm honest, but I sort of get why you have done it so - and anyway, just a question of test and in the end did not detract from your capable write, best as always Indie
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thank ya, maam. :.)
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of Nostalgia, Oh, so right you are with every line of verse in this poem. When I was a pre-teen, I couldn't wait to be older. When I was a teenager, I couldn't wait until I was old enough to drink. Now that I'm 70 years old, each day zooms by so fast, I wish I could wait. Great poem. Carole
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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To the author of Nostalgia, Oh, so right you are with every line of verse in this poem. When I was a pre-teen, I couldn't wait to be older. When I was a teenager, I couldn't wait until I was old enough to drink. Now that I'm 70 years old, each day zooms by so fast, I wish I could wait. Great poem. Carole
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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thanks for reviewing. We are in the same boat and it's going down stream too damned fast.
Comment from L. Sherman
What a beautiful bit of prose and poetry. Love the narrative portion and the haiku as well. I've never written a haibun and am certainly no authority on them but I can certainly appreciate a wonderful bit of writing when I see it. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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What a beautiful bit of prose and poetry. Love the narrative portion and the haiku as well. I've never written a haibun and am certainly no authority on them but I can certainly appreciate a wonderful bit of writing when I see it. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks for taking time to review. It is only my fourth but I have fallen in love with the form.
Comment from Gungalo
the virgin path
spirals and shifts- it leads
I know not where.
The write that goes with this haiku is awesome. You have credited the man that is with you for sticking by you side.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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the virgin path
spirals and shifts- it leads
I know not where.
The write that goes with this haiku is awesome. You have credited the man that is with you for sticking by you side.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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thank you for reviewing
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