Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

I hate to admit I am just as soppy as the next woman, so don't tell anyone .......... I love this - it is beautifully, beautifully written and really touched me. Sorry I am all out of sixes, but there's always next month :) best Indie xx

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013

lol Thanks Indie, I'm really hard-hearted under all this fluff ;-) xx

reply by Indie Skreet on 14-Mar-2013

we will see? :)

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Hi Jaq,

This is well penned my friend. I got the sense of love from your imagery as well as the nice warm feeling one has when thinking of love. Waiting opens up a whole new level of trying to be patient. Great job.

Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013

Thanks for your lovely review as always Maureen. I am behind on mine just now but hope to catch up soon. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Alexmi1984

Exceptional

Waiting is sometimes the most painful thing one could do. Some other times, it could be the most beautiful thing. I'd like to place your great, free-style poem in the second category. As far as I'm concerned, it flew well and the message was easy to appreciate. I must admit that I had hints of soft, mellow music, as I was reading your poem.

This was a lovely poem, Jaq!
Alex :)

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

Thank you so much Alex. Lovely to hear from you :) Jaq xx

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

reach out, feel my need - excellent use of strong verbs to begin your imperative statements in this soulful invitation to love
I like the way you acknowledge the object of the speaker's desire has complications in his life preventing their getting together right now and her reassurance she can be patient :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

Thanks Brooke as always a pleasure to hear your thoughts. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend this is very well written with strong feeling of longing and romance through the work I enjoyed well done my friend regards Jill

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

Thank you so very much Jill :) Jaq xxx

Comment from October21

Excellent

Aw! This is just beautiful Jaq! Really loved it!!

- what I thought when reading: love doesn't always go as we planned. Sometimes we may be separated from those we love. But as long as the love remains pure and strong, we will believe that in the end we will grow old with that person, and we would wait up until our last breath if need be, just to be with them again. Really made me emotional, all the things you mentioned:-)

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

Thanks Shenel, as always your words mean a lot. Sometimes my life is all about waiting, still it's nice to have something worth waiting for. :) Jaq xxx

reply by October21 on 13-Mar-2013

That's a really lovely thing to say, makes me think of positive things...:-)

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

:) xxx

Comment from TonyCr

Excellent

This is an excellent love poem. Your words have a strong emotional connection, i love the first four stanzas
especially

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

Thanks a lot Tony for a lovely review. :) Jaq xx

Comment from donaldww

Excellent

The poet states that she will wait for love, while imagining all kinds of niceties, such as smiling, laughing, eye twinkling and the like.

In the end, she continues to wait. But hopefully not too much longer.

Cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

Thanks as ever Donald, your review is much appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from Shadow Pahn

Excellent

I liked this poem. I could connect to it since i have been away from my love for long stretches of time. But hey, we got married in the end, so happy endings!

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

Shadow, thanks for your review and absence makes the heart grow fonder. Glad it worked out. :) Jaq xx

Comment from GracieAnn

Good

Nice sentiment throughout the poem. The suggestion that I would make so that your poem does not sound cliche is to find a better words for "eyes twinkle". I find using a thesaurus sparks new ideas and word usage...Just a thought.

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 Comment Written 12-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013

No problem Gracie I will look at that again. Thanks so much for your help and review. :) Jaq x