All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Back and Forth"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Doc Holiday
It's nice to zone out at the gym in a relaxing state of mind and still perform well. You definitly are a multi-tasker! Nicely written poem! I hope you son can envision his grandfather as well perhaps through some old photographs before hitting the gym and trying out the rowing machinery.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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It's nice to zone out at the gym in a relaxing state of mind and still perform well. You definitly are a multi-tasker! Nicely written poem! I hope you son can envision his grandfather as well perhaps through some old photographs before hitting the gym and trying out the rowing machinery.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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I hope so too Doc! thx so much! :)S
Comment from gramalot8
Visionary, very well done. Your description language readily takes your readers down this memory lane with you. It would have been nice to have your son know his grandpa for sure. Thanks for sharing with us.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Visionary, very well done. Your description language readily takes your readers down this memory lane with you. It would have been nice to have your son know his grandpa for sure. Thanks for sharing with us.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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thx so much gram! :))Sharyn
Comment from dmt1967
This is a nice poem my friend I like it very much I must go to the gym myself soon lol and yes there are beefy boys here as well lol thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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This is a nice poem my friend I like it very much I must go to the gym myself soon lol and yes there are beefy boys here as well lol thank you for sharing
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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thx so much dmt! :)Sharyn
Comment from Reddy Rimer
An excellent poem with a dreamy twist. I can imagine how your mind in sync with the rhythm of rowing, traveled into your past and felt that your dad was next to you.
The trip back was comfortable and intimate. I like the "back and forth" phrase, adding to the continuity of the poem, and the smooth transition to the present.
Connie
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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An excellent poem with a dreamy twist. I can imagine how your mind in sync with the rhythm of rowing, traveled into your past and felt that your dad was next to you.
The trip back was comfortable and intimate. I like the "back and forth" phrase, adding to the continuity of the poem, and the smooth transition to the present.
Connie
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Bless you for your informed reading & review Connie! :)Sharyn
Comment from Keri353
Awwww, very nice tribute to your father. I love the picture. Normally, I don't like pictures "askew", however, this really leads you deep into the poem. This was a fun read. It's always nice to hear when people have good relationships with their parents. Thanks so much for sharing this piece. Blessings, Keri
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Awwww, very nice tribute to your father. I love the picture. Normally, I don't like pictures "askew", however, this really leads you deep into the poem. This was a fun read. It's always nice to hear when people have good relationships with their parents. Thanks so much for sharing this piece. Blessings, Keri
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely six on this one Keri! So much appreciated and so encouraging!
Best wishes
Sharyn
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well deserved :)
Comment from Starlit Ink
Wow, isn't it interesting that exercise can take us to another place in time. I guess this was similar to the "runner's high" that you can get from running. How wonderful that you thought of your father when rowing. I enjoyed this touching story in a poem. It makes me want to get up off my butt and exercise. :)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Wow, isn't it interesting that exercise can take us to another place in time. I guess this was similar to the "runner's high" that you can get from running. How wonderful that you thought of your father when rowing. I enjoyed this touching story in a poem. It makes me want to get up off my butt and exercise. :)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thx Starlit - RESIST THE URGE!! IT HURTS! (I laugh - I've just got a personal trainer to give me a few tips and I can hardly walk today :)))))
:)Sharyn
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha Sharyn,
I like this one about the rowing machine and the thoughts that were going through your mind while rowing away. It makes the time and pain go faster. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha, Ginger Hawaiian Mermaid
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Aloha Sharyn,
I like this one about the rowing machine and the thoughts that were going through your mind while rowing away. It makes the time and pain go faster. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha, Ginger Hawaiian Mermaid
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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thx so much Ginger! you bet!
Comment from CR Delport
Not only do I admire your writing skills and this well written poem, but also the fact that you went to the gym. Writers can get inspiration in the strangest of places some time.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Not only do I admire your writing skills and this well written poem, but also the fact that you went to the gym. Writers can get inspiration in the strangest of places some time.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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I let my mind wander CR - can't stand "plugging in" to headphones etc - I use it as contemplation time instead (and nearly fall off the treadmill as a result to rush for pen & paper) :)S
Comment from Brumar97
Wow! I wasn't sure whether I would like a poem about going to the gym as I began reading. The part about your son made me smile, but the part about your father really touched my heart... the sign of a successful poem! thank you for sharing:)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Wow! I wasn't sure whether I would like a poem about going to the gym as I began reading. The part about your son made me smile, but the part about your father really touched my heart... the sign of a successful poem! thank you for sharing:)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Bless you for your lovely six on this one my dear! It was a special write for me. :)Sharyn
Comment from seren james
So you decided to go on the rowing machines in the gym. And it brought memories of you rowing in the river with father. Your poem is so well written it evokes all those visions of the past. It is full of imagery and life.
I really enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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So you decided to go on the rowing machines in the gym. And it brought memories of you rowing in the river with father. Your poem is so well written it evokes all those visions of the past. It is full of imagery and life.
I really enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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You got it seren - :)S