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Clerihew (see author's notes)30 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is an educational short poem. I had not heard of a clerihew before. Now I am wondering if it would be fun to try. I would suggest putting a comma after the word 'rare' in the third line, since you have two independent clauses there. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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This is an educational short poem. I had not heard of a clerihew before. Now I am wondering if it would be fun to try. I would suggest putting a comma after the word 'rare' in the third line, since you have two independent clauses there. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your gracious comments, personal sentiments and excellent syntax suggestion.
Comment from Shanbreen
I wonder if the loss of his front teeth was part of his dare-devil persona. =) Just the same, you deserve credit for writing a Clerihew which seems quite complicated. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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I wonder if the loss of his front teeth was part of his dare-devil persona. =) Just the same, you deserve credit for writing a Clerihew which seems quite complicated. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your personal sentiments and honest remarks.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-I haven't seen a clerihew on FS in a long time.
-You did a good job with the form and player.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I am not a fan of hockey, but you
do a good job showcasing Bobby Hull.
-I like your closing couplet showing
his ability in this sport, but it also
takes its toll on the players body.
-Very well done, teafor2.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-I haven't seen a clerihew on FS in a long time.
-You did a good job with the form and player.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I am not a fan of hockey, but you
do a good job showcasing Bobby Hull.
-I like your closing couplet showing
his ability in this sport, but it also
takes its toll on the players body.
-Very well done, teafor2.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your detailed, thoughtful and generous response. Your
comments are well received and encouraging.
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You are very welcome.
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:-)
Comment from Neonewman
Many hockey players have lost their teeth in the game. This is a wonderful style you've chosen to craft this piece in. Thank you for sharing your talent, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Many hockey players have lost their teeth in the game. This is a wonderful style you've chosen to craft this piece in. Thank you for sharing your talent, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your personal comments and gracious sentiments.
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My pleasure, tea.
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:-)
Comment from Nicki.B
This was short and fun and enjoyable! Again a completely new for of poetry I've not heard of as I'm so new to the poetry world and this platform. I like the rhyming, the imagery, the story. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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This was short and fun and enjoyable! Again a completely new for of poetry I've not heard of as I'm so new to the poetry world and this platform. I like the rhyming, the imagery, the story. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your honest response. Your comments and sentiments are
appreciated.
Comment from Steve Foreman
I have never heard of Bobby Hull (but I am neither Canadian nor an ice hocky fan!). But, after reading the criteria for a Clerihew, I see that this poem fits the bill perfectly. The last line is hilarious!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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I have never heard of Bobby Hull (but I am neither Canadian nor an ice hocky fan!). But, after reading the criteria for a Clerihew, I see that this poem fits the bill perfectly. The last line is hilarious!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your honest remarks, gracious sentiments and generous
rating.
Comment from Dr. Nad
Thank you so much for the authors note that provided understanding as to what you were writing. He did an excellent job and picked a great picture for the poking fun at Bobby Hull. Your poem had an excellent flow and a concise storyline to tell. And we feel sorry for him.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for the authors note that provided understanding as to what you were writing. He did an excellent job and picked a great picture for the poking fun at Bobby Hull. Your poem had an excellent flow and a concise storyline to tell. And we feel sorry for him.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your gracious comments and personal sentiments. Your
response is appreciated.
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You are most welcome my friend.
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:-)
Comment from Aussie
I know nothing of the player you speak of. Of course, I'm not American. I get the humor in him losing his front teeth (I thought they wore a mouth-guard? Ice-hockey is a rough sport, fast and furious chasing that small puck. Well done. K xx
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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I know nothing of the player you speak of. Of course, I'm not American. I get the humor in him losing his front teeth (I thought they wore a mouth-guard? Ice-hockey is a rough sport, fast and furious chasing that small puck. Well done. K xx
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your honest remarks, gracious sentiments and generous
rating. The main thing is got the gentle humor pr:-)
Comment from gansach
This is a new form of poetry for me--thank you for sharing it. It's quite interesting and you have provided a good example of what it should look like. As a hockey fan, I enjoyed it. One suggestion: I love your colorful presentation, but the font size and color are a bit hard to read. Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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This is a new form of poetry for me--thank you for sharing it. It's quite interesting and you have provided a good example of what it should look like. As a hockey fan, I enjoyed it. One suggestion: I love your colorful presentation, but the font size and color are a bit hard to read. Well done!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your honest comments, gracious remarks and excellent suggestions.
Comment from RodG
The cherihew is a form I was unfamiliar with. I revered Bobby Hull when he played for the Chicago Black Hawks. Indeed he had rare skills, but I never thought about his missing front teeth. Rod
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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The cherihew is a form I was unfamiliar with. I revered Bobby Hull when he played for the Chicago Black Hawks. Indeed he had rare skills, but I never thought about his missing front teeth. Rod
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your honest remarks and shared sentiments...This hall of
famer will always be revered:-)