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Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. It is bedazzling. I love the poem. Dream, make the world a better place. Most of our dreams do not become reality. But they help us move forward with style and grace.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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I love the picture. It is bedazzling. I love the poem. Dream, make the world a better place. Most of our dreams do not become reality. But they help us move forward with style and grace.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you elliejean. Glad you liked my fireworks and dream verse.
Comment from sunnilicious
I found this poem to be so enjoyable to read. It is loving, fun and motivational. Good repeat lines. Well thought out and nicely written. Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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I found this poem to be so enjoyable to read. It is loving, fun and motivational. Good repeat lines. Well thought out and nicely written. Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much sunnilicious. I keep trying.
Comment from ravenblack
great sestina! really like your use of "flair/flare" throughout the poem, particularly " Sweet smile appears as lips loose edges flair" as you make a smile akin to a firework of joy. excellent write!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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great sestina! really like your use of "flair/flare" throughout the poem, particularly " Sweet smile appears as lips loose edges flair" as you make a smile akin to a firework of joy. excellent write!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thank you Ravenblack you see into it very well. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from jppoet
Though the RULES of writing a SESTINA are longer and more convoluted than a sestina itself -- and while I say that SIMPLICITY IS THE SOUL OF SYMPATHY, in a faith almost blind, these 5 stars are assigned. I can only suppose
that, given your gift of poetry, you have decided on a new dance in this exotic domain. And do so, ¨BRILLIANTLY!
Forgetting the do's and don'ts of sestinas, the profile of this poem would hang high on any altar of poetry.
I liked too the affinity of its photo.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Though the RULES of writing a SESTINA are longer and more convoluted than a sestina itself -- and while I say that SIMPLICITY IS THE SOUL OF SYMPATHY, in a faith almost blind, these 5 stars are assigned. I can only suppose
that, given your gift of poetry, you have decided on a new dance in this exotic domain. And do so, ¨BRILLIANTLY!
Forgetting the do's and don'ts of sestinas, the profile of this poem would hang high on any altar of poetry.
I liked too the affinity of its photo.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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That so much for this wonderful review.
Comment from RJFunston
Good afternoon,
You did a wonderful, thoughtful job with this poem. Everything stands out, the meaning is so clear and precise. I wish you the best of luck on the contest. Have a great day.
Robert
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Good afternoon,
You did a wonderful, thoughtful job with this poem. Everything stands out, the meaning is so clear and precise. I wish you the best of luck on the contest. Have a great day.
Robert
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you Robert. Very nice review.
Comment from Bill Schott
Sestinas are one of my favorite forms to appreciate, because they need lots of editing to make sense. So when they do.. Bravo. There is one tiny spelling glitch. Flair can mean everything except a flame or sparkling thing, as that is a flare. I think they can still work as homophones and be appreciated.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Sestinas are one of my favorite forms to appreciate, because they need lots of editing to make sense. So when they do.. Bravo. There is one tiny spelling glitch. Flair can mean everything except a flame or sparkling thing, as that is a flare. I think they can still work as homophones and be appreciated.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Ok Bill, good point.
Comment from Righteous Riter
This piece meets the criteria of the Sestina poem. The rhyme scheme is effective as this piece flows well and the harmony is where it needs to be. This piece delivers a message that is clear and to the point.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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This piece meets the criteria of the Sestina poem. The rhyme scheme is effective as this piece flows well and the harmony is where it needs to be. This piece delivers a message that is clear and to the point.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Righteous.
Comment from Eigle Rull
This is so beautiful! I found no errors at all. This piece was just great, giving a message to those who read it. It was smooth and easy to read. It captured me at the beginning, and kept my interest to the very end. I wish you good luck in the contest. This is VERY good.
Always with respect
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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This is so beautiful! I found no errors at all. This piece was just great, giving a message to those who read it. It was smooth and easy to read. It captured me at the beginning, and kept my interest to the very end. I wish you good luck in the contest. This is VERY good.
Always with respect
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you do much for visiting and commenting. I appreciate the time and effort.
Comment from neharika.m
hi, I am unable to comment on the technical part of the poem, however, it made a wonderful reading for me. The verse flowed beautifully. No doubt we all have it in us, need is to use the potential.Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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hi, I am unable to comment on the technical part of the poem, however, it made a wonderful reading for me. The verse flowed beautifully. No doubt we all have it in us, need is to use the potential.Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thamk you so much for taking the time to read it. And give a wonderful review.
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
Wow! This poem reads wonderfully! I am new to this form, so I had to reread it several times... I think that I liked it more every time that I read it. The best I can tell this poem fulfills all of the form criteria for the contest. It reads beautifully both silently and aloud and I feel that I have gained a deeper understanding of this form from reading this uplifting piece... Thank you!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Wow! This poem reads wonderfully! I am new to this form, so I had to reread it several times... I think that I liked it more every time that I read it. The best I can tell this poem fulfills all of the form criteria for the contest. It reads beautifully both silently and aloud and I feel that I have gained a deeper understanding of this form from reading this uplifting piece... Thank you!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Gypsy Starchild. It is a very difficult format to accommodate, I hope I did it justice. Not only do you have to reuse the same words over and over, you have to come at them in a different manner each time too. I am please you enjoyed it.
