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False profits-To the music of 'Sugar Man'16 total reviews
Comment from tbacha58
My dearest James, I read in one of your answering comment to me , that you are not writing nowadays, I noticed that, and I read something about not being in the mood, and now I triggered your aim to go back to writing, due to my appreciation reading your stories of the past.
My dearest son, here I saw you won the 1st prize in a contest winner. So here I come as a mum and friend, nothing ever should stop in your way, from climbing to the top of the mountain. You need your full strength, you need strong self assurance, you need your thoughts through your brain, to help you decide how and what to plan to reach this Peak of the mountain. Planning and consistency, and perseverance is the only way to arrive with pride that you arrived on your own, self assurance, tenacious, and Love to the ones you Love, who will be so proud of you when you get up there. Your choice James, and you do have a choice, either it will deny you to reach your goal, or it will help you succeed.
Nobody can help you to become who you want to become, except YOU.
Feel alive daily, feel grateful daily, love who you are, love your home, love your bed, love your walking anywhere you want, love to breath in your happiness with your beautiful lady, love James each Moment that passes by, why? because it`s gone and it will never ever come back, today Now is what counts to remain alive, good health, give & take, dance to the music, love and make love, feel the air you breath, look at your mirror, and admire what you see, YOU James, the strong guy who will make the right choices to become a successful writer. Just decide, and go of it. Your writing is who you are, and who you want to become, help others indirectly, and directly through your coming book.
I wrote to you, exactly as I would have written to my own son, I passed through that with my boys, I was there for them in ups and in their down.
I will do the same with you. I promise you that, I do feel a connection that will grow as long as I am alive. I read through you James, and I loved and respected your depth. Thank God you came out alive from a shaking past. Heal now, don't self pity yourself because of any kind of wounds you still have from the past, your brain is alive, your thoughts are alive, your fingers can type, and you have what God offered you, a beautiful wonderful wife who is standing by you, holding your hand to grow.
Do not disappoint her, make it happen for both of you , out of love.
I do love you both, and I will always be here for you.
This is my personal email if ever one day you feel like sharing in private anything, I am here for you, we can even share pictures, you can get to know my family, and I will also get to see the beauty of both your souls that exist.
I will leave you, from Montreal, I send you all my love with my stars to shine above you both. Love you both Mum. xoxo
my email.... tbacha@videotron.ca
Please James, something you need to know about me, I will never wait for a second day answer if ever you want to write , I do not like to add pressure, even with my boys, this is what I always tell them, ma, no pressure to call me or write to me, I will understand your circumstances, so feel free to have another friend and mum, who will expect nothing. But just be happy for you. xoxo
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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My dearest James, I read in one of your answering comment to me , that you are not writing nowadays, I noticed that, and I read something about not being in the mood, and now I triggered your aim to go back to writing, due to my appreciation reading your stories of the past.
My dearest son, here I saw you won the 1st prize in a contest winner. So here I come as a mum and friend, nothing ever should stop in your way, from climbing to the top of the mountain. You need your full strength, you need strong self assurance, you need your thoughts through your brain, to help you decide how and what to plan to reach this Peak of the mountain. Planning and consistency, and perseverance is the only way to arrive with pride that you arrived on your own, self assurance, tenacious, and Love to the ones you Love, who will be so proud of you when you get up there. Your choice James, and you do have a choice, either it will deny you to reach your goal, or it will help you succeed.
Nobody can help you to become who you want to become, except YOU.
Feel alive daily, feel grateful daily, love who you are, love your home, love your bed, love your walking anywhere you want, love to breath in your happiness with your beautiful lady, love James each Moment that passes by, why? because it`s gone and it will never ever come back, today Now is what counts to remain alive, good health, give & take, dance to the music, love and make love, feel the air you breath, look at your mirror, and admire what you see, YOU James, the strong guy who will make the right choices to become a successful writer. Just decide, and go of it. Your writing is who you are, and who you want to become, help others indirectly, and directly through your coming book.
I wrote to you, exactly as I would have written to my own son, I passed through that with my boys, I was there for them in ups and in their down.
I will do the same with you. I promise you that, I do feel a connection that will grow as long as I am alive. I read through you James, and I loved and respected your depth. Thank God you came out alive from a shaking past. Heal now, don't self pity yourself because of any kind of wounds you still have from the past, your brain is alive, your thoughts are alive, your fingers can type, and you have what God offered you, a beautiful wonderful wife who is standing by you, holding your hand to grow.
Do not disappoint her, make it happen for both of you , out of love.
I do love you both, and I will always be here for you.
This is my personal email if ever one day you feel like sharing in private anything, I am here for you, we can even share pictures, you can get to know my family, and I will also get to see the beauty of both your souls that exist.
I will leave you, from Montreal, I send you all my love with my stars to shine above you both. Love you both Mum. xoxo
my email.... tbacha@videotron.ca
Please James, something you need to know about me, I will never wait for a second day answer if ever you want to write , I do not like to add pressure, even with my boys, this is what I always tell them, ma, no pressure to call me or write to me, I will understand your circumstances, so feel free to have another friend and mum, who will expect nothing. But just be happy for you. xoxo
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Hi Mom,
yes, indeed you are a Mom, your unconditional love spreads like a wildfire... and of course, what you say is so true... I shall take a deep breath and prepare for the next steps of who I am and where I shall take it... everyone's got something going on in their lives, I know I am no different... but know I hold no self pity for myself... I let that log fall from my shoulders long ago... and I am so grateful for everyday I get to spend on this earth... my lack of motivation comes out of questioning my validity, at times it seems so pointless... I remember a few years back when I started writing about my past and my relationship with my parents, or should I say lack of it? All it did was make me live in the past... the past I was trying to get past, not re-live... so this time around I have only touched the sides concerning my Father and Mother, but it's hard to discount them, as they were a big part of my dysfunction... but never the less, you my dear lady have warmed my heart considerably with your concern and love for me... it means so much to know I have such a connection with a soul that shares every bit of herself with the wounded ducks that come into her circle... you are a very special person who has taken a spot in my heart... thank you! Thank you for your encouragement.... thank you for such a wonderful review in the form of this pep-talk and thank you for being you... love you Mom, always. James xxxxx
Comment from Kiki12
I can see why this won the contest, it has such a smooth flow and the tempo is felt with ease. there is such a great message here, and it's a sad reality that people have believed they could 'buy' their way into heaven at their own expense (literally) while the greedy false-promise makers get rich. you have many note-worthy lines in this, but i'll past a couple of my favorites below :)
Just here to serve my words
With my hands wrapped in your pockets
all the promises and deceit are paved within your gold
Very nicely penned-
Kiki
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2013
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I can see why this won the contest, it has such a smooth flow and the tempo is felt with ease. there is such a great message here, and it's a sad reality that people have believed they could 'buy' their way into heaven at their own expense (literally) while the greedy false-promise makers get rich. you have many note-worthy lines in this, but i'll past a couple of my favorites below :)
Just here to serve my words
With my hands wrapped in your pockets
all the promises and deceit are paved within your gold
Very nicely penned-
Kiki
Comment Written 26-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2013
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Hi Kiki,
thank you very much for this kind review and generous rating. I don't usually do that many prompts, but this one was because I grew up with Rodriquez's music and had too give it a go. It wasn't that widely received, I don't think many people knew of him or his music. Take care and I be reading you real soon.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from Indie Skreet
Okay, I don't know why I want to six you on it - perhaps because I think it is first-rate ......... I don't do religion, but really, I do think this is an exceptional write. warmly Indie :)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Okay, I don't know why I want to six you on it - perhaps because I think it is first-rate ......... I don't do religion, but really, I do think this is an exceptional write. warmly Indie :)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Hi Indie,
I don't do religion either, but consider myself to be on a spiritual track. This was written for a writing prompt, I don't usually do them, but Rodriguez was one of my favorites so I couldn't resist. I am truly humbled by your six for this and appreciate your support very much, you are a sweetie, take care.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from reconciled
Sorry I missed this one James....Funny I was just talking to someone about something like this...There are some...who will not take money for preaching His Word....When you find someone like that...listen. I'm not saying a laborer is not worth his hire...but...lets face it...some of this is very reminesent of motives viperous like Love pointed out when He walked as flesh. Great read bro love you Michael
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Sorry I missed this one James....Funny I was just talking to someone about something like this...There are some...who will not take money for preaching His Word....When you find someone like that...listen. I'm not saying a laborer is not worth his hire...but...lets face it...some of this is very reminesent of motives viperous like Love pointed out when He walked as flesh. Great read bro love you Michael
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Hi Michael,
thank you my friend, it's not the giving of the money,it's the accumulated wealth from people that are after salvation and should be funneled to the rightful area's of need. To con the only real thing that provides our true spirit, that's the crime.
Thank you so much for your review my friend, your generosity doesn't go unnoticed, hope all is well and life's roses are flowing your way.
Kindest thoughts,
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Not yet bro....but I'm expecting a knock at the door...any second now...-wink- goodnight...
Comment from adewpearl
nice touches of alliteration like in make my message and in preacher/profit and redemption for the righteous
love the character development and commentary in phrases like - with my hands wrapped in your pockets
I like the repent/spent rhyme
strong social commentary in good poetic form
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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nice touches of alliteration like in make my message and in preacher/profit and redemption for the righteous
love the character development and commentary in phrases like - with my hands wrapped in your pockets
I like the repent/spent rhyme
strong social commentary in good poetic form
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Hi Brooke,
thank you for a wonderful review and this generous rating.
Kindest wishes, xx
Comment from trimple
Hey James
An interesting poem you have written here.
Indeed the world has always and will continue to always take advantage of the blind and ignorant, in every aspect of each and every society. Be it religion or anything else.
Opportunists are part of life.
I very much enjoyed this unique poem
Kind regards
Trimple
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Hey James
An interesting poem you have written here.
Indeed the world has always and will continue to always take advantage of the blind and ignorant, in every aspect of each and every society. Be it religion or anything else.
Opportunists are part of life.
I very much enjoyed this unique poem
Kind regards
Trimple
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Hi Trimple,
thanks a heap for your review and your generosity.
I saw the prompt and being a Rodriguez fan and loving he's unique style I couldn't help but put something in.
Back in the 70s he was quite the political hero among the teenagers and his words were pure poetry.
I also couldn't resist writing something about the gullibility of some people thinking there soul would be saved for giving there money to greedy boom business that is religion.
Take care.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from ravenblack
I agree w/your message - I can't stand false profits, err, prophets who promise the fast track for cash. it's just that this song sounds like a blues song trying to be a blues song. the tone needs to be more focused. never heard of sugarman, by the way. does he play the blues?
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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I agree w/your message - I can't stand false profits, err, prophets who promise the fast track for cash. it's just that this song sounds like a blues song trying to be a blues song. the tone needs to be more focused. never heard of sugarman, by the way. does he play the blues?
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Hi Raven B,
The Sugarman is aka Rodriguez an artist back in the 70s, his music was unique and I suppose it did have a blues edge to it but it was more involved with social issues, a real story teller. His most famous album was called Cold Fact, Google him, he's one of those music geniuses that never go out of style,not sure if he's still going but really worth a listen. So this rhythm of this song has only a couple of beat changes all the way throughout if you hear the song you'll know the reason for the lyrics. I would like to thank you for your review and your interest and of course your stars, all very appreciated.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from Titanx9
I can see this as an eye-opening song with its smooth lyrics. You are right, folks are being taken in by charlatans, but they, too, have a responsibility to do their homework. If they read Hebrews, Chapters 6-9, they will see they have an intercessor, Jesus, who they can go to directly for all their needs. I really like this piece!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I can see this as an eye-opening song with its smooth lyrics. You are right, folks are being taken in by charlatans, but they, too, have a responsibility to do their homework. If they read Hebrews, Chapters 6-9, they will see they have an intercessor, Jesus, who they can go to directly for all their needs. I really like this piece!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi Titanx,
thank you for your insightful review, I appreciate your time and rating.
Kindest wishes, xx
Comment from Righteous Riter
The message is clear and to the point. The piece flows well as the harmony is where it needs to be. The passion of the writer is felt as my attention is captured from the beginning and held to the end. Good job.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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The message is clear and to the point. The piece flows well as the harmony is where it needs to be. The passion of the writer is felt as my attention is captured from the beginning and held to the end. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi RR,
thank you for this kind review and I appreciate your time and rating.
Kindest wishes.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Without the music the lyrics fail to convey the message adequately. Profit or prophet...a Play in words...prophets Out for profits. Irreverence leads to the back door of Heaven they say and this piece fills the bill. A protest sing it is ( I may be wrong) that parallels the scene where Jesus throws the money changers out of the temple. The meter and syllabic counts are precise and the verses are easy to understand. Sounds preachy but how one would sing it could change that. A good and honest effort.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Without the music the lyrics fail to convey the message adequately. Profit or prophet...a Play in words...prophets Out for profits. Irreverence leads to the back door of Heaven they say and this piece fills the bill. A protest sing it is ( I may be wrong) that parallels the scene where Jesus throws the money changers out of the temple. The meter and syllabic counts are precise and the verses are easy to understand. Sounds preachy but how one would sing it could change that. A good and honest effort.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi Stephen,
thanks for your review and comments.
Regards
