There Are Moments
Feelings Contest Submission8 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Idamarty,
You have expressed your feelings of loss so very eloquently. The loss of a mother is a loss like no other.
This poem reads and flows well, and I have no suggestion for improvement. I particularly liked the following:
There are moments when I would give
anything to speak to you once more,
to hear your laugh, to hold you close,
to say, ``I love you mom.
(Precious moments are a gift. If they could only remain frozen in time ~ forevermore)
And so ...
We can't always follow the Ones we love,
so we keep them safely tucked within our hearts.
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Hello Idamarty,
You have expressed your feelings of loss so very eloquently. The loss of a mother is a loss like no other.
This poem reads and flows well, and I have no suggestion for improvement. I particularly liked the following:
There are moments when I would give
anything to speak to you once more,
to hear your laugh, to hold you close,
to say, ``I love you mom.
(Precious moments are a gift. If they could only remain frozen in time ~ forevermore)
And so ...
We can't always follow the Ones we love,
so we keep them safely tucked within our hearts.
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 12-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Patricia1
A beautifully written poem with a perfect picture to go with it. This one pulled at my hear in such a way that I feel the raw hurting emotion of loss almost reduce me to tears. I have experienced loss of loved ones but not a child. I can't understand the magnitude of such a loss & hope I don't ever have to. So sad but such a good job of expression.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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A beautifully written poem with a perfect picture to go with it. This one pulled at my hear in such a way that I feel the raw hurting emotion of loss almost reduce me to tears. I have experienced loss of loved ones but not a child. I can't understand the magnitude of such a loss & hope I don't ever have to. So sad but such a good job of expression.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it..blessings.
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I'm sorry I meant to say pulled at my heart. You probably knew that's what I meant but I still wanted to clarify. :)
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. I lost children over forty years ago. I wish I could say it gets easier. It doesn't but the moments of anguish come further and further apart. Great work.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I lost children over forty years ago. I wish I could say it gets easier. It doesn't but the moments of anguish come further and further apart. Great work.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it..blessings.
Comment from hifein
beautiful free verse tribute to your 'mom'. you express your warm feelings, feeling of loss and regrets clearly and very poetically. no rhyme necessary. this is very nice.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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beautiful free verse tribute to your 'mom'. you express your warm feelings, feeling of loss and regrets clearly and very poetically. no rhyme necessary. this is very nice.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it..blessings.
Comment from retiredprof55
What a wonderful tribute to your mother. I really feel you emotion as I read your poem. However, I wish for something that would make it more poetic: meter, rhyme, metaphor. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2013
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What a wonderful tribute to your mother. I really feel you emotion as I read your poem. However, I wish for something that would make it more poetic: meter, rhyme, metaphor. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2013
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Hello,
This was a free verse poem expressing my sincere emotions about missing my mother. I believe it should be up to the poet to decide how best to put down their feelings and as to which kind of poetic form they will use. I don`t understand how I rate a four because you felt you wanted a different kind of poem. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...blessings.
Comment from Child of the King
Well written and heartfelt. I miss my mom at times but not like that. I was not as close as you were to yours as I have some hurtful memories to overcome. Kudos
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Well written and heartfelt. I miss my mom at times but not like that. I was not as close as you were to yours as I have some hurtful memories to overcome. Kudos
Comment Written 09-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it..blessings.
Comment from beccabootie123
wow from start to finish, I felt this one. the picture started it and I was misty eyed by the end. great write. sorry that you miss mom..me too. color palate works well and formatted for easy reading . good luck in the contest. and well done
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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wow from start to finish, I felt this one. the picture started it and I was misty eyed by the end. great write. sorry that you miss mom..me too. color palate works well and formatted for easy reading . good luck in the contest. and well done
Comment Written 08-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it..blessings.
Comment from poetic1988
beautiful poem,
i wish there was away I could see the discription for this poem
I don't like to assume, but it feels like this poem can be a toss between the a two either a death of someone & remembering them
or a breaking up & wishing you can forget them but can't
either way I feel this poem is about a brokenheart girl.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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beautiful poem,
i wish there was away I could see the discription for this poem
I don't like to assume, but it feels like this poem can be a toss between the a two either a death of someone & remembering them
or a breaking up & wishing you can forget them but can't
either way I feel this poem is about a brokenheart girl.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it..blessings.
