All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Through My Open Door"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from poetbear
We need to come through it and respect the work you have done here.
Creatively written and makes sense.
Every poetic aspect employed well.
A must read for topic and talent.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
We need to come through it and respect the work you have done here.
Creatively written and makes sense.
Every poetic aspect employed well.
A must read for topic and talent.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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so glad you enjoyed this one my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from MissMerri
Wow! What a fantastic poem! It is full of vivid imagery and creative phrases, great words that vibrate together with a resounding music and all of that works together in perfect synchronization to create the scene. Your readers can't help but see, hear, taste and feel just what you are describing. Such a wonderful poem. No wonder it was a winner! Congratulations. I'm very glad to see this poem recognized by the mysterious FanStory committee. You are very talented.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
Wow! What a fantastic poem! It is full of vivid imagery and creative phrases, great words that vibrate together with a resounding music and all of that works together in perfect synchronization to create the scene. Your readers can't help but see, hear, taste and feel just what you are describing. Such a wonderful poem. No wonder it was a winner! Congratulations. I'm very glad to see this poem recognized by the mysterious FanStory committee. You are very talented.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Bless you Miss Merri! and congrats to YOU TOO for sweeping this one! It was a gorgeous piece and I don't know how I missed it when it first was posted.
Blessings for your lovely six!
:)Sharyn
Comment from vkmack
How did I miss this one? It won't let me give you six stars because I gush, but here goes. Short hand: orchid sky intricately latticed, nature's paradoxical jungle, quiet violet ocean horizon,frigid tumbleweeds,the early morning rooster shepherding his harem into the future. It's all magic. You just transport us into your world, even if we go kicking and screaming. lol
Wonderful work. Congrats!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
How did I miss this one? It won't let me give you six stars because I gush, but here goes. Short hand: orchid sky intricately latticed, nature's paradoxical jungle, quiet violet ocean horizon,frigid tumbleweeds,the early morning rooster shepherding his harem into the future. It's all magic. You just transport us into your world, even if we go kicking and screaming. lol
Wonderful work. Congrats!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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oh how funny! I was looking at YOUR piece at the very same time! just sent you something too - great minds, hmm? I'm really loving your stuff vk - so glad we've "fanned" each other. I always appreciate originality and you have it in spades! :)Sharyn
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Ditto, Sharyn. Yep, I finished that and your review popped into my inbox. lol
Yep, great minds.
Vista K
Comment from trimple
What a wonderful atmosphere and pleasant moment you conjure here Visionary.
I could smell your grass through the coffee as my ass caressed the seams of Hawaiian dreams from here,
in wet n cloudy England.
Now the only 1 teeny weeny incy wincy thing that I felt was a bit outa kilter was ...
"In old and overstuffed, worn"
Blame my ignorance, but I wondered if perhaps adding a (my) or an (an) would read better? or am I barking up the wrong palm? ""In my old and overstuffed, worn"
None the less a very well written and wholesome read.
Kind regards Trimple:)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2013
What a wonderful atmosphere and pleasant moment you conjure here Visionary.
I could smell your grass through the coffee as my ass caressed the seams of Hawaiian dreams from here,
in wet n cloudy England.
Now the only 1 teeny weeny incy wincy thing that I felt was a bit outa kilter was ...
"In old and overstuffed, worn"
Blame my ignorance, but I wondered if perhaps adding a (my) or an (an) would read better? or am I barking up the wrong palm? ""In my old and overstuffed, worn"
None the less a very well written and wholesome read.
Kind regards Trimple:)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2013
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hey there, trimple ... I could certainly add one of those for ease of reading, no sweat ... I try to cut down to essentials, but sometimes cut too much! I'll go back and take another peek! :)Sharyn
Comment from mermaids
I like the images you describe here, starting the day with real cream in your coffee and birds chirping. This is a poem that makes the reader feel good and look forward to early morning and starting the day.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
I like the images you describe here, starting the day with real cream in your coffee and birds chirping. This is a poem that makes the reader feel good and look forward to early morning and starting the day.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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bless you mermaids! :)Sharyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the beauty you watch as you wake in the morning. i ienjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the beauty you watch as you wake in the morning. i ienjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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thx sweets! :)Sharyn
Comment from Ekim777
I think your poem begins with "Orchid sky..." And then it carries us through a plethora of multi visual images that overwhelm our senses. I think the poem ends "through the open door." The rooster shepherding his harem into the future might be added as a postscript. Best wishes. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
I think your poem begins with "Orchid sky..." And then it carries us through a plethora of multi visual images that overwhelm our senses. I think the poem ends "through the open door." The rooster shepherding his harem into the future might be added as a postscript. Best wishes. -Ekim777
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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thx Ekim!
Comment from Starlit Ink
A simple moment with a cup of coffee can have a powerful meaning. If we take time to see the view and notice the blooms around us, then the day will be more meaningful. You captured this truth in a spectacular free verse that should do great in the contest. Bravo!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
A simple moment with a cup of coffee can have a powerful meaning. If we take time to see the view and notice the blooms around us, then the day will be more meaningful. You captured this truth in a spectacular free verse that should do great in the contest. Bravo!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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Bless you, Starlit - my morning coffee tasted especially good this morning when accompanied by your magic SIX!!! (for which I thank you so much!)
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from Poetic Friend
This poem should do well in the contest, for it has all the qaulity of a well-written free verse
1) Perfect line breaks
2) Smooth flow
3) Alliteration
4) Metaphors
5) Unique imagery
4) Profound message.
With all that, this poem should place well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
This poem should do well in the contest, for it has all the qaulity of a well-written free verse
1) Perfect line breaks
2) Smooth flow
3) Alliteration
4) Metaphors
5) Unique imagery
4) Profound message.
With all that, this poem should place well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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thx so much PF!
Comment from prayingpoet
Sounds lovely! I love to visit Hawaii, but me thinks living there would be oh so much better! I liked the way the poem flowed in this free verse. Easy to read, and allowed me to "feel" and "smell" the breeze and fresh grass.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
Sounds lovely! I love to visit Hawaii, but me thinks living there would be oh so much better! I liked the way the poem flowed in this free verse. Easy to read, and allowed me to "feel" and "smell" the breeze and fresh grass.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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Join me for coffee any time pp! :)Sharyn