Commentary and Philosophy
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Adrift to Dream"My thoughts about t
17 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
fabulous picture of the billowing clouds and you words compliment it perfectly enjoyed the read thank you my friend gazzagodbod
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2013
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fabulous picture of the billowing clouds and you words compliment it perfectly enjoyed the read thank you my friend gazzagodbod
Comment Written 03-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Congratulations on the poem style, it appears you nailed it :-) I enjoyed the flow of the words and the meaning of getting away, from crowds and into places of solitude. Your photo is perfect. Great job, Carolyn
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Congratulations on the poem style, it appears you nailed it :-) I enjoyed the flow of the words and the meaning of getting away, from crowds and into places of solitude. Your photo is perfect. Great job, Carolyn
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Thank you notesandmore. The solitude gets me focused.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem vividly conveys the mindset of one who wishes to transcend his mundane surroundings and experience something higher, nobler.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Your well-written poem vividly conveys the mindset of one who wishes to transcend his mundane surroundings and experience something higher, nobler.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Thank you Janice. Glad you like the view from the heights.
Comment from Curt Mongold
I asked Lisa to explain this form to me, and she said I had to ask someone else, but here I see it all explained for me, so thank you for that!
Sounds like a modified quatern in ways, and your words make a great go of it in keeping the message tight and easily understandable.
Might have to give it a go.
Well done,
Curt
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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I asked Lisa to explain this form to me, and she said I had to ask someone else, but here I see it all explained for me, so thank you for that!
Sounds like a modified quatern in ways, and your words make a great go of it in keeping the message tight and easily understandable.
Might have to give it a go.
Well done,
Curt
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Thank you Curt.
Comment from L. Sherman
I'm still floored that my little 'project' with "Silent Regret" has somehow spawned an entirely new style/form of poem...
Having said that, I feel like both Richie's and your poem both outshine mine, if only because you intentionally created the poems to fit my 'format'.
Your repetitions flow into one another so smoothly that it's hard to detect at first, and it's lovely that there's this gradual ascension happening as you 'climb' up (or rather, read down) the poem.
Lovely, lovely, lovely.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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I'm still floored that my little 'project' with "Silent Regret" has somehow spawned an entirely new style/form of poem...
Having said that, I feel like both Richie's and your poem both outshine mine, if only because you intentionally created the poems to fit my 'format'.
Your repetitions flow into one another so smoothly that it's hard to detect at first, and it's lovely that there's this gradual ascension happening as you 'climb' up (or rather, read down) the poem.
Lovely, lovely, lovely.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Thank you, you created a lovely format that was interesting and fun to write. I found the key is selecting the key phrases, to make sure hey stand on their own within the conceptual theme. Way to go you pioneer poetess.!
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I still firmly maintain that I wasn't trying to pioneer or innovate a thing! Merely to step out of my comfort zone and try something different. :)
Comment from Robin Gilmor
I do enjoy the repeat lines. They make for a lovely rhythm and adds extra
interest to your already beautifully written verse. Billowing is such a poetic word and is clearly enhanced by your beautiful picture. Great display. Robin :)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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I do enjoy the repeat lines. They make for a lovely rhythm and adds extra
interest to your already beautifully written verse. Billowing is such a poetic word and is clearly enhanced by your beautiful picture. Great display. Robin :)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Good morning. A wonderful review. Thank you, Robin.
Comment from PoeticXscape
Good rhyming.Billowing is a great way to describe clouds.
I like how you repeated line. This is a great style that was easy to read.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Good rhyming.Billowing is a great way to describe clouds.
I like how you repeated line. This is a great style that was easy to read.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Thank you PoeticXscape.
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha Treiscel,
This form is new to me. You sure created a beautiful poem that Lifted me into the painted sky, among billowing clouds. The color and photo works so well. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha,
Ginger Hawaiian Mermaid
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Aloha Treiscel,
This form is new to me. You sure created a beautiful poem that Lifted me into the painted sky, among billowing clouds. The color and photo works so well. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha,
Ginger Hawaiian Mermaid
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Aloha, Hawian Mermaid. Love the comments and rating. Thank you.
Comment from Maustin
"Away from loud annoying crowds
To meditate in solitude
My fears released, then peace ensued
Adrift among billowing clouds"
Your work is very moving. Made me pause several times. I love the last stanza. Good presentation.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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"Away from loud annoying crowds
To meditate in solitude
My fears released, then peace ensued
Adrift among billowing clouds"
Your work is very moving. Made me pause several times. I love the last stanza. Good presentation.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Thank you Maustin.
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So welcome, Treischel. Blessings always...
Comment from White Feather
What a beautiful and perfect photo for this tranquil poem. The style was interesting and I'm glad for your notes. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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What a beautiful and perfect photo for this tranquil poem. The style was interesting and I'm glad for your notes. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Thank you White Feather.
