Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

dirt/in/grained/in/my/pores - I only get 6 syllables in the line that should have 7
all the other lines have a good count for the nonet
vivid descriptive detail that captures the essence of a war scene
strong verbs like shout and explode add to the intensity
Brooke

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013

Deary me I didn't notice that. Thanks Brooke for your thorough review as always. :) Jaq x

Comment from GarthL

Excellent

Beautifully descriptive nonet depicting war. I could hear it and feel it but wonder if we'll ever realise the insanity involved and ban them. The idealist in me sorry!! It's no way for intelligent people to sort out differences but then who said we're intelligent?! Good luck in the contest. LiveLoveLight'n'Peace, Garth

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013

Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I will have all the time in the world after next week to get stuck into reviewing others. Peace and love Garth

reply by GarthL on 28-Jan-2013

Just thought I'd have a quick look but I'll hang a little longer Jaq, namaste!

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This dramatically depicts the realities of war, any war, while alluding to one battle experienced personally. "Dirt ingrained in my pores" is a particularly realistic line. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013

Thank you so much Jeanie, always appreciated.

Comment from Tinkadoll

Exceptional

I love this! I hope you win the contest! I love the last two lines, "this is war", the most. I also love "listen now as guns fire". The art work goes really well with it too! Good luck on the contest!

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013

Thank you so very much for your very special review.

Comment from elliejean

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. This is a true vision of war. There is nothing pretty or glorious about it. It is true, war has been around since the beginning of man. But we should find a way to get rid of it. Great work.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013

Thanks so much elliejean, much appreciated.

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

battle-weary,scarred and impotent
many voices shout in anger
dirt ingrained in my pores
listen now as guns fire
insurgents gather
soldiers taken
tanks explode
this is
war


Excellent written nonet reflecting war. GL in the contest

regards
tia

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013

Thanks so much Tia, as always x

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hello. Very moving and somber choice of words to bring your attached picture come to life. Excellent work here. I could literally feel the oil seep into my pores from reading your Nonet. Good job and good luck in the contest. Cheers.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013

Thanks so much as always Benjamin.

Comment from DragonSkulls

Excellent

This is an excellent entry into the contest. I have to admit, the pic throws me off just a tad. Thank you for jumping in my high dollar prompt. Good luck in the booths. /Ron

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013

Ohhh noooo I put the wrong one on. It was very late for me when I posted it. I've changed it but if that is against the rules I'll take that one off again.

Thanks for your kind review.

reply by DragonSkulls on 28-Jan-2013

Ahhh, a whole lot better, friend. Thanks for joining in again.

Comment from Black_Oxygen

Excellent

soldiers taken
tanks explode
this is
war

I like the way this poetry is framed. It flows nicely
and holds the reader's interest from start to finish.
Thank Your for your creation.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013

Thank you so much Black_Oxygen for your review.

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

This is war and it goes on and on everywhere now in the world killing and destroying innocent lives. You got your thougths well arranged in this work.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013

Thank you so much Ola x