Comment from poetic1988

Excellent

Beautiful poem,
& congratz on the win of the contest

shooting star stretches
within clear lake's reflection
wishes drip with dreams

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it ... ;o)

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

"wishes drip with dreams" - love the alternating alliteration! totally cool line :)

this was a great entry - congrats on first place and thanx for sharing! :-)

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013

thanks!, shel - so glad you liked the last line - thanks for pointing out the alternating alliteration which kind of just happened without conscious intention - appreciate all your comments ... ;o) kat

Comment from Wartune

Needs Improvement

This poem is mediocre at best. Your words are jumbled and all over the place. I don't know how you could Even win this contest unless it was Fixed!!!!!

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 Comment Written 03-Feb-2013

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Afternoon, Art,

Congratulations on this fine win with a most
spectacular 5-7-5 poem. So often, these
short forms say nothing, but yours is eloquent
and offers the reader a dreamy respite during
the read. The alliteration of 's' and 'd' are
well executed. The poem forms a concrete image
and was a pleasure to read.

Ray

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013

Hi Ray,

Thanks for your wonderful review and congratulations. So glad you enjoyed Shooting Star. This was a fun challenge for me as it took lots of concentration before that 3rd line finally popped into my mind - the ah-ha satori moment. Appreciate all your comments and pointing out the poetic devices used.

Cheers ... ;0) Art

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Wishes drip with dreams is a vivid line that captures a good feeling and a spiritual feel to your poem. Excellent use of the 5-7-5 form and congrats for winning the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013

Thanks, mermaids. So glad you enjoyed this 5-7-5 poem, especially the third line - wishes drip with dreams. Appreciate your comments. Cheers ... ;o) Art

Comment from vickib

Excellent

Hi Art I'm sorry I didn't review this before now sometimes they get by me. Congratulations it is perfect you know. Wishes drip with dreams is just the coolest thought ever. I love when your writing and posting and have your haiku face on. Lol!
XO
Vicki

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013

Definitely had my haiku face on when coming up with the satori line on this one. I concentrated for quite a while before it finally popped into my mind. Thanks, Vicki. So glad you enjoyed this 5-7-5, especially the third line. Appreciate your comments ... ;o) Art

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Congratulations on your win! You wrote a wonderful poem, and even alone was very visual.. The picture is absolutely gorgeous. Good job, Carolyn

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013

Thanks for the review and congrats, Carolyn. So glad you enjoyed this 5-7-5 poem and the artwork. Appreciate your comments ... ;o) Art

Comment from Contests

A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013

Wow! I'm thrilled and honored to receive a seven star rating. This is the first seven star rating I've ever received. This is very special. Thank you very much ... ;o) Art

Comment from Bobbi22

Excellent

Shooting stars are amazing to watch - still waiting for my wishes to come true though. Very well written 5-7-5 poem. Perfect artwork to complement your poem. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thanks, RightPics - glad you enjoyed this 5-7-5 and the artwork. Shooting stars are fascinating to watch, and I imagine it takes a while for wishes to come true. Appreciate your comments ... ;o)

Comment from Doc Holiday

Excellent

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Very nice 5-7-5 poem!
Love the lines..wishes drip with dreams...
Excellent entry.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thanks, Doc. Glad you liked this 5-7-5 poem, especially the third line. Appreciate your comments ... ;o) starkat