joys of flunking English class
Raunchy sense of humor+ angst of High School= This9 total reviews
Comment from Dudemanguy
A perty blunt 5-7-5, I traded my teacher a portrait I drew (traced) os Shakespeer to pass english. Welcome to the States, great job by the way! :)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
A perty blunt 5-7-5, I traded my teacher a portrait I drew (traced) os Shakespeer to pass english. Welcome to the States, great job by the way! :)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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thank you!
Comment from Matthew M.
I think this little poem is funny. Isn't F for "farted"? Or doesn't it stand for Fantastic!!! Well, my advice is just draw a little line down the right hand side of the F to make it look like an A.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
I think this little poem is funny. Isn't F for "farted"? Or doesn't it stand for Fantastic!!! Well, my advice is just draw a little line down the right hand side of the F to make it look like an A.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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thank you, glad you like it :)
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Great 5-7-5 poem Jessica. Just what a teenager would say! Well done! Nothing to change on it!
I just checked out your profile page. You are sooooo young, but are sooooo talented for your age. I'm new to this site myself, just joined this month. Hope to see more of your writings in future.
Connie aka bichonfrisegirl
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
Great 5-7-5 poem Jessica. Just what a teenager would say! Well done! Nothing to change on it!
I just checked out your profile page. You are sooooo young, but are sooooo talented for your age. I'm new to this site myself, just joined this month. Hope to see more of your writings in future.
Connie aka bichonfrisegirl
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Thanks, I appreciate it, gotta let my inner teenager out once in a while :)
Comment from wordsfromsue
Okay Funky, I see we've got a wild woman here. On a purely reviewing level, the tenses changed between line one and two. You could possibly think about 'the' instead of 'you' b*****d, Then it remains an enthusiatic vent againt the bloody sod.
Part of me responded because my poor teenage son tries tries tries and still gets the dreaded F, except in farting, then the bugger would graduate at the top of his class.... so I could hear him agreeing with you. :-)
Welcome to FanStory! :-)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
Okay Funky, I see we've got a wild woman here. On a purely reviewing level, the tenses changed between line one and two. You could possibly think about 'the' instead of 'you' b*****d, Then it remains an enthusiatic vent againt the bloody sod.
Part of me responded because my poor teenage son tries tries tries and still gets the dreaded F, except in farting, then the bugger would graduate at the top of his class.... so I could hear him agreeing with you. :-)
Welcome to FanStory! :-)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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thanks I appreciate it, and I'm sympathetic about your son's issue. I actually was home schooled during my High School years and then dropped out on my 16th B-Day and got my GED at 17, lol. I just wrote this on a whim and in less than 5 minutes so it's not my best but i'm still proud of it.
Comment from gazzagodbod
Ha ha we have very similar sense of humour I think lol love this . Little piece well written my friend no f from me my friend xgazzax
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
Ha ha we have very similar sense of humour I think lol love this . Little piece well written my friend no f from me my friend xgazzax
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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thank you, I appreciate it :)
Comment from Kevin C
I like your 5-7-5 here. I really like the originality here and the humor you used. Welcome to Fan Story and look forward to reading more of your works.
Kevin
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
I like your 5-7-5 here. I really like the originality here and the humor you used. Welcome to Fan Story and look forward to reading more of your works.
Kevin
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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thank you! I thought that up within a few seconds but i'm still pleased with it :)
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You are welcome and enjoyed it very much. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Kevin
Comment from Curly Girly
Welcome to Fanstory. Your verse appears to meet the necessary criteria. It is modern and contemporary, with a twist of humour. CG
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
Welcome to Fanstory. Your verse appears to meet the necessary criteria. It is modern and contemporary, with a twist of humour. CG
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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thank you! Nice to meet you!
Comment from Otto Loewi
This was a rather unconventional haiku in several ways, but I feel that's a good thing. The punctuation was necessary to understand the meaning. Next time he should probably write on a different topic.
I feel that you should keep this consistent in terms of who the narrator is speaking to. In the first line, he's speaking to the teacher. In the second, he's speaking to someone else about the teacher. Perhaps change the second line to "You gave me another F". Just a nit-picky suggestion.
Otherwise, well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
This was a rather unconventional haiku in several ways, but I feel that's a good thing. The punctuation was necessary to understand the meaning. Next time he should probably write on a different topic.
I feel that you should keep this consistent in terms of who the narrator is speaking to. In the first line, he's speaking to the teacher. In the second, he's speaking to someone else about the teacher. Perhaps change the second line to "You gave me another F". Just a nit-picky suggestion.
Otherwise, well done.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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thanks for the review, i just wrote it on a whim and my inner child wanted a say. Thank u again :)
Comment from Kingsland
I see you are attempting a go at humor here. It took a few seconds for this one to sink in before I seen the humor in it. I enjoyed reading this humorous short poem... John
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
I see you are attempting a go at humor here. It took a few seconds for this one to sink in before I seen the humor in it. I enjoyed reading this humorous short poem... John
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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thanks John! I just started and I figured I'd try something different. I'm so mature for 22 ain't I?