A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "She is Perfect"Metre ... Freeverse
8 total reviews
Comment from Black_Oxygen
This poetry is a fun read. The rhymes (when used) are
perfect and unforced. It uses non-confusing language
making it easy read and comprehend. The attached photo
is a befitting accent to the vision of the poem.
Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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This poetry is a fun read. The rhymes (when used) are
perfect and unforced. It uses non-confusing language
making it easy read and comprehend. The attached photo
is a befitting accent to the vision of the poem.
Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Excellent ... many thanks. lol.
Comment from Jmmercer
An interesting read. I'm not sure about the "PX" reference. Is that someone's name/handle online? This could perhaps be added to the author notes section. Otherwise, a fun read.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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An interesting read. I'm not sure about the "PX" reference. Is that someone's name/handle online? This could perhaps be added to the author notes section. Otherwise, a fun read.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The message is clear and to the point. The piece flows well and the harmony is where it needs to be. My attention is grabbed by the photo but it is held by the words. Good work.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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The message is clear and to the point. The piece flows well and the harmony is where it needs to be. My attention is grabbed by the photo but it is held by the words. Good work.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Excellent, glad you could enjoy. If you want the full picture I have described its inspiration and reason in one of my earlier reviews just check on comments button and maybe it will give a fuller understanding. lol.
Comment from KAHenry
Interesting... I'm curious about your inspiration for this. I'm not sure I understand the purpose of the poem. I'm not suggesting that it lacks direction, and I am certain that there was something on a more profound level that you were hinting at that I may have just missed. Still, even though I'm left a bit confused, I still feel person who this poem is based on is melancholy and perhaps struggling.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Interesting... I'm curious about your inspiration for this. I'm not sure I understand the purpose of the poem. I'm not suggesting that it lacks direction, and I am certain that there was something on a more profound level that you were hinting at that I may have just missed. Still, even though I'm left a bit confused, I still feel person who this poem is based on is melancholy and perhaps struggling.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Well if you want the real answer check out some of the reviews on it and they will fill in the BIG gap. lol.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Bicpen,
I am talented just let me show you and after I will even put you in my poem. Who knows where the greater talent lies?
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Dear Bicpen,
I am talented just let me show you and after I will even put you in my poem. Who knows where the greater talent lies?
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks Winslow ... always open to offers ? lol.
Comment from MM lives on :)
Bic, I got the humor line and the temptress for Mr. PX..A little banter back and forth is what this is all about, playful and fun..well done!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2013
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Bic, I got the humor line and the temptress for Mr. PX..A little banter back and forth is what this is all about, playful and fun..well done!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2013
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Well, that we did and he's quite chuffed with it... lol.
Comment from 4tulips
Ok, you got me. What is it that you're wondering? If she is perfect? Your poem includes three persons who are friends/acquaintances. If your asking if this poem is acceptable, I guess to some who want to know where this friendship is going if they all decide to stay. Is she perfect? Who the heck knows, because there isn't anything really factual about her other than the undertone she would be a good lay. So I'm not sure what kind of rating you were expecting, or what I was rating, a conversation or a free verse page for a book? Still not sure.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Ok, you got me. What is it that you're wondering? If she is perfect? Your poem includes three persons who are friends/acquaintances. If your asking if this poem is acceptable, I guess to some who want to know where this friendship is going if they all decide to stay. Is she perfect? Who the heck knows, because there isn't anything really factual about her other than the undertone she would be a good lay. So I'm not sure what kind of rating you were expecting, or what I was rating, a conversation or a free verse page for a book? Still not sure.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Well ... I'll let you in on the joke! It was a welcome poem for my new local Homosexual poet who's poetry I seem to like. It was done in the style of one of his poems as a reflection of how much I respect his art though maybe not so much the content ... but poetry is poetry, that you can't deny!
She is perfect is a statement I was making for him just incase he would like to date the perfect match ... who knows, maybe she is a good lay, I don't even know her ... it was for comedy value as our little Homosexual delinquent already knows and as a matter of fact he quite likes it as far as I can make out, though he did say the picture was not very appealing ... given his circumstances I'M not surprised, I just thought I would like to see if he fancied a lady friend instead of his boyfriend ... thats all!
Comment from Slayde
Not bad but thought the verbage could of been more descriptive. I dont know maybe more detailed and vulgar considering you a nude chick in the picture. I like the start but the middle and end was kinda bland. Pretty good
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Not bad but thought the verbage could of been more descriptive. I dont know maybe more detailed and vulgar considering you a nude chick in the picture. I like the start but the middle and end was kinda bland. Pretty good
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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... well, it was suppose to be a welcome gift to our local Homosexual poet who actually happens to be rather good in poetic terminology.
