Rabbit
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Adventure Begins"A Boy's Story of the rural South
28 total reviews
Comment from dannyleonn
Wonderful home grown stories of innocence!
Grandpa is a pressure cooker, huh?
You've been posting chapters a long while now, so you have probably corrected this time issue. But I thought in the first chapter it was 1960 and in this one it is 1957.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Wonderful home grown stories of innocence!
Grandpa is a pressure cooker, huh?
You've been posting chapters a long while now, so you have probably corrected this time issue. But I thought in the first chapter it was 1960 and in this one it is 1957.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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In chapter one, I mention it was the first time that I met Virge. That was done as background. Chapter 2 begins in 1960. Thanks for going back to catch up. Much appreciated! Bill
Comment from TOMORAL
Good writing, enjoyed this chapter more than the first. This is a good book. Still reminds of Grisham. Thank you for sharing this. My grandmother lived in South Georgia, so this is a treat for me.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Good writing, enjoyed this chapter more than the first. This is a good book. Still reminds of Grisham. Thank you for sharing this. My grandmother lived in South Georgia, so this is a treat for me.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for thinking enough of the work to continue. I live in North Carolina now, but my heart is in Georgia! Warm regards, Bill
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Bill. I look forward to reading more of Rabbit's story. You have said a lot, in this chapter, without being all preachy, about race relations and ingrained pregudice. This is really good writing. Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2013
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Hi, Bill. I look forward to reading more of Rabbit's story. You have said a lot, in this chapter, without being all preachy, about race relations and ingrained pregudice. This is really good writing. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 13-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2013
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Thanks for reading Bev and for the feedback. It's hard to stay away from race relations and ingranined prejucice when writing about the South in the late 50's and early 60's. Appreciate your comments! Bill
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You're welcome, Bill. I'm a Northerner born and raised, so I have no idea what it must have been like. I guess I'll be finding out.
Comment from kashmayank
This brought back memories of childhood and spending time with grandparents a nice work simple and effective well structured all the best
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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This brought back memories of childhood and spending time with grandparents a nice work simple and effective well structured all the best
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thanks for reading and your kind words! Bill
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Thanks for reading and your kind words! Bill
Comment from mizzkris20
very descriptive.Your story is very realistic as well as the characters.Your choice of words were perfect, I could actually follow along without getting lot. Great job with this story
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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very descriptive.Your story is very realistic as well as the characters.Your choice of words were perfect, I could actually follow along without getting lot. Great job with this story
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thanks for reading and your kind words. Bill
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Thanks for reading and your kind words. Bill
Comment from Curtis Hatch
The story is interesting and engaging. The plot is compelling and believable, and the characters are convincing and realistic. It captured my attention right away and held it to the end. Having been reared in the rural south on a farm, I can relate to the tale. The word pictures are vivid for the mind's eye to see and enjoy. I enjoyed the read.
Curtis
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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The story is interesting and engaging. The plot is compelling and believable, and the characters are convincing and realistic. It captured my attention right away and held it to the end. Having been reared in the rural south on a farm, I can relate to the tale. The word pictures are vivid for the mind's eye to see and enjoy. I enjoyed the read.
Curtis
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Thanks Curtis - on farm boy to another. Regards, Bill
Comment from Titanx9
I haven't read one of your pieces in quite a while and I see you are still a great storyteller. The pacing, dialogue and word selection are all first rate. I think I will stick with this one to see where you are going with it. Excellent job!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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I haven't read one of your pieces in quite a while and I see you are still a great storyteller. The pacing, dialogue and word selection are all first rate. I think I will stick with this one to see where you are going with it. Excellent job!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Thanks for reading. I should be posting chapter e soon. Bill
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Bill, I suspect your gramdma didn't like Mr. Caruth either. This is an excellent first chapter. Your characters are always perfectly drawn, and these are no exception.
One thing to look at:
"The job today was pulling honeysuckle vines and weeds away from her front fence."- You don't define who "her" is, so I guess you should say "the fence".
Enjoyed it. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Bill, I suspect your gramdma didn't like Mr. Caruth either. This is an excellent first chapter. Your characters are always perfectly drawn, and these are no exception.
One thing to look at:
"The job today was pulling honeysuckle vines and weeds away from her front fence."- You don't define who "her" is, so I guess you should say "the fence".
Enjoyed it. :) Nancy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Thanks for reading Nancy and the spot. I appreciate both. Bill
Comment from barkingdog
Great descriptions with an original story telling style.
First there's grandpa who threw the fight broadcast out the window and ended up in the emergency room. Wonderful blow by blow account!
I loved the introduction to Mr. Caruth: smelly, hitch in his giddy-up, gangley, smile like a picket fence.
I could see Virge and Rabbit stealing the watermelon and the old coon baying on the porch. What a hoot.
What a time this kid is going to have this summer with Virge.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Great descriptions with an original story telling style.
First there's grandpa who threw the fight broadcast out the window and ended up in the emergency room. Wonderful blow by blow account!
I loved the introduction to Mr. Caruth: smelly, hitch in his giddy-up, gangley, smile like a picket fence.
I could see Virge and Rabbit stealing the watermelon and the old coon baying on the porch. What a hoot.
What a time this kid is going to have this summer with Virge.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed! Bill
Comment from Shadow Pahn
I'm glad i caught this on chapter 2 instead of chapter 98!
This way i can easily catch up on the storyline.
I clicked the picture to open it and it was completely NOT what i expected, but that doesn't make it bad at all.
WOW!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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I'm glad i caught this on chapter 2 instead of chapter 98!
This way i can easily catch up on the storyline.
I clicked the picture to open it and it was completely NOT what i expected, but that doesn't make it bad at all.
WOW!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks for reading. I hope you go back and check out chapter 1 before the points go away. Bill
