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Comment from yonashalom
Shalom friend.
This is an awesome write. And even if you didn't come to it from a religious perspective, the core of the issue is that G-d gives and takes life and no one else should. It is precious and we never know what purpose G-d has for that life until he or she is given the opportunity to live. Imagine if abortion was legal and practiced when Mary became pregnant with Jesus in such a supernatural way? What if she had freaked out? We just never know. We protect "endangered species" and give them rights and yet our own children have none. Sad. Thanks for sharing. This speaks truth. And for all the rhetoric about "saving" a woman's life, more often than not, it is convenience, irresponsibility, and selfishness. Well said. ~Yona
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Shalom friend.
This is an awesome write. And even if you didn't come to it from a religious perspective, the core of the issue is that G-d gives and takes life and no one else should. It is precious and we never know what purpose G-d has for that life until he or she is given the opportunity to live. Imagine if abortion was legal and practiced when Mary became pregnant with Jesus in such a supernatural way? What if she had freaked out? We just never know. We protect "endangered species" and give them rights and yet our own children have none. Sad. Thanks for sharing. This speaks truth. And for all the rhetoric about "saving" a woman's life, more often than not, it is convenience, irresponsibility, and selfishness. Well said. ~Yona
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you Yona. I appreciate your review and support. Although I will get criticized for writing it, I felt it had to be said. Peace and may you be blessed.
Comment from kiwisteveh
I happen to agree with your message - of course opponents will challenge that 'it' is not a child nor even a life.
I think you probably went on too long in this poem - sometimes less is more - your point was made early on and felt a bit repetitious. The verse suffered a bit too with the odd rhyme seeming forced - murder/girder springs to mind.
By the thouands and the scores seems weak - going from big number to small number instead of the other way round.
Steve
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013
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I happen to agree with your message - of course opponents will challenge that 'it' is not a child nor even a life.
I think you probably went on too long in this poem - sometimes less is more - your point was made early on and felt a bit repetitious. The verse suffered a bit too with the odd rhyme seeming forced - murder/girder springs to mind.
By the thouands and the scores seems weak - going from big number to small number instead of the other way round.
Steve
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013
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Thank you Steve. I appreciate your honest opinion. I take your points.
Comment from terry drake
Your plea for pro life is paramount as the theme in your poem. You speak the truth that God laid out when you pen the accusation of murder in such a rhythmic way. Your rhyme scheme enhances your theme.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013
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Your plea for pro life is paramount as the theme in your poem. You speak the truth that God laid out when you pen the accusation of murder in such a rhythmic way. Your rhyme scheme enhances your theme.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013
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Thank you Terry. I'll be criticized, but had to say it.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
An accepted evil and a justified dastardly phenomenum backed by the craft of the devil called 'law.' This is a terrible fight between moralty, righteousness and evil.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013
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An accepted evil and a justified dastardly phenomenum backed by the craft of the devil called 'law.' This is a terrible fight between moralty, righteousness and evil.
ola thomas
Comment Written 25-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013
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Thank you Ola. I feel the same.
Comment from kra-z-ka-z
I agree with your personal view, and feelings towards govn't intervention. I also stood aside during a murder, the murder, of my own child. I wasn't (at that time) aware of the hatred for myself or of God. Although my regret remains, if God has forgiven me - who the hell am I to disagree? Still I am pro-choice. It is a personal decision, one between she and her God.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2013
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I agree with your personal view, and feelings towards govn't intervention. I also stood aside during a murder, the murder, of my own child. I wasn't (at that time) aware of the hatred for myself or of God. Although my regret remains, if God has forgiven me - who the hell am I to disagree? Still I am pro-choice. It is a personal decision, one between she and her God.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2013
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Thanks for your re yew kra-z-kra-z. I respect your view. I just cannot be pro choice myself.
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(Puts palms together and bows with respect for you and in reverence to God)
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. I do not believe in abortion for myself. But I see it as an necessary evil. We must put other avenues in place. I am for teaching responsibly when having sex. Each act could create a child. If you want it for personal satisfaction, do what you can to make sure no child is created. The mature thing to do is to think about a child before you conceive it.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2013
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I do not believe in abortion for myself. But I see it as an necessary evil. We must put other avenues in place. I am for teaching responsibly when having sex. Each act could create a child. If you want it for personal satisfaction, do what you can to make sure no child is created. The mature thing to do is to think about a child before you conceive it.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2013
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Very thoughtful review. Thank you.
Comment from cinamonsunrise
What a strong topic this writer has chosen for his poem. He clearly takes a stance and then supports his reasons for why he is pro-life. All the while sticking to nicely rhymed quatrains in abab style. It takes courage, love, and faith to put your opinion out there. For that, you should be congratulated. The artwork is superb as it reflects your reasoning. I enjoyed. Thank you for sharing, cinamon
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
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What a strong topic this writer has chosen for his poem. He clearly takes a stance and then supports his reasons for why he is pro-life. All the while sticking to nicely rhymed quatrains in abab style. It takes courage, love, and faith to put your opinion out there. For that, you should be congratulated. The artwork is superb as it reflects your reasoning. I enjoyed. Thank you for sharing, cinamon
Comment Written 07-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for this very encouraging review. I expect to catch some heat. It's nice to have support.
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You are very welcome
Comment from TOMORAL
I have a catch in my throat and pain in my heart as I read this poignant plea to let life just be. This is beautiful and and heartbreaking at the same time. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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I have a catch in my throat and pain in my heart as I read this poignant plea to let life just be. This is beautiful and and heartbreaking at the same time. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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Thank you Tomoral
Comment from shamanshenu
This is really a gut-wrenching poem and should be considered by everyone on the planet. It should not be so much about why people consider abortion at all, but why people don't take responsibility for the act that caused the pregnancy in the first place. There is a gross misuse of sexual energy on the planet and until that energy is raised and expressed through the heart centre of love and compassion, unfortunately this problem will remain.
Just a minor punctuation error in this:
To have an Abortion - or- carry to Term?
Perhaps it should read as:
To have an abortion--or carry to term?
To the Pit that's Satin's place. Should it be Satan's place?
Also check the use of unnecessary capitalization throughout the poem.
Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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This is really a gut-wrenching poem and should be considered by everyone on the planet. It should not be so much about why people consider abortion at all, but why people don't take responsibility for the act that caused the pregnancy in the first place. There is a gross misuse of sexual energy on the planet and until that energy is raised and expressed through the heart centre of love and compassion, unfortunately this problem will remain.
Just a minor punctuation error in this:
To have an Abortion - or- carry to Term?
Perhaps it should read as:
To have an abortion--or carry to term?
To the Pit that's Satin's place. Should it be Satan's place?
Also check the use of unnecessary capitalization throughout the poem.
Well done.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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Thank you for a comprehensiv review. I'll look at that.
Comment from Walu Feral
Great work! It is one of the most emotive issues ever to confront the human race. I am totally on your side in this. Well done and you have my respect for broaching the subject.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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Great work! It is one of the most emotive issues ever to confront the human race. I am totally on your side in this. Well done and you have my respect for broaching the subject.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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Thank you Feral. I will likely get some negative ones. I appreciate your kind review.
