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Comment from Folorunsho obalugemo
The twixts and turns of the words, all delicately delivered like a mathematic equation is superlative.
It is deeper than what the surface shows.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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The twixts and turns of the words, all delicately delivered like a mathematic equation is superlative.
It is deeper than what the surface shows.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Thank you for a great review
Comment from Rondeno
Just brilliant. Such a simple idea, but so hard to execute well - and you've pulled it off! Intelligent poem, poetic intelligence.
Mike
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Just brilliant. Such a simple idea, but so hard to execute well - and you've pulled it off! Intelligent poem, poetic intelligence.
Mike
Comment Written 25-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the wonderful review and humbling 6 star rating. Merry Christmas.
Comment from squid152
I do see the unweaving as Christ is the purpose. Beautiful artwork. The Christmas commercials are driving me nuts. you use triplets like a troilet. I really liked it,-Gary
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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I do see the unweaving as Christ is the purpose. Beautiful artwork. The Christmas commercials are driving me nuts. you use triplets like a troilet. I really liked it,-Gary
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you Gary. Just tonight and tomorrow. Then New years commercials to drive you crazy.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
I think you are into the punch! Great piece - enjoyable beat with good use of repetition . Very clever examination of both sides in a most unusual way. But I'm not surprised. You are always quite clever. :) Robin
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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I think you are into the punch! Great piece - enjoyable beat with good use of repetition . Very clever examination of both sides in a most unusual way. But I'm not surprised. You are always quite clever. :) Robin
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you and Merry Christmas!
Comment from Gungalo
Treischel it is just called Free Verse. You've entangled Christmas pretty well but all in all it comes out the same:
Season is jolly
People sing carols
Tree so pretty
Presents are nice
Heaven sent Hope
Salvation's sent us
Angels sing Praise
Christ the Purpose
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Treischel it is just called Free Verse. You've entangled Christmas pretty well but all in all it comes out the same:
Season is jolly
People sing carols
Tree so pretty
Presents are nice
Heaven sent Hope
Salvation's sent us
Angels sing Praise
Christ the Purpose
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Glad you liked it.
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Smile.
Comment from adewpearl
nice alliteration in Heaven sent hope
interesting use of repetition in this intertwined verse
your lines have a good cadence
good alliteration in Salvation's sent
and in pretty presents
a thoughtful look at the secular and sacred aspects of christmas brooke
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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nice alliteration in Heaven sent hope
interesting use of repetition in this intertwined verse
your lines have a good cadence
good alliteration in Salvation's sent
and in pretty presents
a thoughtful look at the secular and sacred aspects of christmas brooke
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you, I thought the repitition might get tedious.
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I am a fan of repetition and like writing in repeating forms. I know from my reviews that some people are fans like me and others complain. You can never please everyone.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A most enjoyable and creative poem for the holidays. I love this form. There is definitely a dichotomy in the Christmas season and you have done well at pointing this out. Have a very Merry Christmas!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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A most enjoyable and creative poem for the holidays. I love this form. There is definitely a dichotomy in the Christmas season and you have done well at pointing this out. Have a very Merry Christmas!!! Debbie
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much Debbie.
Comment from 9999pool
This form of poem is not new, I think. I have reviewed a poem where the some lines have to repeat themselves at a certain sequence. I had forgotten the name they give. That aside, the poem is good as jingle, with a good melody. The words of the poem becomes the lyrics of a beautiful nice song entitled "Hope and Salvation in Praise". Good strong lines with some level of internal rhyming and rhythm. Read the poem out loud and one can feel the tempo of the Duh dad dah or dah duh dah or the dah dah duh. Even got duh dah, dah duh. Excellent experimentation of this intertwined free verse. Great job. Cheers.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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This form of poem is not new, I think. I have reviewed a poem where the some lines have to repeat themselves at a certain sequence. I had forgotten the name they give. That aside, the poem is good as jingle, with a good melody. The words of the poem becomes the lyrics of a beautiful nice song entitled "Hope and Salvation in Praise". Good strong lines with some level of internal rhyming and rhythm. Read the poem out loud and one can feel the tempo of the Duh dad dah or dah duh dah or the dah dah duh. Even got duh dah, dah duh. Excellent experimentation of this intertwined free verse. Great job. Cheers.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thanks 9999, as usual a very enlightening review.
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Welcome. :)))))
Comment from mystery poet
You've created a very unique writing style indeed.
I love the movement of it and the rhythmic joviality.
It is fun to read and suits the spirit of joyful
Christmas. Nice creative work!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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You've created a very unique writing style indeed.
I love the movement of it and the rhythmic joviality.
It is fun to read and suits the spirit of joyful
Christmas. Nice creative work!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you mystery. I was wooded it wouldn't be liked.
