I weep
An Elegy40 total reviews
Comment from TOMORAL
Your courageous tears fall on beautiful little souls who are now dancing happily with their Lord. This is a wonderfully written piece that echoes many minds tonight. Great Job!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Your courageous tears fall on beautiful little souls who are now dancing happily with their Lord. This is a wonderfully written piece that echoes many minds tonight. Great Job!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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thank you
Comment from EMB
Absolutely. Victims yet to be will again be in the thousands, and that's just for gun-related homicides. Being killed by a gun is nothing newsworthy in our country unless it happens in the oddest of places. It's really sad when you think about it.
I really liked this poem, my friend.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Absolutely. Victims yet to be will again be in the thousands, and that's just for gun-related homicides. Being killed by a gun is nothing newsworthy in our country unless it happens in the oddest of places. It's really sad when you think about it.
I really liked this poem, my friend.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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It's depressing it only causes outrage when in numbers. Thanks for the review
Comment from c_lucas
It is not the gun's fault when the owner abuses society. A knife, a sharpened pencil, even a piece of paper can kill. Government leaders need to increase the budget to create new mental health facilities.
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It is not the gun's fault when the owner abuses society. A knife, a sharpened pencil, even a piece of paper can kill. Government leaders need to increase the budget to create new mental health facilities.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Yes. It's so easy to kill 30 people with a pencil. Not that it matters. America worships the gun, so it will pervade the country. People will dig in left or right, and in 6 months it wil all happen again. I've given up.
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A sharpened pencil in the ear drum would take longer,but the job could be done. A gun left in an unlock drawer is death if the wrong person get their hands on it. I think the next incident is weeks away, not months.
Comment from 9999pool
The senseless killings is now weighing heavy on everyone's minds. There only a few things to be done - control the aimless guns, provide added security and safety at all schools. Put in the guards. Install CCTV systems. Ensure children leave the school with the person authorized to fetch her and other important measures. Looked all doors when the school is in session. Good write, excellent descriptive prose and expressions. Cheers.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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The senseless killings is now weighing heavy on everyone's minds. There only a few things to be done - control the aimless guns, provide added security and safety at all schools. Put in the guards. Install CCTV systems. Ensure children leave the school with the person authorized to fetch her and other important measures. Looked all doors when the school is in session. Good write, excellent descriptive prose and expressions. Cheers.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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I don't think that gun control will ever be a practicality in the US. It is worshipped to devoutly. No one will grasp the nettle and another school massacre will be in the headlinnes next year
Comment from mumsyone
Our nation is weeping like it has never wept before, to see these innocent childrens' lives snuffed out. Thanks for sharing your thoughts in a well-written poem.
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Our nation is weeping like it has never wept before, to see these innocent childrens' lives snuffed out. Thanks for sharing your thoughts in a well-written poem.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for reviewing
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
I weep with you and wonder when, if ever, it will end.
You have written this very well and I commend you for it.
The only evil I see in this whole world is what people do to other people and living things. Every other thing can be replaced but life cannot.
We were created with the freedom to choose, in every situation we encounter, what we will do. It is what we do with this freedom that counts. A lesson I have yet to see being taught is: for each and everyone of us, My freedom ends where the freedom of another begins.
Thanks for sharing. Bob
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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I weep with you and wonder when, if ever, it will end.
You have written this very well and I commend you for it.
The only evil I see in this whole world is what people do to other people and living things. Every other thing can be replaced but life cannot.
We were created with the freedom to choose, in every situation we encounter, what we will do. It is what we do with this freedom that counts. A lesson I have yet to see being taught is: for each and everyone of us, My freedom ends where the freedom of another begins.
Thanks for sharing. Bob
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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I'm an optomist by nature, but it's not changedin the past, I don't see it changing soon. Thanks for the review
Comment from cinamonsunrise
The speaker of this poem elegantly shows mourning for horrible deeds that occur around us and our lack of true prevention of these problems. Beautifully rhyming in ABAB style, this poem is melodious. A small suggestion..in your description: "A eulogy"-usually eulogy's are given in praise of someone or something which your poem does not. Whereas, elegy is a tribute to the dead...again, just a suggestion. I loved this piece, the emotion that sprung forth with each passing stanza. A sad but timely piece. Thank you for sharing, cinamon
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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The speaker of this poem elegantly shows mourning for horrible deeds that occur around us and our lack of true prevention of these problems. Beautifully rhyming in ABAB style, this poem is melodious. A small suggestion..in your description: "A eulogy"-usually eulogy's are given in praise of someone or something which your poem does not. Whereas, elegy is a tribute to the dead...again, just a suggestion. I loved this piece, the emotion that sprung forth with each passing stanza. A sad but timely piece. Thank you for sharing, cinamon
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you. I'll change the description
Comment from Adri7enne
I think all sane people react with anger, pain and despair to such an occurence as the killing of children. It's a gut reaction - a certainty that we're partly responsible. We're all part of the world that would create a killer - someone so utterly miserable that killing is the only viable solution. We grow them, by not being aware of how unhappy and abandoned they are. We worship violence, admire 'the gun carrying' heroes' and raise our children on the idea that violence is a solution to problems.
Until we realize that we're all in this together, we'll continue to blame and fight one another. It's written that even Jesus wept for the world. You're in good company, snod.
Well done, as a cry from the heart. Very sensitive. Gave me points to ponder.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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I think all sane people react with anger, pain and despair to such an occurence as the killing of children. It's a gut reaction - a certainty that we're partly responsible. We're all part of the world that would create a killer - someone so utterly miserable that killing is the only viable solution. We grow them, by not being aware of how unhappy and abandoned they are. We worship violence, admire 'the gun carrying' heroes' and raise our children on the idea that violence is a solution to problems.
Until we realize that we're all in this together, we'll continue to blame and fight one another. It's written that even Jesus wept for the world. You're in good company, snod.
Well done, as a cry from the heart. Very sensitive. Gave me points to ponder.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thanks. I'm surprised how much this affected me, and I am so angry, not at the killer, but at the people who immediately started to bang their own drum and obstruct any solution. I fear something very fundamental is broken with America, and I have no hope they'll fix it. For 30 years they average 2 mass killings a year. I have lost and am losing so many friendships as a result.
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It shows that you allowed it to touch you personally. Still, it happens everywhere. Wasn't it in Britain, somewhere, where there was a mass killing at a camp for young people - no more than three years ago? There's no doubt change is needed. But pointing fingers might not be the right solution. A fundamental change of thinking is required. Don't lose any more friends over it, snod. It's not up to us to assign blame. You're cool!
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No, the camp was in Norway. The last one we had was in the 90's - dumblaine. A man with a handgun, after which the private ownership of pistols was outlawed. To be honest, my head just isn't in the right place at the moment. It might be the travelling and the diet has something to do with it too. It just compounds the problem when I see the bickering and the stands being taken. It's kids' lives, for crying out loud. I get both angry and apethetic at the same time. I'm an optomist by nature, but not this time. never mind. I'll have a few bottles over Christmas and be a little ray of sunshine in the new year.
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Hey, you can't let the world get to you, snod. The best you can hope for is to alliviate a bit of the pain in your own world, by providing the smiles, the laughs. The fact that you care is a step in the right direction. Have a nice holiday season. I'm sure you'll be a ray of sunshine in the new year. You always are! You're my funny English friend. Love to you all!
Comment from wanderlost
I wept for those in power whose job entails
Ensuring peace, at least until the vote.
Whose courage, if it risks their station, fails.
Who will not change their dogma by a mote
Wow what a poem! Great work on this and well worded indeed!
Wanderlost
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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I wept for those in power whose job entails
Ensuring peace, at least until the vote.
Whose courage, if it risks their station, fails.
Who will not change their dogma by a mote
Wow what a poem! Great work on this and well worded indeed!
Wanderlost
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you. Glad you likedit
Comment from Frank Atwood
Hope this doesn't offend.
The saddness revolved around guns and deaths will continue forever until man learns the God he prays to and wishes for peace is Satan himself, the true creator and ruler of this world. The spiritual Father is above all this and through free will does not interfer with man's desires in this world.
Only when one seeks him, the Father, on a one to one basis, without any advocates whatsoever, then he listens and sees them as his people.
This has nothing to do with Jesus or the religions of man, for they are all of the world we live in. This world is Hell for the souls many have traded to be one with this world and not overcome it. Once mankind understands that one truth, then will men begin to understand how they follow the wrong truths, and not all men are of God, though the religions of man teach such nonsense. Very few overcome this world, and shall not return upon death. Those who cling to this world and it's truths, they return life after life after life, and keep making the same mistakes over and over again.
I liked your poem and felt your pain through it. In today's times so many lie about all things. Death is real for this world houses many dead souls, but life is in the next for very few, and so are the truths I've shared with you which will not be taught in any church. I believe this work deems to be honored with truth whether believed or not. God bless and keep up the great work.
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Hope this doesn't offend.
The saddness revolved around guns and deaths will continue forever until man learns the God he prays to and wishes for peace is Satan himself, the true creator and ruler of this world. The spiritual Father is above all this and through free will does not interfer with man's desires in this world.
Only when one seeks him, the Father, on a one to one basis, without any advocates whatsoever, then he listens and sees them as his people.
This has nothing to do with Jesus or the religions of man, for they are all of the world we live in. This world is Hell for the souls many have traded to be one with this world and not overcome it. Once mankind understands that one truth, then will men begin to understand how they follow the wrong truths, and not all men are of God, though the religions of man teach such nonsense. Very few overcome this world, and shall not return upon death. Those who cling to this world and it's truths, they return life after life after life, and keep making the same mistakes over and over again.
I liked your poem and felt your pain through it. In today's times so many lie about all things. Death is real for this world houses many dead souls, but life is in the next for very few, and so are the truths I've shared with you which will not be taught in any church. I believe this work deems to be honored with truth whether believed or not. God bless and keep up the great work.
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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No offence taken. Thanks for the review
