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Mom's priorities askew.6 total reviews
Comment from HittorX
Awww poor baby!, love the picture also with this poem! Nice work, looks to me like you got the rules down pat. I wish you the best of luck!
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Awww poor baby!, love the picture also with this poem! Nice work, looks to me like you got the rules down pat. I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. It is a good reminder to not let the computer take over your life. Our new electronic toys can keep us busy. But we need to shut them down once in a while an touch another human. Great work
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. It is a good reminder to not let the computer take over your life. Our new electronic toys can keep us busy. But we need to shut them down once in a while an touch another human. Great work
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Reddy Rimer
Good Tetractys! This is a new form to me, but I like it, and find it fun to explore. Your picture is pitiful, but wonderful!
Your lines are on target, and subject matter relevant.
Facebook, as well as Fanstory, is a great distractor. Well, at least Mom's home to hear the cries. I trust that she will come out of her FB trance soon.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Good Tetractys! This is a new form to me, but I like it, and find it fun to explore. Your picture is pitiful, but wonderful!
Your lines are on target, and subject matter relevant.
Facebook, as well as Fanstory, is a great distractor. Well, at least Mom's home to hear the cries. I trust that she will come out of her FB trance soon.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Thanks for reviewing. Welcome to Fanstory.
Comment from Galactia
tears
rolling
down child's cheeks
sign of distress
mother too busy on facebook to care.
perfect little Tetractys poem all syllables are perfect across all lines. Bit of a sad poem LOL
great job
GL
Regards
tia
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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tears
rolling
down child's cheeks
sign of distress
mother too busy on facebook to care.
perfect little Tetractys poem all syllables are perfect across all lines. Bit of a sad poem LOL
great job
GL
Regards
tia
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from hifein
Enjoyed this 'tetractys'. A sad commentary however on how far we've come with our technological achievements. this little girl's face can write a book! Good job with the poem.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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Enjoyed this 'tetractys'. A sad commentary however on how far we've come with our technological achievements. this little girl's face can write a book! Good job with the poem.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from EMB
LOL Well don't this just say it all? This is a cute poem, but there is a troubling truth behind it. Today's mothers can easily be distracted with the beguiling Internet, particularly for sites like Facebook and Fanstory (smile). It's easy to go an hour or two, thinking you've only spent a few minute in front of the screen.
Trust me, I know. :)
Great poem.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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LOL Well don't this just say it all? This is a cute poem, but there is a troubling truth behind it. Today's mothers can easily be distracted with the beguiling Internet, particularly for sites like Facebook and Fanstory (smile). It's easy to go an hour or two, thinking you've only spent a few minute in front of the screen.
Trust me, I know. :)
Great poem.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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I know too. Probably a good thing my kids are grown.
