I'm a Chameleon
no colors of my own ... the worst kind of sad83 total reviews
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
Gotta tell you, Sharyn, this is not only a sad poem but a story in itself... I visualized this personality even as I read... you've got a lot going on... using the chameleon as a stand-in was brilliant... your words and phrases are descriptively bleak, sad and defeatist. But the turn... oh yes, the turn... when the speaker is on his/her own and a feeling true to the speaker... FEAR... becomes personal property not an imitation of another...
Where's my flippin' tissues?
greg
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Gotta tell you, Sharyn, this is not only a sad poem but a story in itself... I visualized this personality even as I read... you've got a lot going on... using the chameleon as a stand-in was brilliant... your words and phrases are descriptively bleak, sad and defeatist. But the turn... oh yes, the turn... when the speaker is on his/her own and a feeling true to the speaker... FEAR... becomes personal property not an imitation of another...
Where's my flippin' tissues?
greg
Comment Written 21-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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glad you kept your tissue box handy, Greg! I always struggle to be honest in my writing, because that's what gives it "guts" and makes it authentic, yes? :) Sharyn - that was sweet of you to review for 2 cents again!
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Review you for 2 cents?... it ain't about those cents but rather the 'sense' to recognize how good you are! And I do have the tissue box near...
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that's so sweet of you - really! I've just moved house and have set up my office again (well ... sort of ... if you include mountains of cardboard boxes of assorted files my "office") - so hopefully a little more time for thinking and writing again!
Hope to get to your story over a cup of Early Grey in the next hour - Jeff, my husband, has whizzed off to town and Kai, my son, has gone surfing ... home soon ... whew!
:)Sharyn
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moving is so much like... MOVING!
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yes, it's what I call a PIA - pain in the ass - but an essential one as my dear hubbie is a disorganized ADD pack-rat!
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good thing about having a pack-rat is you never have to go out for that flea market experience!
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you don't HAVE to, but then what happens if you DO??? DISASTER!!!!
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The bad thing about a man defending a man is we already know there's no defense... but the brother's gotta be awesome if he's married to you! (hopefully that's a clever way to get both my neck outta the noose *smile*)
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Well I TELL him that, of course, dear ... but do you think the blighter believes me?? nope!! Force is the ONLY option! :))))
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Force?... I'd have fear written all over my face... with magic marker!
Comment from kra-z-ka-z
I, also, am a empath. Seems I absorb the emotions of those around me. But when it comes to my own, I am, almost, lost in the overwhelming or the emptiness.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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I, also, am a empath. Seems I absorb the emotions of those around me. But when it comes to my own, I am, almost, lost in the overwhelming or the emptiness.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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aah, then you understand! :)
Comment from Peter Mansson
Sharyn, this is very cleverly written evoking the extreme empathy one has for a very close friend, soul mate perhaps? I love the way you have moved the emotional colours from dark to light to bright red, and with such a climactic ending. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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Sharyn, this is very cleverly written evoking the extreme empathy one has for a very close friend, soul mate perhaps? I love the way you have moved the emotional colours from dark to light to bright red, and with such a climactic ending. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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thx so much for your thoughtful review, Peter! :) Sharyn
Comment from Titanx9
Your poem says, you'll be what one wants you to be, which is a sad poem because there are folks who have no substance of their own and are in fact like the chameleon. I like the question and answer format you used because it works so well with the message and tone of the poem. The arwork is also awesome and frames the poem nicely!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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Your poem says, you'll be what one wants you to be, which is a sad poem because there are folks who have no substance of their own and are in fact like the chameleon. I like the question and answer format you used because it works so well with the message and tone of the poem. The arwork is also awesome and frames the poem nicely!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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thx so much my dear! :) Sharyn
Comment from justatuna
Please take this the right way...every time I read your work it gets better and better. Your style is so refreshing. Whenever I read your words, I want to read more. So damn unique. Thanks my friend. Hope you're well. Obviously...I don't have a 6, or I'd give you a 7.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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Please take this the right way...every time I read your work it gets better and better. Your style is so refreshing. Whenever I read your words, I want to read more. So damn unique. Thanks my friend. Hope you're well. Obviously...I don't have a 6, or I'd give you a 7.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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Bless you, Rob! :) Sharyn
Comment from jaydub99
What an interesting piece. I found myself thinking of all the chameleons I know and of the times I have done this myself. The color of fear was great, I liked how you described it as ragged and blood red. very poignant and visual. I liked your picture, it blended and added to your piece. Nice job, as I have come to expect from you.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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What an interesting piece. I found myself thinking of all the chameleons I know and of the times I have done this myself. The color of fear was great, I liked how you described it as ragged and blood red. very poignant and visual. I liked your picture, it blended and added to your piece. Nice job, as I have come to expect from you.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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thx so much for your insightful readiing jay! :) Sharyn
Comment from anarchist12
And what a state to be in my friend
my sister suffers such ills
i wouldn't wish them on my ex boyfriend
best of luck in the contest
excellent work writing this
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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And what a state to be in my friend
my sister suffers such ills
i wouldn't wish them on my ex boyfriend
best of luck in the contest
excellent work writing this
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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thx so much my dear! :) Sharyn
Comment from angel123
Your message is powerful and insightful. I enjoyed reading your poem. It flows well and it tells a complete story. It's a self awareness poem and I think you did a good job writing it. I also like your artwork choice.
Angel123
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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Your message is powerful and insightful. I enjoyed reading your poem. It flows well and it tells a complete story. It's a self awareness poem and I think you did a good job writing it. I also like your artwork choice.
Angel123
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Angel! :) Sharyn
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
I have seen many couples that are like the descriptions in your poem. One will only have the emotion that the other allows or demonstrates. They are so wrapped up in the life with the other, that they have no direction of their own. Good artwork choice. Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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I have seen many couples that are like the descriptions in your poem. One will only have the emotion that the other allows or demonstrates. They are so wrapped up in the life with the other, that they have no direction of their own. Good artwork choice. Enjoyed!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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good observations MW!! :) Sharyn
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Comment from cinamonsunrise
The emotions and thoughts of others truly affect many of us..Causing us to feel their emotions even stronger than they do. The chameleon was a perfect way to describe this. Our empathy can become our destruction if we are always adapting to others...forgetting ourselves, our dreams, our own emotions. The speaker captures the essence of this and allows us to see the dangers of becoming colorless..Void of our own self..Left without colors.
"no colors of my own
until I die ..."
Elegant write, cinamon
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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The emotions and thoughts of others truly affect many of us..Causing us to feel their emotions even stronger than they do. The chameleon was a perfect way to describe this. Our empathy can become our destruction if we are always adapting to others...forgetting ourselves, our dreams, our own emotions. The speaker captures the essence of this and allows us to see the dangers of becoming colorless..Void of our own self..Left without colors.
"no colors of my own
until I die ..."
Elegant write, cinamon
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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aah, thank you very much for your insightful review, cinamon - yes - you get it! :) Sharyn
