I´m more then sorry
This poem goes out to the one I walked away from and needed.2 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
The author definitely has a guilty conscience in this writing. I feel sorry for all the pain in your lost relationship, however, I could not get into it as far as poetry is concerned. It was more like a letter pleading for your life. And maybe that isn't so bad. The flow of the witting was just not there. I will look forward to reviving other works by you and you can only get better.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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The author definitely has a guilty conscience in this writing. I feel sorry for all the pain in your lost relationship, however, I could not get into it as far as poetry is concerned. It was more like a letter pleading for your life. And maybe that isn't so bad. The flow of the witting was just not there. I will look forward to reviving other works by you and you can only get better.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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I´m only 15 and this was my first ever poem
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And I´m proud of my self because this was always my goal as a little girl so I do´not care what you rank it i´m proud of my self
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I am proud of you too. It's difficult to put into words what we feel inside. You are off to a good start. Write something everyday, and keep it all. You can do it Jessica97, I know that you can!
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:) thanks and I think this poem told him how I feel deep down inside and me and him are talking again :)
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It was a poem to my ex Austin because me and him got in a fight and stopped talking for a couple months now we started talking a couple months ago again
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I love him more then anything he changed the way I look at my life and he gave love a new meaning :) I do´not know what I would do without him
Comment from Melissa Regester
Difficult topic and obvious there is emotion. There is rhyme, but reads more like free verse.
Can you define more of the issues in the relationship that went wrong? Is there more description of what you would do different? Maybe skirt the issues closer to draw the reader in.
Like I said hard topic to confront. Keep writing through it all!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Difficult topic and obvious there is emotion. There is rhyme, but reads more like free verse.
Can you define more of the issues in the relationship that went wrong? Is there more description of what you would do different? Maybe skirt the issues closer to draw the reader in.
Like I said hard topic to confront. Keep writing through it all!
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Thank you :)
