My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 114 "Eaten Up."All of my poems of release.
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Comment from Gungalo
You decry
unselfish acts,
because
your life's
empty
You said it JC and I'll bet you meant it too. Jealousy is a very vile thing and can ruin a person's very life. It is wise to not have it at all.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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You decry
unselfish acts,
because
your life's
empty
You said it JC and I'll bet you meant it too. Jealousy is a very vile thing and can ruin a person's very life. It is wise to not have it at all.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Thanks so much Gungalo for your great review. Jealousy is a wasted emotion to me. :) Jaq x
Comment from dancerwriter
The brilliant green eye entices-but is startling.Each verse echoes so many angry, desolate feelings, which draw the one conclusion.Hatred of someone who seems to destroy lives and love. A person full of bitter feelings towards some one else but to the point of the theme.Jealousy.rather sad.Lesley.J.
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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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The brilliant green eye entices-but is startling.Each verse echoes so many angry, desolate feelings, which draw the one conclusion.Hatred of someone who seems to destroy lives and love. A person full of bitter feelings towards some one else but to the point of the theme.Jealousy.rather sad.Lesley.J.
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Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Ahh dancewriter I have no hatred in my body whatsoever. I think it's a wasted emotion infact. It's just a poem about how I perceive jealousy. Thanks for your review. :) Jaq x
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I wonder why ewe consider jealousy a positive feature in issues concerning love relationships. Like you said in this poem, it consumes the soul and can breed nothing but evil. Love and trust must go together and jealousy should not be allowed to destroy joy. well written
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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I wonder why ewe consider jealousy a positive feature in issues concerning love relationships. Like you said in this poem, it consumes the soul and can breed nothing but evil. Love and trust must go together and jealousy should not be allowed to destroy joy. well written
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Perp thanks for your kind review. Jealousy is a wasted emotion and best not entertained. :) Jaq x
Comment from eowyn0003
Much denser. The words you used counted and you made them work hard for you. It is just very compact now and I feel it reads better.
Lura
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Much denser. The words you used counted and you made them work hard for you. It is just very compact now and I feel it reads better.
Lura
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Thanks so much for your in-depth and helpful review. I have implemented some.
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I'm glad you found some of my remarks helpful. I will review it again.
Lura
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Thank you so much for your help Lura :) Jaq x
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Your most welcome.
Lura
Comment from mermaids
Love how you put the words in green. I like the line about the empty life, how true, jealousy is an empty life. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Love how you put the words in green. I like the line about the empty life, how true, jealousy is an empty life. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much mermaids for your kind review.
Comment from angel123
Your poem is well written and emotional. I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and good alliteraion of many words. Your artwork choice is wonderful for your poem
Angel123
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Your poem is well written and emotional. I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and good alliteraion of many words. Your artwork choice is wonderful for your poem
Angel123
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind review. Angel123 x
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem.Some jealousy people tear others apart. Not because they want love. They just don't want others to enjoy the love they have for each other. Great work.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem.Some jealousy people tear others apart. Not because they want love. They just don't want others to enjoy the love they have for each other. Great work.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thanks again elliejean for another great review.
Comment from Terror2s
This poem brought to mind a former roommate who was jealous of my steady boyfriend. She came from a broken home and neither her mom or dad seemed to have time for her. (The mother busy trying to attract a husband while the dad had remarried and started a new family.) I could picture the scenario. T2
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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This poem brought to mind a former roommate who was jealous of my steady boyfriend. She came from a broken home and neither her mom or dad seemed to have time for her. (The mother busy trying to attract a husband while the dad had remarried and started a new family.) I could picture the scenario. T2
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thanks for your kind review T2.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello. I have to completely agree with envy as one of the seven deadly sins which is so much responsible for breaking apart relationships. This is so true. An envious person having so much of a void that they feel like filling it or having everyone else share in this void. As people, I think we've all been there before, but I wish I could say most of us know how to keep it in check as to not actually carry out something that would hurt others. Really enjoyed your poem. Kind regards and cheers.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Hello. I have to completely agree with envy as one of the seven deadly sins which is so much responsible for breaking apart relationships. This is so true. An envious person having so much of a void that they feel like filling it or having everyone else share in this void. As people, I think we've all been there before, but I wish I could say most of us know how to keep it in check as to not actually carry out something that would hurt others. Really enjoyed your poem. Kind regards and cheers.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much as always Benjamin.
Comment from Starlit Ink
This poem describes jealousy and the evil behind it. Jealousy can wreak havoc in many ways. The presentation is artistic and amazing, and goes well with the emotion you are conveying. Jealous people gain satisfaction in ruining lives. You relayed that perfectly. Good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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This poem describes jealousy and the evil behind it. Jealousy can wreak havoc in many ways. The presentation is artistic and amazing, and goes well with the emotion you are conveying. Jealous people gain satisfaction in ruining lives. You relayed that perfectly. Good luck.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for that wonderful review and for your very generous rating Starlit. Very much appreciated.