Commentary and Philosophy
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Hopeless Homeless"My thoughts about t
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Comment from Bill Schott
This pantoun shouts the stark realities of these seemingly hopeless homeless drug addicted people. The structure of the poem disappears in the visceral images.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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This pantoun shouts the stark realities of these seemingly hopeless homeless drug addicted people. The structure of the poem disappears in the visceral images.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Thank you Bill for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your reflections on homelessness with us and making it clear in your notes that this poem is not autobiographical. I admired your taking on the persona and using the Pantoum as your vehicle, with its rhymed quatrains and repeats for this poignant theme. -Joan
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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Thank you for sharing your reflections on homelessness with us and making it clear in your notes that this poem is not autobiographical. I admired your taking on the persona and using the Pantoum as your vehicle, with its rhymed quatrains and repeats for this poignant theme. -Joan
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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Thank you for this wonderful review
Comment from trimple
This is pretty raw and hard hitting. Sad but all so familiar and true.We pass these lost souls each and every day.Very well written. Thanks Kind regards Trimple
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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This is pretty raw and hard hitting. Sad but all so familiar and true.We pass these lost souls each and every day.Very well written. Thanks Kind regards Trimple
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Appreciate your input Trimple.
Comment from mystery poet
I wonder the statistics on homeless people
who are there entirely from additions. Most
likely staggering...You've done an exceptional
work and I can see how this kind of thing gets
to people. How can you throw your God given
life away for such destructive things. Sad.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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I wonder the statistics on homeless people
who are there entirely from additions. Most
likely staggering...You've done an exceptional
work and I can see how this kind of thing gets
to people. How can you throw your God given
life away for such destructive things. Sad.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you Mystery, for the review and the Six Stars. I was hesitant to post this because I would rather write about beauty, but this just spilled out.
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I understand, believe me!
Comment from Johnny-artist
I appreciated this Pantoum poem~a graphic description of a very serious reality...human beings living at the lowest level of poverty. Treischel +I gave you a 5 star rating~thinking that an alteration of the line "Work for me? No, not a chance"...be for a classical 6 star work.
The potential of "Hopeless Homeless"~being understood could lead to a whopper of a poem...drinking to forget their destitution. O~by the way...this is the Word of the Lord found in Proverbs. Thanks for sharing~looking foward to more...lovingly uncleJohn
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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I appreciated this Pantoum poem~a graphic description of a very serious reality...human beings living at the lowest level of poverty. Treischel +I gave you a 5 star rating~thinking that an alteration of the line "Work for me? No, not a chance"...be for a classical 6 star work.
The potential of "Hopeless Homeless"~being understood could lead to a whopper of a poem...drinking to forget their destitution. O~by the way...this is the Word of the Lord found in Proverbs. Thanks for sharing~looking foward to more...lovingly uncleJohn
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you Uncle John for this encouraging review. I was a bit hesitant on this one. Experimenting with the Pantoum format.
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All the best Treischel +I'm very fortunate to be a fan of yours~taking it seriuosly...with a grain of salt not! yours uncleJohn
Comment from Gungalo
I'll say Treischel. Wow talk about getting down and dirty. This one holds the award for that. But it is true. hard core drug addicts and homeless will do just that.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I'll say Treischel. Wow talk about getting down and dirty. This one holds the award for that. But it is true. hard core drug addicts and homeless will do just that.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I appreciate the review, Gungalo. I thought it might be a bit too raw
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Nah not at all Treischel.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Its really sad to see people on the street living for a high. And not thinking about anything else but getting high. This is a very expressive story in a poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Its really sad to see people on the street living for a high. And not thinking about anything else but getting high. This is a very expressive story in a poem. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you Deorre. I was afraid it's too graphic.
