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Comment from Deorre Leonard
What a sad poem about dying and the reality of it is you are not in the grave.Just the empty shell that was left behind. So dont go to the grave and cry for me because I am not there. Well written. Expressive and emotional. Deorre:)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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What a sad poem about dying and the reality of it is you are not in the grave.Just the empty shell that was left behind. So dont go to the grave and cry for me because I am not there. Well written. Expressive and emotional. Deorre:)
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you Deorre
Comment from GarthL
A great great message to behold, 'out of the blue into the ether', not the ground. I loved the message and the words you used to convey it.
However, in my humble opinion the are a few things that didn't appeal to my eyes. I feel the color of the text should be the paler blue sky of your illustration for a much easier and pleasant read. I also think for visual balance on the page the text could be center justified and dropped one or two 'enters' away from the illustration. The page has too much black space after the text also. Put cursor after the full stop 'there.' and hit delete a until page finishes one or two lines after the text. I believe this will give your beautiful poem a much more balanced and harmonious look. ???
None of this detracts from the fact your words are wonderful and a lesson to all! Thanks for the enjoyable read.
livelove'n'laughlots, Garth
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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A great great message to behold, 'out of the blue into the ether', not the ground. I loved the message and the words you used to convey it.
However, in my humble opinion the are a few things that didn't appeal to my eyes. I feel the color of the text should be the paler blue sky of your illustration for a much easier and pleasant read. I also think for visual balance on the page the text could be center justified and dropped one or two 'enters' away from the illustration. The page has too much black space after the text also. Put cursor after the full stop 'there.' and hit delete a until page finishes one or two lines after the text. I believe this will give your beautiful poem a much more balanced and harmonious look. ???
None of this detracts from the fact your words are wonderful and a lesson to all! Thanks for the enjoyable read.
livelove'n'laughlots, Garth
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you for your review
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Cheers parisjean, you're welcome. I see you're into music and health. I'm sure you'd enjoy my song/poems posted here: The Harvest, Like a Bubble on a Breeze, Always Remember, Alone?, Burning and Forever. Also an acrostic posted yesterday Symphony of Life. livelovestaystrong, Garth
