Trojan Verse
On courting my muse31 total reviews
Comment from words
Oh, I loved this dark write on your muse.
The ending lines gave me chills:
but beware:
I will bind you with the fierce branding iron
like the deep inner calling of a psalm
forgetting the light, you will have to interpret the dark.
So,
write whatever you like
I'm not responsible for what you will find...
Bravo!!!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Oh, I loved this dark write on your muse.
The ending lines gave me chills:
but beware:
I will bind you with the fierce branding iron
like the deep inner calling of a psalm
forgetting the light, you will have to interpret the dark.
So,
write whatever you like
I'm not responsible for what you will find...
Bravo!!!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much dear friend for visiting my portfolio. Delighted that you like my work. Wow, it makes my day!
Comment from Mrs Jones
"like the deep inner calling of a psalm" How very original and profound. You are writing good girl.
Well done
Cheers and a very happy new year.
Rose
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
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"like the deep inner calling of a psalm" How very original and profound. You are writing good girl.
Well done
Cheers and a very happy new year.
Rose
Comment Written 30-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
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Thank you dear Rose!
Comment from adewpearl
good alliteration in dark and drink and good internal rhyme of wine and shrine
good consonance of hard C and L sounds in enclosure for your caged closure
strong imagery of the branding iron
a mood-creating poem in good free verse form
Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
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good alliteration in dark and drink and good internal rhyme of wine and shrine
good consonance of hard C and L sounds in enclosure for your caged closure
strong imagery of the branding iron
a mood-creating poem in good free verse form
Brooke
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your great comments!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Amada,
it seems that you muse is breathing in to your thoughts
and to me trying to soar your mind with his or her words.
I may be off but here is what I say about your muse ( being like a Trojan Horse)
"Resist their inner thoughts and obey them little."
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2012
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Amada,
it seems that you muse is breathing in to your thoughts
and to me trying to soar your mind with his or her words.
I may be off but here is what I say about your muse ( being like a Trojan Horse)
"Resist their inner thoughts and obey them little."
Gert
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2012
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Gert, delighted by the honor!
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from jadapenn
This sounds like your muse daring you. I loved the visuals conjured up here. Write it all even after your pen bleeds is reminiscent of many a late night of head scratching and rehashing chapters - only to have them pulled apart by reviews. lol. Nicely done. luv jada
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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This sounds like your muse daring you. I loved the visuals conjured up here. Write it all even after your pen bleeds is reminiscent of many a late night of head scratching and rehashing chapters - only to have them pulled apart by reviews. lol. Nicely done. luv jada
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Oh Jada, I so feel that "pull apart" feeling. But, keep on going dear friend.
Comment from squid152
I liked write whatever you like, I'm not responsible for what you will find and forgetting the light, you will have to interpret the dark.-Squid
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I liked write whatever you like, I'm not responsible for what you will find and forgetting the light, you will have to interpret the dark.-Squid
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I truly appreciate reading my work, dear fellow poet.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This is how I feel every time I pick up a pen and start to write. I feel like I am striping in front of strangers. A crude analogy but its the truth. No matter what I try to say and keep it neutral, it always comes out the harsh truth. Very well written.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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This is how I feel every time I pick up a pen and start to write. I feel like I am striping in front of strangers. A crude analogy but its the truth. No matter what I try to say and keep it neutral, it always comes out the harsh truth. Very well written.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you for reading my Trojan Verse. Your comments are awesome, "like striping in front of a stranger..." I would love to hear more of it..
Comment from Thomas Raine
I like the imagery you create here, and how you entice the words to come into you, but warn of what they might find; I often feel when I'm writing that I might unleash a torrent of emotion I'd rather have kept locked away, but my pen got the better of me.
Thanks for sharing,
- TR
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I like the imagery you create here, and how you entice the words to come into you, but warn of what they might find; I often feel when I'm writing that I might unleash a torrent of emotion I'd rather have kept locked away, but my pen got the better of me.
Thanks for sharing,
- TR
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I wish you the best when that pen dear poet. Don't lock it away!
Comment from visionary1234
Wow! amada, this seems to be something like: "ok, muse, have a trip thru my unconscious, my subconscious too if you dare, go for it, I won't be responsible for what you find or what you write about it - it just IS, so THERE!" OK. Got it! :)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Wow! amada, this seems to be something like: "ok, muse, have a trip thru my unconscious, my subconscious too if you dare, go for it, I won't be responsible for what you find or what you write about it - it just IS, so THERE!" OK. Got it! :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you for reading my work and catching so well the spirit of it.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your concise, thought-provoking poem vividly conveys the theme that we all have light and dark within us. When we delve deep within ourselves, beneath the light, we find that dark place and have to deal with it. (??)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Your concise, thought-provoking poem vividly conveys the theme that we all have light and dark within us. When we delve deep within ourselves, beneath the light, we find that dark place and have to deal with it. (??)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you Janice for reading and commenting in my work.