The Least of These
contest entry20 total reviews
Comment from velvetElvis
lot's of wow factor here. I was perusing your portfolio and the title caught my eye, glad I selected it to read.
"Does God yearn to be touched
as much as she does"
very powerful.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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lot's of wow factor here. I was perusing your portfolio and the title caught my eye, glad I selected it to read.
"Does God yearn to be touched
as much as she does"
very powerful.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Hey, thank you so much, VE. I really appreciate your generous and gracious review. :0) Bev
Comment from words
You captured yearning and loneliness so well in this poem.
You specific descriptions gave this an immediacy: sixth pew, kneels
Love your verb choices.
You paint a vivid portrait.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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You captured yearning and loneliness so well in this poem.
You specific descriptions gave this an immediacy: sixth pew, kneels
Love your verb choices.
You paint a vivid portrait.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Thank you so very much, D. This poem was sort of special to me. You're the best! Bev
Comment from Joan E.
I don't know how I missed this one, but I hope it is well received in the contest. Thank you for letting us know the source of your inspiration. I admired the way you gave the old adage new life and intensified the sense of loneliness with your use of alliteration. Good luck in the voting booth and merry day after... -Joan
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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I don't know how I missed this one, but I hope it is well received in the contest. Thank you for letting us know the source of your inspiration. I admired the way you gave the old adage new life and intensified the sense of loneliness with your use of alliteration. Good luck in the voting booth and merry day after... -Joan
Comment Written 26-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, Joan. I really appreciate you taking time to read my poem. It didn't do too well, but I enjoyed some lovely reviews - like yours! Hugs, Bev
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I like your positive attitude. Joy and peace- Joan
Comment from missy98writer
Bev,
Your poem is winderfully written with terrific. imagery painted by your pen.
The art wiork is amazing you used.
In your poem you used excellent alliteration: "seated in the sixth, whispered words, bread before birds & Calling on a faith catalogued in a crackly."
You also used great metaphors: "yearn to be touched, Calling on a faith, drinks in His face & through the pain"
I enjoyed your lines:
Calling on a faith
catalogued in a
crackly suitcase
she drinks in His face
and prays through the pain
It's a shame you didn't win, my friend.
I'd recommend your food for thought poem to other reviewers.
Please have a nice weekend,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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Bev,
Your poem is winderfully written with terrific. imagery painted by your pen.
The art wiork is amazing you used.
In your poem you used excellent alliteration: "seated in the sixth, whispered words, bread before birds & Calling on a faith catalogued in a crackly."
You also used great metaphors: "yearn to be touched, Calling on a faith, drinks in His face & through the pain"
I enjoyed your lines:
Calling on a faith
catalogued in a
crackly suitcase
she drinks in His face
and prays through the pain
It's a shame you didn't win, my friend.
I'd recommend your food for thought poem to other reviewers.
Please have a nice weekend,
Melissa.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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Thank you, Melissa. I really appreciate your wonderful and generous review. Blessings! Bev
Comment from adewpearl
I love the simile of the words of a whispered prayer cast like bread before birds
I also like that alliterative phrase
What a thought-provoking question you ask
great alliteration in calling/catalogues/crackly
and in prays through the pain
This is one compelling depiction of love and loss and the loneliness that follows
This will resonate with many readers who have struggled through this loss
Beautifully written, Bev :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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I love the simile of the words of a whispered prayer cast like bread before birds
I also like that alliterative phrase
What a thought-provoking question you ask
great alliteration in calling/catalogues/crackly
and in prays through the pain
This is one compelling depiction of love and loss and the loneliness that follows
This will resonate with many readers who have struggled through this loss
Beautifully written, Bev :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Brooke. I'm truly honored by your gracious review! :0)
Comment from mshirachot
What a sorrowful tale of this widow's plight. The title capture my attention from the first. Then as I read on, the poor main character had my sympathy so much that it almost brought me to tears.
Lot's of raw lonely emotion capture here. Great writing. Best wishes with the contest entry.
Blessings to you!
Marsha
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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What a sorrowful tale of this widow's plight. The title capture my attention from the first. Then as I read on, the poor main character had my sympathy so much that it almost brought me to tears.
Lot's of raw lonely emotion capture here. Great writing. Best wishes with the contest entry.
Blessings to you!
Marsha
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Marsha, for this kind and generous review. I sure appreciate your encouragment and good luck wishes.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about relying on God for strength, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about relying on God for strength, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for this generous and supportive review. I appreciate the good luck wishes, too!
Comment from Capricorn30
Nice alliteration of"bread before birds";
"catalogued in a
crackly suitcase"--good alliteration as the hope of prayers will bring happy, brighter days;
Well-written contest entry, mystery poet
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Nice alliteration of"bread before birds";
"catalogued in a
crackly suitcase"--good alliteration as the hope of prayers will bring happy, brighter days;
Well-written contest entry, mystery poet
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you very much, Capricorn30. I appreciate the review!
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You're very welcome:)
Good luck!
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Thank you!
Comment from angel123
Your spiritual poem about lonelieness is very nicely written and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and your artwork choice is wonderful.
Angel123
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Your spiritual poem about lonelieness is very nicely written and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and your artwork choice is wonderful.
Angel123
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Angel123. I appreciate your generous review.
Comment from mtrybak
That was an excellent question you posed, "Does God Yearn to be Touched". Or alternately, do you ever see God? If God is our father, why do we only ever see pictures of Jesus, who is also God? Very well done because you left me with alot of questions.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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That was an excellent question you posed, "Does God Yearn to be Touched". Or alternately, do you ever see God? If God is our father, why do we only ever see pictures of Jesus, who is also God? Very well done because you left me with alot of questions.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Your questions are great, and I like your observation about Jesus as representing God, when he clearly stated he was God's son. Thank you for an excellent review!