Fade-out
Narrowing our world.4 total reviews
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello TwistedZepher...Cool poem..Just some input. How about " is a map narrowing our world. Instead of fade out how about, fade away. Hope the input helps and good luck in the contest. Cheers.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
Hello TwistedZepher...Cool poem..Just some input. How about " is a map narrowing our world. Instead of fade out how about, fade away. Hope the input helps and good luck in the contest. Cheers.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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Last word has to be one syllable. I am not twisted Zepher. This is a blind contest.thanks for reviewing.
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Hello, dear apologies for calling you twistedZepher. I could have sworn I saw the handle name written. The name almost sounds like a bad word too. Again sorry and hey, good luck.
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No problem, thanks again for reviewing.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Great artwork it compliments this very unique piece. The flow is really good the colors blend well. you did a good job with this. Well done. Deorre
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
Great artwork it compliments this very unique piece. The flow is really good the colors blend well. you did a good job with this. Well done. Deorre
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Gungalo
A very good comparison of aging to the streets of life. You mights want to put pot and holes together for potholes though. Other than that I can find nothing to correct.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
A very good comparison of aging to the streets of life. You mights want to put pot and holes together for potholes though. Other than that I can find nothing to correct.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thanks for the heads up.
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Smiles.
Comment from Galactia
This is a great little nonet poem reflecting societies way of life and thinking.
perfect syllable count of 9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1.
well done and good luck in the contest
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
This is a great little nonet poem reflecting societies way of life and thinking.
perfect syllable count of 9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1.
well done and good luck in the contest
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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thank you for the kind review.