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Comment from elpsog
Love thy neighbor personified. A gentle yet powerful work telling of true down to earth beautiful charity. Very nicely done. Flow of read was also very good though one suggestion if I may. In the second quatrain the single syllable "cruel" you might consider amending to a multiple such as "disapproving". The flow of the verse would be enhanced. Just my opinion. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Love thy neighbor personified. A gentle yet powerful work telling of true down to earth beautiful charity. Very nicely done. Flow of read was also very good though one suggestion if I may. In the second quatrain the single syllable "cruel" you might consider amending to a multiple such as "disapproving". The flow of the verse would be enhanced. Just my opinion. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thank you for pointing this out elpsog, please take another look
Comment from meggreen
What a nice poem and sentiment. There is humanity and gratitude for the humanity shown here. We all need to hear the message you give and be reminded that no matter what our cirumstances, we are still all our brothers' keepers. Thank you for the reminder.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2012
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What a nice poem and sentiment. There is humanity and gratitude for the humanity shown here. We all need to hear the message you give and be reminded that no matter what our cirumstances, we are still all our brothers' keepers. Thank you for the reminder.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2012
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Yes meggreen, we are all equal
Comment from EMB
Wow. It's like the poem was written for the picture this time because the picture is truly gripping. In fact, I don't believe the poem would have been nearly as moving without the picture. Reading how someone is "down" and "homeless" doesn't quite do it with this picture. There is dignity and pride and honesty and a few other things I can't think of right now.
Excellent piece, my friend.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2012
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Wow. It's like the poem was written for the picture this time because the picture is truly gripping. In fact, I don't believe the poem would have been nearly as moving without the picture. Reading how someone is "down" and "homeless" doesn't quite do it with this picture. There is dignity and pride and honesty and a few other things I can't think of right now.
Excellent piece, my friend.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2012
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Thank you Edward
Comment from alexisleech
Your excellent poem reminds us all, yet again, that it costs nothing to show a bit of compassion towards those who are less fortunate than us. Well rhymed, your poem was a pleasure to read and review.
Alexis x
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2012
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Your excellent poem reminds us all, yet again, that it costs nothing to show a bit of compassion towards those who are less fortunate than us. Well rhymed, your poem was a pleasure to read and review.
Alexis x
Comment Written 16-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much alexisleech, I am touched