Damn Acre
Frustrated Farmer takes a break10 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Gray, Delightful. Fresh, funny and definitely believable. I don't know how the AABB rhyming scheme works in this one but it sure didn't stop the smile. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2012
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Hello Gray, Delightful. Fresh, funny and definitely believable. I don't know how the AABB rhyming scheme works in this one but it sure didn't stop the smile. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 20-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2012
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Thanks kiwi girl .. I took a shot at this style and got some reviews saying I missed the pattern but most enjoyed the humour so I'm delighted that it produced smiles..they're right up there with tears and more real than stars!! Blessings to you! Vance
Comment from Spitfire
Correct me if I'm wrong, but is Father Brown a well-known person? (rule three). Your rhyme scheme is ABAB and should be AABB. The lines don't stand out as being irregular length. But it is whimsical, just needs to follow the rules.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Correct me if I'm wrong, but is Father Brown a well-known person? (rule three). Your rhyme scheme is ABAB and should be AABB. The lines don't stand out as being irregular length. But it is whimsical, just needs to follow the rules.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Spitfire: Thanks for you guidance here. Admittedly this was my first shot at this poetry style and appreciate knowing where I went off the rails with it. I deeply respect your skill and professional standing in this business so thanks for taking time to help me...HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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You're more than welcome. That's the purpose of reviewing, IMO.
Shari
Comment from EMB
LOL This was a great poem, my friend. And I don't blame old Farmer Brown one bit. (Though I would've opted for a game of tennis.) Great job with the rhyme scheme and the format. :)
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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LOL This was a great poem, my friend. And I don't blame old Farmer Brown one bit. (Though I would've opted for a game of tennis.) Great job with the rhyme scheme and the format. :)
Comment Written 17-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thanks Edward..it was a lot of fun for a new style, first one! I appreciate your kind remarks and generous rating and hope you catch up on that tennis game tomorrow! Cheers! Vance
Comment from Reddy Rimer
It's a great poem, very amusing, and arouses empathy for Farmer Brown, who solved the problem by goin' fishin'
However, for a Clerihew, the rhyming is not according to the guidelines. You need to look up the example and try again.
The picture is a good one...no wonder the thing won't run!
Connie
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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It's a great poem, very amusing, and arouses empathy for Farmer Brown, who solved the problem by goin' fishin'
However, for a Clerihew, the rhyming is not according to the guidelines. You need to look up the example and try again.
The picture is a good one...no wonder the thing won't run!
Connie
Comment Written 17-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Gee Reddy...I'm shocked but will go check. I've had a six and all fives on several reviews with three commenting on the precision of the rhyming. Admittedly this is my first Clerihew so I'm fully open to honest and accurate advice. Thanks again and I will check it out. Vance
Comment from Gungalo
Very good Gray. At first I had trouble with the name bit but then I realized no one could be more famous than Farmer Brown. It is good, it is clever and I'd be fishing too.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Very good Gray. At first I had trouble with the name bit but then I realized no one could be more famous than Farmer Brown. It is good, it is clever and I'd be fishing too.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Thanks Gungalo: always love to hear from you and this Clerihew is a new style for me so we're lookin at the prototype so I hope we can improve on it in the future. Still like the free verse...that word "free" just seems like candy to the mind! Thanks again, Vance
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Smile.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem meets all the standards for this poetic form. You have effectively and light-heartedly pinpointed what one is to do when all his equipment is non-working--go fishing.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Your poem meets all the standards for this poetic form. You have effectively and light-heartedly pinpointed what one is to do when all his equipment is non-working--go fishing.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Thanks Janice: nice to hear from you and I appreciate your generous rating and kind remarks. I really like free verse but had to give this style a try. The old farmer was just on my mind so could not let the opportunity pass. Cheers! Vance
Comment from djsaxon
The rarely seen Cherihew. Who could be more famous than the generic Farmer Brown? :) I really enjoyed this. Bare bones funny and evocative. Good luck in the competition. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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The rarely seen Cherihew. Who could be more famous than the generic Farmer Brown? :) I really enjoyed this. Bare bones funny and evocative. Good luck in the competition. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 16-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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dj: thanks so much for your very generous rating and kind review. I'm delighted to have delighted! It was fun and unusual to reach into ths Cherihew style. All the best! HIS GRAYNESSS Vance
Comment from DMCranfield
Very fun poem. You summed up a bad day on the farm and a fun day of fishing all in just a few short lines!
Not an easy task at all.
The picture you selected is just perfect as well as your background color. Thank you so much for sharing your little ditty :)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Very fun poem. You summed up a bad day on the farm and a fun day of fishing all in just a few short lines!
Not an easy task at all.
The picture you selected is just perfect as well as your background color. Thank you so much for sharing your little ditty :)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Thanks DM for your kind review and generous rating! This is a new venture in style for me so I'm happy it brought some positive feedback....it was fun! Thanks again: HIS GRAYNESS Vance
Comment from RaymondJohn
Is this Beatrix Potters's Farmer Brown? I think I'd probably go fishing, too, if I had everyt;hing go wrong. Cute story. Best of luck in the contest. Ray.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Is this Beatrix Potters's Farmer Brown? I think I'd probably go fishing, too, if I had everyt;hing go wrong. Cute story. Best of luck in the contest. Ray.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Raymond; Poor old farmer Brown...never a minute of privacy and probably the world's number one targert for identity theft! Yeah, I could not resist the obligation to honor the real "first farmer". Thanks so much for the kind review and so glad you liked it! HIS GRAYNESS Vance
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha from Hawaii, My dad was a farmer and often went fishing when he needed a break. Thank you for the memories. Have a great day. Aloha, Ginger
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Aloha from Hawaii, My dad was a farmer and often went fishing when he needed a break. Thank you for the memories. Have a great day. Aloha, Ginger
Comment Written 16-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Thanks Ginger: I appreciate your generous rating and kind review!So glad to have shared even one tiny moment in your life in a positive way!! Keep smiling!!!Cheers..HIS GRAYNESS: Vance ALOHA!
