Comment from mtnspirit

Excellent

Love the image reminding us of winter fun. It makes a cute presentation for your poem and I can also see this poem being used to teach children this form of poetry. Good job. and good luck with this contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012

Thank you so much mtnspirit. Much appreciated.

Comment from Helvi2

Excellent

I was told when writing a haiku NOT to personalize as you have done. You need to remove the apostrophe from winter. That said that's the only nit I can see in your haiku. I love the fun you added to yours.. I don't think there's anyone who can't relate to that.The concrete imagery is wonderful and the satoru just needs a small fix to winter instead of winter's.

Good Luck in the Contest! :o) Helvi

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012

Thank you Helvi, it means a lot to have your kind review.

Comment from terry drake

Excellent

They vary in all shapes and sizes but they are all made of snow. Your senryu was well crafted and we now wait for the first snow of the season. Congratulations.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Terry for your kind review

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This meets the criteria of the 3-5-3 nature haiku contest as to form and syllable count, with a winter theme. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012

Thank you so much for your kind review.