kiddy pool no more
about a kid who is becomming a kid and is no longer a baby2 total reviews
Comment from doris1022
did yo mean for this to be 5-7-5? not sure of the counts here.
cute ideas and child like. fun write. flows like the kiddie pool water.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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did yo mean for this to be 5-7-5? not sure of the counts here.
cute ideas and child like. fun write. flows like the kiddie pool water.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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thanks that was the idea
Comment from mirren rue
Please do not take offense- at the end "Ill make magic." "Things will go my way" may be a little better considering "and" is used a couple of times already. This is a playful and youthful poem, I really enjoyed reading it. Nice work!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Please do not take offense- at the end "Ill make magic." "Things will go my way" may be a little better considering "and" is used a couple of times already. This is a playful and youthful poem, I really enjoyed reading it. Nice work!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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thanks and ill take that to heart
