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Comment from Curtis Hatch
Treischel,
The poem gives one much to think about. I have often said that our children are mirrors of ourselves. As long as the family continues to sprout new branches, I live on.
Godspeed,
Curtis
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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Treischel,
The poem gives one much to think about. I have often said that our children are mirrors of ourselves. As long as the family continues to sprout new branches, I live on.
Godspeed,
Curtis
Comment Written 23-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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Yes, you captured the gist.
Comment from Norbanus
Another turn of notions left to spin
this one gives lie to 'I' not a bit like him.'
The truth will out, will youngsters see again,
and give contempt a sorely needed trim?
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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Another turn of notions left to spin
this one gives lie to 'I' not a bit like him.'
The truth will out, will youngsters see again,
and give contempt a sorely needed trim?
Comment Written 23-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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Fantastic poetic review
Makes my energy renew.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece of poetry that encapsulates life and procreation. The words you used are profound and inspire deep thought. Very well done.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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This is a beautiful piece of poetry that encapsulates life and procreation. The words you used are profound and inspire deep thought. Very well done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind and generous review.
Comment from visionary1234
Hooray and congratulations on your well deserved win! to write good monorhyme is not easy - to write it and have it make sense is even more difficult! Well done! :) Sharyn
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012
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Hooray and congratulations on your well deserved win! to write good monorhyme is not easy - to write it and have it make sense is even more difficult! Well done! :) Sharyn
Comment Written 22-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012
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I appreciate your comment
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
This was such a well thought out and crafted piece of writing- excellent use of the monorhymes. I can see why it won first place. Great work and something to think about especially for many who have lost families. Great work and Happy Thanksgiving! Holly
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012
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This was such a well thought out and crafted piece of writing- excellent use of the monorhymes. I can see why it won first place. Great work and something to think about especially for many who have lost families. Great work and Happy Thanksgiving! Holly
Comment Written 22-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012
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Wonderful Review. Thanks much.
Comment from wanderlost
Excellent poem, T. It has a very interesting message and of course is a true to form monorhyme poem. Great work and congratulations on winning with this work! you deserved it!
Wanderlost
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012
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Excellent poem, T. It has a very interesting message and of course is a true to form monorhyme poem. Great work and congratulations on winning with this work! you deserved it!
Wanderlost
Comment Written 22-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012
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I Appreciate your input. Thanks.
Comment from GarthL
Brilliant, absolutely described immortality to a T . Don't think I've read a more enjoyable monorhyme. I understand why you won. Congratulations!
Very creative subject matter choice, I liked the color palette and that illustration is amazing, quite surreal.
As an old guy myself with a young daughter, but also adult children who have given me grandchildren, you definitely see the seed being recreated. A thoroughly enjoyable read. Thanks for the pleasure. Garth
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012
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Brilliant, absolutely described immortality to a T . Don't think I've read a more enjoyable monorhyme. I understand why you won. Congratulations!
Very creative subject matter choice, I liked the color palette and that illustration is amazing, quite surreal.
As an old guy myself with a young daughter, but also adult children who have given me grandchildren, you definitely see the seed being recreated. A thoroughly enjoyable read. Thanks for the pleasure. Garth
Comment Written 22-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012
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Thank you Garth for the wonderful review and the encouragement.
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You're very welcome. Write On!
Comment from dayan1980
I really like the subject matter. We always try to fight it, being as our parents were or continue to be. I loved this poem and found it refreshing and interesting. You really have a way with words and the picture is great. I want one like that.
Look forward to reading more and would love to hear what you think of my work.
Love Dayan
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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I really like the subject matter. We always try to fight it, being as our parents were or continue to be. I loved this poem and found it refreshing and interesting. You really have a way with words and the picture is great. I want one like that.
Look forward to reading more and would love to hear what you think of my work.
Love Dayan
Comment Written 21-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thanks Dayan. I'm sure our paths will cross later today.
Comment from Cornetist
One can tell from the read that this was a winner - or, at least, very high on the list! Nice job with the rhymes. Monorhyming can be a bit difficult..lots of snares and traps but you handled it well - nothing "forced" or "shoe-horned"!
Cornetist
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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One can tell from the read that this was a winner - or, at least, very high on the list! Nice job with the rhymes. Monorhyming can be a bit difficult..lots of snares and traps but you handled it well - nothing "forced" or "shoe-horned"!
Cornetist
Comment Written 21-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thanks you for the review. Very inciteful
Comment from adewpearl
Congratulations on your contest win
I also like your photo skills :-)
good alliteration in striking similarity and in the grouping of precisely, perfectly and personality
and in free the family Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Congratulations on your contest win
I also like your photo skills :-)
good alliteration in striking similarity and in the grouping of precisely, perfectly and personality
and in free the family Brooke
Comment Written 21-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thanks for your review and comments. I appreciate the encouragement.
