Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

Thanks God for Jason for a life well spent on humanitarian endeavor. Nothing is lost. I like the tell a story in a poem format you employed for this work.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012

Thanks Ola 4 your kind review.
Earth speaking about it's pain.
Systematic Breakdown of Planet by Ricky1024
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Ten steps ago I walked
in the shoes of Mankind
holding Jesus Christ's
hand.
Ten steps ago I died.
Yes, I am Planet Earth and
Human Kind has all but
destroyed me.
...
The Forests, The Land, The
Oceans, and Seas all now
are diseased!
The air is now and not
breathable.
It is the year 2612 and I
am now dead.
Ten steps ago mighty rivers
doth flow.
Now they are stagnant, poll-
uted, diseased, and shamed.
"Satan's Grim Game!"
...
My air is so polluted from
factories that do the Land
from sea to sea.
Yes, they dot like soured
fruit on the tree.
They fall to the ground and
are absorbed as poison.
...
The Oil, The Refinery, The
Chemicals, The Plastics all
pollute with toxins like a
shot of pain directly to my
vein...
...
Yes, I am Planet Earth the
place of all Humanities
birth and I now lie in waste.
A scrapyard of woen memories
to never again be conceived
because no one ever tried to
perceive.
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Written October 9th, 2012 at 2:26 Am. Eastern
Standard Time.
Special thanks goes out to FanStory, FanArt Review,
and it's Artist Stacey Nagy.
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Comment from mizzkris20

Excellent

This poem is very interesting. The flow of words were nice. and overall the poem was great! Thank you for sharing your writing with us. Good luck with future writings

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012

Thanks for your king review!
Earth speaking about it's pain.
Systematic Breakdown of Planet by Ricky1024
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Ten steps ago I walked
in the shoes of Mankind
holding Jesus Christ's
hand.
Ten steps ago I died.
Yes, I am Planet Earth and
Human Kind has all but
destroyed me.
...
The Forests, The Land, The
Oceans, and Seas all now
are diseased!
The air is now and not
breathable.
It is the year 2612 and I
am now dead.
Ten steps ago mighty rivers
doth flow.
Now they are stagnant, poll-
uted, diseased, and shamed.
"Satan's Grim Game!"
...
My air is so polluted from
factories that do the Land
from sea to sea.
Yes, they dot like soured
fruit on the tree.
They fall to the ground and
are absorbed as poison.
...
The Oil, The Refinery, The
Chemicals, The Plastics all
pollute with toxins like a
shot of pain directly to my
vein...
...
Yes, I am Planet Earth the
place of all Humanities
birth and I now lie in waste.
A scrapyard of woen memories
to never again be conceived
because no one ever tried to
perceive.













Author Notes
Written October 9th, 2012 at 2:26 Am. Eastern
Standard Time.
Special thanks goes out to FanStory, FanArt Review,
and it's Artist Stacey Nagy.
Pays one point and 2 member cents.
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Comment from Eric Corsten

Excellent

So, what's the moral of this? With a lot of love and tnderness life goes on and will persist! that's sure the truth..see you..I liked the poem

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012

Earth speaking about it's pain.
Systematic Breakdown of Planet by Ricky1024
Artwork by Stacey Nagy at FanArtReview.com
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October 9, 2012 Views: 17
Ten steps ago I walked
in the shoes of Mankind
holding Jesus Christ's
hand.
Ten steps ago I died.
Yes, I am Planet Earth and
Human Kind has all but
destroyed me.
...
The Forests, The Land, The
Oceans, and Seas all now
are diseased!
The air is now and not
breathable.
It is the year 2612 and I
am now dead.
Ten steps ago mighty rivers
doth flow.
Now they are stagnant, poll-
uted, diseased, and shamed.
"Satan's Grim Game!"
...
My air is so polluted from
factories that do the Land
from sea to sea.
Yes, they dot like soured
fruit on the tree.
They fall to the ground and
are absorbed as poison.
...
The Oil, The Refinery, The
Chemicals, The Plastics all
pollute with toxins like a
shot of pain directly to my
vein...
...
Yes, I am Planet Earth the
place of all Humanities
birth and I now lie in waste.
A scrapyard of woen memories
to never again be conceived
because no one ever tried to
perceive.
Author Notes
Written October 9th, 2012 at 2:26 Am. Eastern
Standard Time.
Special thanks goes out to FanStory, FanArt Review,
and it's Artist Stacey Nagy.
Pays one point and 2 member cents.
© Copyright 2012 Ricky1024 All rights reserved.
Ricky1024 has granted FanStory.com, its affiliates and its syndicates non-exclusive rights to display this work.
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