Ashes To Ashes
A Lento71 total reviews
Comment from squid152
Thanks for the education on a Lento. This poem very much reminds of Snow White. I have seen four movies on Snow White in the last six months.-Squid
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thanks for the education on a Lento. This poem very much reminds of Snow White. I have seen four movies on Snow White in the last six months.-Squid
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. Isn't it funny how there was an ugly or murderous step-somebody in so many of these fairy tales?--Wendy
Comment from Earl of Oxford
I did notice your sponsorship of the contest, and well done for that'. I considered entering but doubt I will, as I can't think of a way of including meter and not making the rhymes sound forced - OK, I'm a lazy git usually. :-)
This is the third longun on the trot I've read this am, and my brain-cell is getting fuzzled.
Blimey, you sure have succeeded where I feared of failing. Terrific flow and apparent unforced rhymes, back and front of lines. To maintain the exceptionall standard throughout, proves you are the gifted poet I knew you were.
I can't recall ever giving TWO sixers running (usually my week's total), but this deserves it for originality, creativity, and I'm sure loads of hard work.
Best wishes, Ray
Good luck with the contest.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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I did notice your sponsorship of the contest, and well done for that'. I considered entering but doubt I will, as I can't think of a way of including meter and not making the rhymes sound forced - OK, I'm a lazy git usually. :-)
This is the third longun on the trot I've read this am, and my brain-cell is getting fuzzled.
Blimey, you sure have succeeded where I feared of failing. Terrific flow and apparent unforced rhymes, back and front of lines. To maintain the exceptionall standard throughout, proves you are the gifted poet I knew you were.
I can't recall ever giving TWO sixers running (usually my week's total), but this deserves it for originality, creativity, and I'm sure loads of hard work.
Best wishes, Ray
Good luck with the contest.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Well, my lord, since the form does not exact any meter tributes, I expect your entry any day now. Truly, meter is not a requisite of the form. It's just that I find it almost impossible to write any other way if there is any rhyme involved. It is a challenging write, but I don't think you are such a lazy git as you say. My family welcomed me back from Hermit mode yesterday morning and suggested I ban the Lento for life! So, someone must keep it going. I do appreciate the read and review and of course, those fabulous stars.--Wendy
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
An excellent Lento formatted poem. Great use of "Sates" and "Plaits". A unique twist to the Cinderella story. The artwork goes very well with the work. A most enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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An excellent Lento formatted poem. Great use of "Sates" and "Plaits". A unique twist to the Cinderella story. The artwork goes very well with the work. A most enjoyable read.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my words. A bit of a walk on the dark side of old Cindy, but in all the variations of the story I read, only Disney does not exact some sort of revenge. Gotta love those fairy tales--Wendy
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You are welcome. Remember the authors of certain fairy tale books that were horror stories by today's rating standards? Always trying to get a lesson thrown into the story.... MN :)
Comment from juliedickson55
Ahhh, fitting tribute and retelling of Cinderella!
I like the story, she's deserving and was stepped on and abused...
I love this ending:
"Dread the fate of those who dared
Tread on Cinderella's toes."
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Ahhh, fitting tribute and retelling of Cinderella!
I like the story, she's deserving and was stepped on and abused...
I love this ending:
"Dread the fate of those who dared
Tread on Cinderella's toes."
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you Julie for the read and review. I agree, she deserved some sort of revenge. I enjoyed my little bit of a trip to the Dark Side.--Wendy
Comment from amada
A very thought-provoking work. This Lento form is fascinating; the first one I read, for sure the content is spellbinding as well. Good bye fairy tales!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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A very thought-provoking work. This Lento form is fascinating; the first one I read, for sure the content is spellbinding as well. Good bye fairy tales!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Good morning Amada, you should try one of these. It is my first, but I think It is always good to stretch. I have another two pages of the junk that didn't make it into the poem. I appreciate your read and review.--Wendy
Comment from Angel Blessings
Great poem! Loved it! Great rhyming, good flow, good presentation. Such strong meaning of your poem! Great job! Thank you for sharing. You are very gifted!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Great poem! Loved it! Great rhyming, good flow, good presentation. Such strong meaning of your poem! Great job! Thank you for sharing. You are very gifted!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you Angel Blessings. A bit of a walk on the Dark Side, but I have always loved the tale in all its various tellings. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review it.--Wendy
Comment from McMurry903
This is so good! I really love the story you told in this and while using this very challenging form. Very creative and wonderfully written, I wish you the best of luck in this contest! Brian :)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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This is so good! I really love the story you told in this and while using this very challenging form. Very creative and wonderfully written, I wish you the best of luck in this contest! Brian :)
Comment Written 07-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Hey Brian, thank you for the read, the review and the good wishes. I appreciate that you took the time away from your own work. And welcome to FS. Hope you are having fun.
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Great Lento Wendy! and 10 verses too! Excellent rhythm and meaningful rhymes throughout your exceptional poem. Not Disney no - definitely better! Congratulations on a great write and good luck in the contest!
All the best,
Rodger
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Great Lento Wendy! and 10 verses too! Excellent rhythm and meaningful rhymes throughout your exceptional poem. Not Disney no - definitely better! Congratulations on a great write and good luck in the contest!
All the best,
Rodger
Comment Written 07-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Good morning Rodger, Thanks for taking the time to review this. As to ten verses, I think I was the original length editor on War and Peace, Les Miserables and Hiawatha.I find it so hard to write short. I really had a time with this form--my family asked if I was going to become a full-time hermit or just for this writing. I have two left over pages of mixed drek,not quite what I wanted to say and rhymes that went nowhere. Gheesh. I am thrilled that you like what finally emerged with me. Could be another two years before another of these contests. ;-) Wendy
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I must say it IS different and very entertaining. I always loved Cinderella and Snow White. They were my favorites.
You did a wonderful job on the poem. The presentation was nice as well. Nancy
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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I must say it IS different and very entertaining. I always loved Cinderella and Snow White. They were my favorites.
You did a wonderful job on the poem. The presentation was nice as well. Nancy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. I'm glad you liked it--Wendy
Comment from Joannforsberg
Sighing as she sweeps each grate,
Drying tears she can't allow.
Vying with her vicious fate,
Crying out she makes a vow.
THAT DECIDING MOMENT TO TAKE CHARE OF HER OWN EXISTENCE....
GREATLY WRITTEN.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Sighing as she sweeps each grate,
Drying tears she can't allow.
Vying with her vicious fate,
Crying out she makes a vow.
THAT DECIDING MOMENT TO TAKE CHARE OF HER OWN EXISTENCE....
GREATLY WRITTEN.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Good morning Joann, Yes, she certainly took charge. A bit of a jump to the Dark Side but I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate the time spent on the read and review--Wendy
