Comment from writeapoem

Excellent

Evan the egret, fits well the story and the chapter. The image a good image to compliment the rhyme. The flow you know like a row in a boat smooth but spicey. Children have to love this tale from a chapter in the book.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thank you so much for your lovely review of this chapter. I am delighted you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from wordsareus

Excellent

You have a knack for writing stories in poems directed towards children. I really enjoy reading your poems, and imagine that many children and parents must enjoy reading them too.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

Thank you so much for that, I need a boost at the moment as I am going to do some readings in infant and junior schools this week and I am feeling a little nervous! Deep breathing I have been told is the remedy, LOL, I will probably be gasping! Thank you for your lovely review, I will carry that into the classroom tomorrow! xsx Sandra

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Great alliterative name
good use of rhyming couplets including the good proximate rhyme of alone/home
good assonance of short E sounds in learnt/spread
good alliteration in feelings/flying/face
good use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your lines
I like the way you built suspense in your story as Evan gets lost
I'm so glad Bodger the Beaver could help him out :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

Thank you so much, Brooke for your really lovely review. I appreciate your words a lot, thank you! xsx Sandra

Comment from Hollyhock

Exceptional

Another lovely chapter and a new character. With a name like Evan he must be a Welsh egret!!
Lots of good pointers for children again, helping others, co-operating and finding the time to recognise other's distress.
I know I always make suggestions about your rhythm but although there are one or two very little wobbles, this piece still reads very well.
Great bedtime story.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

I always look for your reviews so I can get the positive input, you always offer good advice! Thank you again for another really wonderful review, Andrea, I really do appreciate your comments, I am quite proud of myself, "only one or two little wobbles!" see how much you have helped me already!!!!!!
Thank you BIG time for the super 6, and I really do look for your reviews, they are worth their weight in gold! xsx Sandra

Comment from dmt1967

Exceptional

As always my friend very well written and I loved the picture the story in a poem thing I love and the way it flows evenly thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

And thank you again for another wonderful review! It is so nice to know you do enjoy my stories,and to give it the super 6 is so very kind, thank you my dear friend! xsx Sandra

Comment from photoglvr2

Excellent

Your work is amazing. The story it told was very interesting and engaging as well. Your use of rhyme for something so long was great. Thank you for choosing to use my egret photo with your work..

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

When I saw your photo, I was over the moon! It was perfect for my story. Often, after writing these stories I have great difficulty finding the right picture, so again, I thank you, and for the lovely review! xx Sandra

reply by photoglvr2 on 13-Nov-2012

You are welcome..

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Wow, I enjoyed this story. Your word creatively and interestingly painted the character of this Egret. Any child will enjoy this poem.

Ironically, I posted a poem today about a bird as well.

Thank you for yours.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

Thank you for your lovely review, Poetic Friend, I'm really pleased you enjoyed it. I shall have a read of yours! Thank you, again!! xsx Sandra

Comment from Eric Corsten

Excellent

Very nice..I liked this poem. very descriptive and paints a nice picture. Easy to follow the dialog and easy to read. Hope to see you soon

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

Hello, Eric, nice to meet you! I see you write for children too, I shall have a good read through your poems. Thank you for reviewing and reading mine, I am pleased you enjoyed it. I hope also to read a lot more from you. xsx Sandra

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Exceptional

Sandra, I love the addition of another new character. I truly love this story. Just so whimsical but so very believable. I feel like I know each and every character in this great children's story. Keep up the great work. Great artwork choice to enhance this poetic story,,,,,,,Jim xx

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

Thank you,my very dear friend. It is funny how they are becoming so real now. I am always thinking, 'Now would Timmy do that?.. Reggie wouldn't want to see that...' lol, anyone would think I was going round the bend!!
Jim, thank you. You always cheer me up, I just love your reviews. AND a MEGGA BIG thank you for the 6 stars!! Take care, Jim, love Sandra. xxx

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend I enjoyed this poem the story unfolded very well with very good rhyming throughout and a very good ending everything worked out in the end children of all ages will enjoyed this story poem well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012

I am so pleased you liked this one Jill, it was a new venture bringing a bird into the picture, I made sure it was only a fish eating bird, lol! Thank you so much for your wonderful review again! xsx Sandra