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Comment from MelReyn
This reads almost like a story, and that is why I like it! I feel connected to the woman spying on her husband, I was angry with the husband and his fluzy, and I feel bad for the woman. I picture the husband, spreading out broken glass, sparkling in the sun, and the woman shredding herself but still walking across it. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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This reads almost like a story, and that is why I like it! I feel connected to the woman spying on her husband, I was angry with the husband and his fluzy, and I feel bad for the woman. I picture the husband, spreading out broken glass, sparkling in the sun, and the woman shredding herself but still walking across it. Excellent work!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Thank you MelReyn, thank you for your review and I am so glad that you liked and could feel ' Broken Glass '
Comment from Ecclectic_Reverie
This poem has so much depth to it. I love the fact that you intertwined a narrative. It's really well written too. It was a nice read :)
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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This poem has so much depth to it. I love the fact that you intertwined a narrative. It's really well written too. It was a nice read :)
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the review Ecclectic_Reverie, and I am so glad that you liked. ' Broken glass'
Comment from Bundhoo
Great ! GreAT ! Great !
Your poem is really nice,the choice of words are simple but touching.For me you have created maximum of effects with the minimum of words.Your poem grips the reader all along.Iwish you best of luck for the contest!
Regards,
BUNDHOO!!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Great ! GreAT ! Great !
Your poem is really nice,the choice of words are simple but touching.For me you have created maximum of effects with the minimum of words.Your poem grips the reader all along.Iwish you best of luck for the contest!
Regards,
BUNDHOO!!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Thank you Bundhoo for your review, and I am so glad that you enjoyed " Broken glass'
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You are welcome !
Comment from THEHISTORYMAKER
Excellent and very emotional poem. If it's true and it's happened to you I can only say fatherless son. Why some men do this, makes you think are all men like this. But they are not.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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Excellent and very emotional poem. If it's true and it's happened to you I can only say fatherless son. Why some men do this, makes you think are all men like this. But they are not.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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Thank you THEHISTORYMAKER. For your generous review. I am so glad that you found ' Broken glass ' to be a great read. No none of this has happened to me, it is all fiction. Yes their are decent men out there and I am sure that you are one of them
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Unfortunately I am not, I am a woman. Perhaps I write like a man.
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Hi THEHISTORYMAKER , Sorry to presume you were a man. Thank you once again for The six stars
Comment from k.french
A fabulous poem,I had to read it over again,I would definitely recommend this ,I must say that your poems are very addictive.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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A fabulous poem,I had to read it over again,I would definitely recommend this ,I must say that your poems are very addictive.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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Thank you Kelly
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Thank you K.
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. It speaks of dishonesty as well as betrayal. We need to speak the truth. If you don't love someone, break off with them first. Don't keep the other around until you are sure you have someone to love. Great work.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. It speaks of dishonesty as well as betrayal. We need to speak the truth. If you don't love someone, break off with them first. Don't keep the other around until you are sure you have someone to love. Great work.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you
Comment from terry drake
Rascal Flatts has a song called "Winner of a Losing Game;" It starts off like your poem ends up, Have you ever loved someone who just don't feel the same." I loved your poem and the intrigue it disclosed in the hunt and hiding. Your cadence suffered a bit with your story line changes but it did not interfere with my appreciation.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Rascal Flatts has a song called "Winner of a Losing Game;" It starts off like your poem ends up, Have you ever loved someone who just don't feel the same." I loved your poem and the intrigue it disclosed in the hunt and hiding. Your cadence suffered a bit with your story line changes but it did not interfere with my appreciation.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you
Comment from santapola
A heartfelt write the make me suspect there are words of truth in here which is sad if that is so . A good write and thanks you for sharing it x
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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A heartfelt write the make me suspect there are words of truth in here which is sad if that is so . A good write and thanks you for sharing it x
Comment Written 29-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you
Comment from EMB
Well, I understand that betrayal is supposed to be the them. But this seems to be one of anger and/or loyalty, albeit triggered by betrayal. (And know your "whores." It's "ho" not "hoe the garden tool." LOL)
Nice work.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Well, I understand that betrayal is supposed to be the them. But this seems to be one of anger and/or loyalty, albeit triggered by betrayal. (And know your "whores." It's "ho" not "hoe the garden tool." LOL)
Nice work.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written a sad poem with so much feeling through the piece it reads very strongly and well presented good luck regard's Jill
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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This is very well written a sad poem with so much feeling through the piece it reads very strongly and well presented good luck regard's Jill
Comment Written 29-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you