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Comment from k.french
Another lovely piece of work,would definitely recommend this and I also loved the rhyme to this poem.when you read this start of this poem you just wana keep reading on.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Another lovely piece of work,would definitely recommend this and I also loved the rhyme to this poem.when you read this start of this poem you just wana keep reading on.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you for your generous rating and I am so glad that you were lost in a taste of Hollywood
Comment from Terror2s
Your poem flowed well and was fun to read. I didn't notice any errors. You did a nice job of letting the reader know how exciting it would be to be a part of the glamour. T2
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Your poem flowed well and was fun to read. I didn't notice any errors. You did a nice job of letting the reader know how exciting it would be to be a part of the glamour. T2
Comment Written 28-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you T2, I am so glad that Hollywood and Co spoke it's words of glamour to you
Comment from juliedickson55
For free verse, your poem has many rhymes...?
It's good, but not sure it follows the format of the contest?
I agree with the premise, that Hollywood is glitzy-fake, that real is better
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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For free verse, your poem has many rhymes...?
It's good, but not sure it follows the format of the contest?
I agree with the premise, that Hollywood is glitzy-fake, that real is better
Comment Written 28-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Hello Julie, Thank you for your review, I just wanted people to enjoy a touch of " Hollywood and Co "
Comment from coolcatkev
Fun, fun, fun. I may not want to go to Hollywood, but I love how you talk about it. Very well written, tight, good adjectives, just great writing
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Fun, fun, fun. I may not want to go to Hollywood, but I love how you talk about it. Very well written, tight, good adjectives, just great writing
Comment Written 28-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Hello coolcatkev, thanks for your review. I am so glad ' Hollywood and co ' tickled you
Comment from Topher Phaestus
I really like the simplistic meter and rhyme of this piece. It feels bouncy and a little ditzy.
And get whatever I choose. <--- Whatever is a tricky word. It throws the meter off a bit.
And wear over - the - top wigs. <--- Same with over-the-top.
The last three stanzas have a lot of meter issues.
It's still really cute, but I would love to see it with these fixed.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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I really like the simplistic meter and rhyme of this piece. It feels bouncy and a little ditzy.
And get whatever I choose. <--- Whatever is a tricky word. It throws the meter off a bit.
And wear over - the - top wigs. <--- Same with over-the-top.
The last three stanzas have a lot of meter issues.
It's still really cute, but I would love to see it with these fixed.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Hi Topher Phaestus, thanks for the review
Comment from Glasstruth
A very fun loving poem about desires and hopes. I think that world looks more glamorous than what it might be. Like the sound of "Hollywood or Bollywood" Two different worlds, yet somehow related. Great write! Les
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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A very fun loving poem about desires and hopes. I think that world looks more glamorous than what it might be. Like the sound of "Hollywood or Bollywood" Two different worlds, yet somehow related. Great write! Les
Comment Written 28-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Hello Glasstruth, thank you for the review, I am so glad you found ' Hollywood and co " fun, it certainly was a fun poem to write
Comment from Georgia333
Well said. The issue of Hollywood and its phoney society was well said yet we still crave it. The poem flowed well, and enabled the reader to envisage the described scenes well done.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Well said. The issue of Hollywood and its phoney society was well said yet we still crave it. The poem flowed well, and enabled the reader to envisage the described scenes well done.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Hello Georgia, thanks for your review, so glad you liked ' Hollywood and co '. Yes people always want what they cant have
Comment from NaughtieScribe
I found this to be a whimsical and intentionally superficial work (meaning the sentiment). And it works. This poem is well written and reads with a nice rhythm. I found nothing to tweak or adjust. Overall this is a kewl read.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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I found this to be a whimsical and intentionally superficial work (meaning the sentiment). And it works. This poem is well written and reads with a nice rhythm. I found nothing to tweak or adjust. Overall this is a kewl read.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Hello Naughtiescribe, Thank you for your review. I am so glad you liked. ' Hollywood and co '
Comment from mumsyone
You can have my part of Hollywood! Ha! Wouldn't care to live there, or even to visit. nteresting what other people seem to see in it though.
I want to feel apart (a part)
And get what ever (whatever) I choose.
And wear over the top (over-the-top) wigs.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012
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You can have my part of Hollywood! Ha! Wouldn't care to live there, or even to visit. nteresting what other people seem to see in it though.
I want to feel apart (a part)
And get what ever (whatever) I choose.
And wear over the top (over-the-top) wigs.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012
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Me neither , lol. Thanks for the editing mumsyone, changes have been made. And thank you for all of your stars,
