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Comment from k.french
Great poem,I like the rhyme to it and I also love the ending,very unexpected.I would definitely recommend this poem to somebody else.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Great poem,I like the rhyme to it and I also love the ending,very unexpected.I would definitely recommend this poem to somebody else.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you for your Rating and I am glad that you enjoyed the twist
Comment from terry drake
Refusing the drink that intends to consume you takes a will power that the strongest man would envy. Your poem shows the struggle and rejoices on the selection.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Refusing the drink that intends to consume you takes a will power that the strongest man would envy. Your poem shows the struggle and rejoices on the selection.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Hello Terry and thank you so much for your review and yes alcohol can have a controlling hold on all that drink it's poison
Comment from GroundedAngel
This was so well written and profound. I'm especially pleased with the ending. I have a friend who is ' detoxing ' from alcohol. Wish he could read this.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012
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This was so well written and profound. I'm especially pleased with the ending. I have a friend who is ' detoxing ' from alcohol. Wish he could read this.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012
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GroundedAngel i am pleases that you liked my poem and I do wish your friend a speedy recovery from the clutches of the devils nectar
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Me too. He's in jail for driving drunk. He went thru terrible DT's for almost three days. I just met him through a friend, but I have such compassion for his suffering. He'd been sober for years, then his brother died and he started drinking again. Anyway, your poem really made me think of him.
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Perhaps when he comes out you could show him ' Liquor in my veins '
Comment from GWHARGIS
Liquor is a very fair weather friend. Pollutes the mind and any common sense with in minutes. You have described the mental anguish that goes along with the curse. Nice job.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012
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Liquor is a very fair weather friend. Pollutes the mind and any common sense with in minutes. You have described the mental anguish that goes along with the curse. Nice job.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012
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Thank you for your comment, I just had to describe what it must feel like for someone suffering from alcohol abuse
Comment from 4tulips
If only we all could be so daring and only ask for a large orange juice whilst in the midst of wanting/needing a drink of something far stronger. Yet it seems that experience has somehow taught this person the consequences of drinking and it's not so nice effects the next morning. I enjoyed reading your poem/story. Thank for sharing it.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012
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If only we all could be so daring and only ask for a large orange juice whilst in the midst of wanting/needing a drink of something far stronger. Yet it seems that experience has somehow taught this person the consequences of drinking and it's not so nice effects the next morning. I enjoyed reading your poem/story. Thank for sharing it.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012
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Thank you 4tulips for your comment , I am gad you enjoyed it
Comment from Thatguypk
Ha, how refreshing to see a bit of wisdom winning the day in a tale about the potency of alcohol. Very nicely written, and a pleasantly surprising ending.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Ha, how refreshing to see a bit of wisdom winning the day in a tale about the potency of alcohol. Very nicely written, and a pleasantly surprising ending.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thank you Thatguypk, I am so glad that you enjoyed a read of 'Liquor in my veins '
Comment from Gungalo
It's now my turn to get served
" What would you like" ?
The bartender asks,
I smile weakly at my new found task
As I tell him
"Just give me a pure orange in a very large glass "
The smartest move you ever made!!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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It's now my turn to get served
" What would you like" ?
The bartender asks,
I smile weakly at my new found task
As I tell him
"Just give me a pure orange in a very large glass "
The smartest move you ever made!!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Lol, glad you enjoyed it Gungalo
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LOL thanks you!!
Comment from music_saves_lives
Very detailed poem. Like the way you used your rhyme scheme. What I didn't like is how this reminded me of my childhood. Also, try to illustrate a little more.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Very detailed poem. Like the way you used your rhyme scheme. What I didn't like is how this reminded me of my childhood. Also, try to illustrate a little more.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Yes ' Liquor in my veins ' is a detailed poem, I am sure it is one that many people will be able to relate to