Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I really liked your use of personification and the "dressed/undressed" metaphor and contrast. Your pivot line and presentation are quite effective as well. Congratulations on your strong second place in the contest. Hugs- Joan

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012

Thank, Joan. I was both surprised and pleased to be a runner up.

Comment from doris1022

Exceptional

very nice work!! you are original and you are getting my vote for the contest! hope you win. good luck. keep sharing your originality with us my friend.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012

Thank you so much for the bonus star and the vote.

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

This is just beautiful Dallas. I do love Winter. But Autumn was so pretty this year. I love the wording in this poem. Have to go vote. At ys later.xxoo Linda

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012

Thanks, Linda. Appreciate it.

Comment from squid152

Excellent

Great alliteration with dressed in December and Autumn not quite undressed. I really don't like winter much. Except for the holidays. Nice read.-Gary

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in good tanka form
I love your use of personification
good alliteration in door/dressed in December, which is also consonant with undressed
lurks is the perfect verb choice
and I find the whole concept charming that winter is trying to hurry autumn along before she finishes undressing :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012

Thanks, Brooke, for the review.

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is an excellent tanka, having both a vivid natural image and an emotional reaction to that image. I like the personification (since, unlike in haiku, personification is allowed in tanka). I particularly like the creative line "dressed in December." Best of luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012

Thank you for reviewing. Lots more freedom with tanka.

Comment from twinklepoems

Exceptional

I don't know where you live Dallas, but where I live summer doesn't even know it should be undressed and long gone! I like your Tanka and liked the cleverness of winter lurking when Autmn is not ready to take her leave! That was a seamless twist. Miss you in class. I am taking rhymes and meters! Good luck in the

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012

Thanks for the bonus star. Had our first class in Free Verse. Am sure I am going to love it. Good luck in yours.

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Hi Dallas,

A cute poem, in good tanka form. You've presented a wonderful picture here, of what we have to "look forward to." Good pivot line, and perfect artwork. Thanks for entering the contest!

Lois

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012

Thanks. I like the freedom of a tanka. Still love Haiku but the rules aree not as rigid here.

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Hi Dallas! I love the satire in this tanka. You have a great connecting line that serves as a satroi for the haiku-like first three lines and begins the final two reflective lines. Great alliteration, not overdone. Love the humor in the last two lines. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012

Thanks, Sue. Appreciate the review.

Comment from Bina1

Excellent

Your lovely poem reminds me, it won't be long! Better think of warming up that shovel...ugh! A lovely presentation, a delightful poem. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012

yep, won't be long. Thanks for reviewing.