Comment from linsbm

Excellent

Nice approach to your poem in the interrogative style. It evokes deep feelings of sadness, one can really feel. Nice flow in spite of the sticking to the format of a Nonet poetry. Well done. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012

Thank you for reading and reviewing, much appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

A good nonet, and a good entry for the contest. Good artwork to complement it, too.

A lovers (lover's) lament.

My love(,) you are now free.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012

Thank you so much for your helpful review mumsyone :) Jaq x

Comment from Tengeresz

Excellent

Hi

When I looked at the picture and than read the poem something struck me. The words form a cup. There are many implications for such visual with this theme.

Tengeresz

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012

Thank you so much for your insightful words. :) Jaq x

Comment from Eliza M

Exceptional

So very sad. You capture the essence of the heartbreak and longing when someone so dear and loved passes. Jaq this poem flows with great fluency and has perfect construction and syllable count.It is so powerful in its simplicity and specific, poignant word choices make for an excellent piece of writing. Well done and good luck, this is a very worthy entry. Liz.x

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my work Liz. Much appreciated my friend. Good to see you back. :) Jaq x

Comment from Doc Holiday

Excellent

Well-written nonet poem.
Asking the question how lovers could enjoy one last time together. Senusous and emotional! Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012

Thank you so much for your kind review. :) Jaq x

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

So much emotion in this sad poem this is well written and the syllable count is correct you have enhanced this well with the art work well done good luck I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012

Thanks as always Jill, your words mean a lot. :) Jaq x

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This is really beautifully done. Your syllables are perfect. The theme of this nonet poem is filled with emotion for the writer and for the reader. Very relatable, unfortunately. Best wishes to you in this contest.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012

Thank you for reading on reviewing Joy, much appreciated :) Jaq x

Comment from RJ

Excellent

A well written poem that gives us a good visual of much love and the sadness when one passes and leaves another behind. The flow followed the guidelines of the contest. Good luck. RJ

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012

Thank you so much RJ for your kind critique. :) Jaq x

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

It is so very sad girl. To end in death on must obviously be in a tragic state of mind. Ray did a very nice job with the end of this.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012

Thanks Gungalo he offered a couple of alternative words which worked better. He is a star. Thanks to you for reading and reviewing. Always appreciated. :) x

reply by Gungalo on 16-Oct-2012

Aha he is at that!!

reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012

Thanks Gungalo he offered a couple of alternative words which worked better. He is a star. Thanks to you for reading and reviewing. Always appreciated. :) x

Comment from EMB

Excellent

This was such a sensuous but sad piece of poetry. It speaks as if a loved one has departed from all of us, but with hope, you could read it as a simple but painful breakup. Somehow, I don't think the latter is the case.

Nice work.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012

Thank you so much for your lovely appraisal. :) x

reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012

Thank you so much for your lovely appraisal. :) x