Comment from TammyGail

Exceptional

ever interesting B.. and indeed your descriptions say it all and than some or they do to this reader - something I love about your ink your an amazing writer and I can say for sure my eyes have seen the best you've ever written - stunning work crafting this poem and thanks for sharing always a pleasure -

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012

Thanks T much appreciated as always.... love to all !!!

Comment from ernesto escarro

Exceptional

Singular reason

Reason of existence governs this principle of life.
The air breath turning into real figure after
the shadow is conceived to get born.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2012

Thanks ERNESTO: much appreciated...

reply by ernesto escarro on 19-Oct-2012

Thanks for sharing.

Comment from Meta~Mark

Excellent

Bic, this is a journey of YOU and of mankind, this singular sperm is traveling at eons light speed in search of Lilith and the garden, as the serpeant seaps slowly into your synopsis..

BRILLIANT, MAN ARE YOU THERE!

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012

I am glad you can see the spiritual aspect and appreciate the advancement of newbirth through the physical wonder that is the Sperm! LOL.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

LOL Bic, it's the long way in, isn't it? I found this free verse to be very adventurous and exciting. A bit heavy on the masculine side but then ... why not. Loved this:

Singular he's alone
Entering her womb
Excited tussles reach
An entrance grand
For feminine breach
His lady serving
One well prescribed
With copious release

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012

Hey ...G... I thought it was the only way in but then each to their own, glad you could appreciate the masculinity of the piece with a male dominance and forbodding complemented by the soft feminine acceptation that is the orgasm and conception of life...

reply by Gungalo on 15-Oct-2012

Smile Bic.

Comment from Amsterdam

Excellent

I dont know where to start
Not where it farts
LOL couldnt resist...
This one is a gem
Lol Again
Watch out for the white
You could loose your sight
Am

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012

Excellent AM...
glad you...
enjoyed...
the...
ride.

...so too speak.LOL.

Comment from Angels27

Excellent

Very innovative topic and interesting read. The first step in life's long journey. Very smooth flowing lines. A singular reason...is a very cool read. Nice work Bicpen.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012

Excellent much appreciate.

Comment from juliedickson55

Excellent

Very clever and amusing, but at the same time, quite poetic in nature...

I like tussles reach and feminine breach

Nice rhymes and a good rhythm in your poem.
Thanks for the fun morning read.

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 Comment Written 12-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012

Excellent, much appreciate...