A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "A Singular Reason"Metre ... Freeverse
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Comment from lyenochka
This poem is not only free verse but could be considered a shape poem considering the theme. I puzzled at how something from 2015 could still be promoted. At any rate, the poem shows how miraculous life happens considering the odds:
"Split second timing
Always fine tuning"
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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This poem is not only free verse but could be considered a shape poem considering the theme. I puzzled at how something from 2015 could still be promoted. At any rate, the poem shows how miraculous life happens considering the odds:
"Split second timing
Always fine tuning"
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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well you can promote anything you like so long as its your just use the pot of gold say you promote it and it only gets three reviews never mind promote it again and get another three reviews such is the world of fan-story ... glad you enjoyed ... my new regime is to post something new with something old as theres a whole new generation of fanstorians.
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ah, good strategy!
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excellent ... I like it I'm enjoying it again ...
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This has form, but the scientific content is slightly out of kilter. If only a single sperm entered the womb, there would be no procreation. At least this part of the poem could do with some more work.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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This has form, but the scientific content is slightly out of kilter. If only a single sperm entered the womb, there would be no procreation. At least this part of the poem could do with some more work.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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well Im sad to defeat your amazing scientific breakthrough of a discovery but its a well known FACT that only one sperm fertilises the egg so if your going to start tit for tat shit tell right now so I can mute you and listen to real people with real issues with my work please remember a critical review is to be subjective and in aid of enhancement ... THANK YOU MISSUS and much appreciated.
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I agree totally with your figure on fertilization of course (except for twins), just not on how many sperm enter the womb (do not confuse womb and egg). You can of course mute me if you want, but I don't generally receive complaints about my reviewing, even though perhaps sometimes I don't express too well -its up to the author to read accurately what I actually write, and not put words in "the box". And yes, I do know exactly what constructive criticism means.
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... well I'll tell you what smart arse ... the poem really is only about one sperm and that is the one that made it in my poem im not even thinking about making it into a twin birth or even quadruplets or even eight babies just one sperm on his day out going for an adventure to see where his male ejaculation will take him ... and seeings as you know what a constructive criticism means how about you actually give one ... so I can read just exactly what you did mean and exactly what you thought of the poem even if you thought it was a two and below average or even a six which is exceptional ... I dont normally make things up or put words in any one's box but if your going to get pedantic over the simplicity of one sperm that even the pictures testifies to I d rather you went elsewhere otherwise you can stay and have you say and stars whatever that may be that way we all know where we stand as poets and where we stand with each other.
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well-written poem about sperm. They are fascinating little swimmers necessary for childbirth. I have to say this is the first poem I've read about sperm. Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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This is a well-written poem about sperm. They are fascinating little swimmers necessary for childbirth. I have to say this is the first poem I've read about sperm. Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Excellent much appreciated well believe it or not I think this was and is the only one I've ever written about the sperm so here's to it ...lol.
Comment from P0cketP0et
This is a well written poem, and I appreciate the story behind it. The reproductive cycle is a fascinating process. Thanks again for sharing your poem!
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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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This is a well written poem, and I appreciate the story behind it. The reproductive cycle is a fascinating process. Thanks again for sharing your poem!
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Excellent much appreciated glad you could enjoy.
Comment from Randa Dayle
I hope the sperm makes it to its desired destination. You have a very interesting sense of humor, and your writing is inspiring....thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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I hope the sperm makes it to its desired destination. You have a very interesting sense of humor, and your writing is inspiring....thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Excellent ... glad you could enjoy.
Comment from susand3022
Coming through! Coming through! Baby on the way!... well almost... sort of... LOL, this was cute Bicpen! I enjoyed the read. I have trouble writing Free Verse, it's fun for me when someone else doesn't! :)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Coming through! Coming through! Baby on the way!... well almost... sort of... LOL, this was cute Bicpen! I enjoyed the read. I have trouble writing Free Verse, it's fun for me when someone else doesn't! :)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Excellent ... much appreciated ... glad you could enjoy.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this free verse poem. This is an interesting topic you have chosen. I don't know if you are aware of the currently running free verse contest, but I would suggest you enter a piece, you might have a good chance at winning. Your illustration is appropriate and your manipulations to the background and font here are attractive and add to the presentation.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you for sharing this free verse poem. This is an interesting topic you have chosen. I don't know if you are aware of the currently running free verse contest, but I would suggest you enter a piece, you might have a good chance at winning. Your illustration is appropriate and your manipulations to the background and font here are attractive and add to the presentation.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Excellent ... I haven't been writing lately but maybe inthe future ... much appreciated.
Comment from Gloria ....
Yowza you can only imagine my surprise to open your post only to be greeted by a spermatazoon. I almost ran for the hills, but it really does look a bit like a pine cone up close and personal like this.
Ha, very fun poem. The competition must be even more intense than that in the top ten rankings on FanStory. Shhh, don't tell anyone I said that.
Very fun Bicpen as is your nickname. I like Bics. :-)
Gloria
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Yowza you can only imagine my surprise to open your post only to be greeted by a spermatazoon. I almost ran for the hills, but it really does look a bit like a pine cone up close and personal like this.
Ha, very fun poem. The competition must be even more intense than that in the top ten rankings on FanStory. Shhh, don't tell anyone I said that.
Very fun Bicpen as is your nickname. I like Bics. :-)
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Excellent glad you enjoyed ... Bic`s are cool ...!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, bicpen, I enjoyed reading this shape poem about the sperm that gives life to the egg and is created by God to become a boy or girl.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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this is an excellent write, bicpen, I enjoyed reading this shape poem about the sperm that gives life to the egg and is created by God to become a boy or girl.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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... much appreciated ...
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is certainly a unique take on this prompt. Clever and enjoyable. At first, I thought it would be too graphic, but you kept away from that. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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This is certainly a unique take on this prompt. Clever and enjoyable. At first, I thought it would be too graphic, but you kept away from that. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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... much appreciated ...
