Autumnal Perspective
Perspectives Poem14 total reviews
Comment from deb552
Well done Debbie. You have caught the different perspectives of Autumn, quite well in each stanza. The part about the leaves really hits home cos I can barely see my grass right now...consequences of having a metro park right behind my yard, there are trees every where. The poem has a good flow. and each stanza works well with the next. deb
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012
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Well done Debbie. You have caught the different perspectives of Autumn, quite well in each stanza. The part about the leaves really hits home cos I can barely see my grass right now...consequences of having a metro park right behind my yard, there are trees every where. The poem has a good flow. and each stanza works well with the next. deb
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012
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Thank you. This is a new style I learned in my writing group. You should give it a try!!! Debbie
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I think your group is great cos I see how it's inspired you in so many ways. It's great to have that. Do they take out of town members....LOL! I'll just keep reading your works and at some point be brave to try out new things. Have a great Monday! deb
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I loved it. It flowed so well and you mentioned my favorite things about autumn. I like Prespective poems. I never heard of them until I read your earlier one today.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012
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I loved it. It flowed so well and you mentioned my favorite things about autumn. I like Prespective poems. I never heard of them until I read your earlier one today.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012
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Thank you so very much. I wrote another one this morning about fall~Debbie
Comment from missy98writer
Debbie,
Your poem is original and superbly written with rich imagery painted by your words.
The art work you used is stunning.
In your poem you used excellent metaphors and great use of alliteration.
I enjoyed your lines:
IV
Usual parade of
autumnal ghouls
goblins causing fright
V
Time to reflect
on this year
refill or autumnal cup
I'd recommend your whimiscal poem to other reviewers, my friend.
Love ya,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012
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Debbie,
Your poem is original and superbly written with rich imagery painted by your words.
The art work you used is stunning.
In your poem you used excellent metaphors and great use of alliteration.
I enjoyed your lines:
IV
Usual parade of
autumnal ghouls
goblins causing fright
V
Time to reflect
on this year
refill or autumnal cup
I'd recommend your whimiscal poem to other reviewers, my friend.
Love ya,
Melissa.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2012
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Thanks so much, Melissa. Love you!!! Debbie
Comment from dmt1967
I love the way the poem flowed in each verse linking up to the next one very skillfully done I like it very much thank you for sharing well done
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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I love the way the poem flowed in each verse linking up to the next one very skillfully done I like it very much thank you for sharing well done
Comment Written 12-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much my friend!!! Debbie
Comment from Danie Graham
Its a very nice poem, I didn't see any mistakes to fix. I like how you gave another insight into the changing seasons. I thought you did a very nice job.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Its a very nice poem, I didn't see any mistakes to fix. I like how you gave another insight into the changing seasons. I thought you did a very nice job.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it!!! Debbie
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You are very good at these pieces my friend again very descriptive and well written I enjoyed this well presented work well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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You are very good at these pieces my friend again very descriptive and well written I enjoyed this well presented work well done regards Jill
Comment Written 12-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Tnk you so very much.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Number 9 should be IX in Roman Numerals. This looks like my to-do list for the yard...LOL!
Quiet autumn
proceeds the storm << PRECEDES means "comes before"
of holiday season << Move "of" to this line.
I like the idea of autumn as a time of reflection on the past year... good time for it, since Thanksgiving comes up then as well. October is the perfect sort of weather to walk outdoors and reflect on just about anything!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Number 9 should be IX in Roman Numerals. This looks like my to-do list for the yard...LOL!
Quiet autumn
proceeds the storm << PRECEDES means "comes before"
of holiday season << Move "of" to this line.
I like the idea of autumn as a time of reflection on the past year... good time for it, since Thanksgiving comes up then as well. October is the perfect sort of weather to walk outdoors and reflect on just about anything!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Thank you-fixed those. You are such a wonderful a
editor. I have too much on my mind trying to finish up my book!!!! Debbie
Comment from tanyasdream
Very good and optimistic writing. Somewhat inspiring for people that live and work on farms and in agriculture. Very enjoyable and well written. Thank you.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Very good and optimistic writing. Somewhat inspiring for people that live and work on farms and in agriculture. Very enjoyable and well written. Thank you.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Thank you!!!! Debbie
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My pleasure. keep writing:)
Comment from ratlady1111
A nice poem covering the many aspects of autumn.I liked the slow, relaxed tone that reflects how the world is winding or flowing down towards the winter to come.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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A nice poem covering the many aspects of autumn.I liked the slow, relaxed tone that reflects how the world is winding or flowing down towards the winter to come.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Thank you!!! Debbie
Comment from akosibinot
The poem is good. It tells a new chapter of life to unfold. A new redemption of the past and a new era of life. I guess the theme is quite generic, I too experience this kind of theme but I think it's merely because of the experiences we had in life. It's a good one. God Bless!
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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The poem is good. It tells a new chapter of life to unfold. A new redemption of the past and a new era of life. I guess the theme is quite generic, I too experience this kind of theme but I think it's merely because of the experiences we had in life. It's a good one. God Bless!
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Comment Written 12-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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thanks