Comment from sbedian

Excellent

This one read really well for a non-rhyming poem. The rhythm added feel to the read rather than taking it away, and I felt the message came though loud and clear, though in a sort of expression of paradox of life. I can relate to the meaning behind it, I felt a connection to the author when reading.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

cool ... this was an expression about lovers who shall we say were misfits in this world and all they had was each other. I was experimenting with it but it turned out a o.k.. Much appreciated my friend so long as you enjoy the reads you can have as much connection as you like .lol.

Comment from Clockwise

Exceptional

Very compelling. I really enjoyed the subtle imagery and your word choice throughout. The refrain worked nicely keeping it focused and tying it all together. Well done!

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thank you my friend this was about obesity and how two such individuals would be as lovers. After all when in a relationship there is only you and her or you and him to really be concerned about and so long as they can love one another what does it matter to anyone else. lol.

Comment from Meta~Mark

Exceptional

Ah! we who are reluctant,
plagued horrors,
disturbing mentalities,
writhing slowly,
manipulating rigidity.- Bic the entire poem was brilliant and like your exclamations !! AH! at the beginning, this is how free verse shoudl be written wit ha metaphor, a question and a lesson!

BRAVO MY FRIEND, 6 STARS MISS YOU PAL!

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012

Thanks M... much appreciate the advice and time you take to read and enjoy. I liked this one.

Comment from Amsterdam

Excellent

Smile....
Tendr­a rimas ... Yo podr­a haber cantado .... algunas personas no les gusta lo que soy .... Yo realmente no s© .... qu© decir .... Yo no soy un editor, seguramente dir­a ... as­ hide enfermos en una lengua ... entonces usted no tiene que leer .... S­, me gusta lo que escribi³ ... por lo menos que pod­a leer ... AM

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012

Not so good without english...

Comment from J. Dark

Excellent

This is quite brilliant with some stunning word choices. I loved "feel breaths beat upon your silhouette" and the way you ended with "perfect harmony". An interesting and thought-provoking read. Great work!

Kindest of regards,

Mrs D :-)

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012

Thanks Mrs. D much appreciated.

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

If you are what you are in the first stanza of this poem. Then you are not in perfect harmony. This was a well written poetic voice that I enjoyed reading... John

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012

There are two inthis poem the first stanza ansd the second stanza they are in their different forms both the same, hence they are one and in perfect harmony.