Comment from
more2write
That darned change! I like the idea behind your 5-7-5 and you did stay within the parameters. However, with such a conservative format there should probably not be a word repetition as with the term "must" unless it was used as a literary device. If you were to go in and reword one of them, my own feeling is that it would be a stronger entry with better word economy. All the best, more2write
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
Comment from
4tulips
Well you said it. Change is unavoidable and we are faced with it constantly. Keep in mind that change is not necessarily needed to be portrayed as a negative and leaving a bad taste in our mouth. If change didn't happen we would all be stagnate. You are successful in this poem for this contest entry. Thanks for sharing and letting us read your good works.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012