Thoughtful Poems and Prose
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Comment from Schalk Jacobs
Sorry, but have been a bit busy the last few months. Love this poem and your word choice of lore and brutality helps paint a true picture of the sea.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2015
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Sorry, but have been a bit busy the last few months. Love this poem and your word choice of lore and brutality helps paint a true picture of the sea.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2015
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Hi, Schalk, thank you for dropping by.
I hope you have a good Christmas.
God bless.
Nicole
Comment from pbroussard209
I loved this, it is everything I think about the sea, I am not a beach person, I have a healthy fear of the ocean, I hate going to Florida, because I know my kids are out playing in the waves. I am a ball of axiety the whole time, lol.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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I loved this, it is everything I think about the sea, I am not a beach person, I have a healthy fear of the ocean, I hate going to Florida, because I know my kids are out playing in the waves. I am a ball of axiety the whole time, lol.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Trish, for your awesome review. Yes, a rough sea is a scary, dangerous sea indeed.
Nicole
Comment from Ulla
Wow, so you write poems as well, Nicole, and very well at that. Yes, the mysteries of the ocean is tantalising, but to have great respect is paramount for when the sea gets angry it is relentless. Liked this a lot.
Loved your art work to go with it. All the best. Ulla
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Wow, so you write poems as well, Nicole, and very well at that. Yes, the mysteries of the ocean is tantalising, but to have great respect is paramount for when the sea gets angry it is relentless. Liked this a lot.
Loved your art work to go with it. All the best. Ulla
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Ulla.
Nicole
Comment from Selina Stambi
Yes, an eternal mystery indeed.
Eternal writhing motion;
powerful, brutal ocean. - my favourite lines. You've captured the essence of the ocean with these words.
Enjoyed, Nicole.
Sonali
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Yes, an eternal mystery indeed.
Eternal writhing motion;
powerful, brutal ocean. - my favourite lines. You've captured the essence of the ocean with these words.
Enjoyed, Nicole.
Sonali
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Sonali.
Nicole
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Endless whispers calling me,
softest murmurs, restless sea.
Timeless, tortured, helpless plea,
tireless, constant haunting sea.
What a treat to find a poem from you, Nicole -
the words, and both rhythm and rhyme flowing
smoothly throughout - with good imagery.
Margaret
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Endless whispers calling me,
softest murmurs, restless sea.
Timeless, tortured, helpless plea,
tireless, constant haunting sea.
What a treat to find a poem from you, Nicole -
the words, and both rhythm and rhyme flowing
smoothly throughout - with good imagery.
Margaret
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Margaret.
Nicole
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Such beautiful artwork, Nicole, you certainly are one very talented lady with a paint brush.
I enjoyed this poem. It brought the sea to life, with the sirens calling to those in peril on the waves. I have a lot of respect for the sea, when she is angry she shows no mercy.
Annette
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Such beautiful artwork, Nicole, you certainly are one very talented lady with a paint brush.
I enjoyed this poem. It brought the sea to life, with the sirens calling to those in peril on the waves. I have a lot of respect for the sea, when she is angry she shows no mercy.
Annette
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Yes--no mercy. You are right about that. Thanks, Annette.
Nicole
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful and eerie write, curly, great imagery presented in both the words and the artwork. I enjoyed reading this and love the picture. I love to watch the ocean churn and crash but do not wish any boats to be on the water at the time.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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this is a beautiful and eerie write, curly, great imagery presented in both the words and the artwork. I enjoyed reading this and love the picture. I love to watch the ocean churn and crash but do not wish any boats to be on the water at the time.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Sweetwoodjax, for reading.
Nicole
Comment from Robert Louis Fox
I really like the art. Very imaginative. The hair on the mermaid looks a lot like yours.
If bear were "bearing" you'd be maintaining parallel structure. And 'ing' being a soft foot, I think the meter stays the same.
Having been on the high seas, I can say that your description captures the movement of the waves and its haunting appeal. My mistress the sea takes me, she kills but cannot hate.
Thanx for taking me back.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I really like the art. Very imaginative. The hair on the mermaid looks a lot like yours.
If bear were "bearing" you'd be maintaining parallel structure. And 'ing' being a soft foot, I think the meter stays the same.
Having been on the high seas, I can say that your description captures the movement of the waves and its haunting appeal. My mistress the sea takes me, she kills but cannot hate.
Thanx for taking me back.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Robert, for your thoughtful comments. I'm not a poetry expert, so I struggle. However, 'bearing' puts that line up to an 8 syllable count, while the others are all 7. I have read that meter and syllable counts may clash--but I'm uncertain of when or how. So, I took your advice (because obviously something was wrong) by changing that last line in the first stanza to: turmoil waters herald strife. Now it reads like this:
Restless seas of depth and power,
against barren rocks you shower.
Waves spewing undying life,
turmoil waters herald strife.
I hope that's better.
Yours sincerely
Nicole
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I like it, but to be honest, I didn't dislike it before. I saw that the first 3 lines were past tense and the 4th in the present.
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Okay, thanks.
Nicole
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Nicole
_ Neat poem paired very well with your artwork.
_ Something so mystifying yet soothing about the deep blue sea and all its magnificence.
* Happy Thanksgiving & Merry Christmas *
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jacqueline-Jackie-Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Hi, Nicole
_ Neat poem paired very well with your artwork.
_ Something so mystifying yet soothing about the deep blue sea and all its magnificence.
* Happy Thanksgiving & Merry Christmas *
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jacqueline-Jackie-Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Jax, for reading.
Nicole
Comment from c_lucas
The seas have many story to tell. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for some exciting reads. There is very good imagery and descriptive schemes.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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The seas have many story to tell. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for some exciting reads. There is very good imagery and descriptive schemes.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Charlie.
I hope you are having a good day.
Nicole
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As well as I can expect. Charlie
