All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Butterfly in a Box"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from LilHippie
I love this! I have been away from FS for a few months and I am enjoying reading again, when they are as enjoyable as this! You perfectly analyzed this relationship. You cut the cancer out, did chemo and radiation and are healthy again. This is a journey, a war, that you won. The person you describe is one I recognize all too well. And you describe the person so very eloquently. Your anger is never vulgar, just healthy. Your victory is eloquent in it's descriptive of letting light in. BRAVO!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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I love this! I have been away from FS for a few months and I am enjoying reading again, when they are as enjoyable as this! You perfectly analyzed this relationship. You cut the cancer out, did chemo and radiation and are healthy again. This is a journey, a war, that you won. The person you describe is one I recognize all too well. And you describe the person so very eloquently. Your anger is never vulgar, just healthy. Your victory is eloquent in it's descriptive of letting light in. BRAVO!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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thx so much LilHippie - I haven't seen you before, so I look forward to reading your work too! Bless you for you magic '6' and bless you even MORE for reading, and understanding, what I've written. That is so appreciated!
Best wishes, Sharyn
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Well in my portfolio, skip all the stuff up front and go to the political, meaty, earlier stuff. Thanks, you sound like fun!!!
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I'll look forward to it LH! So pleased to meet you! help yourself to my stuff - go for "Pull Up a Blue Chair" - I think you'll like it! :) Best wishes, Sharyn
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Going right now
Comment from Mishelly
Such vivid, powerful words. This had me in tears. It shows we can only be knocked down so many times in life before we start fighting back. Unfortunately, I've known people who want to hold others back in life, because they're so miserable themselves. The third verse describes this perfectly:
But what you didn't tell me
was that you feed
off the light of others
because you, yourself, have none.
Thank you for sharing this :-)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Such vivid, powerful words. This had me in tears. It shows we can only be knocked down so many times in life before we start fighting back. Unfortunately, I've known people who want to hold others back in life, because they're so miserable themselves. The third verse describes this perfectly:
But what you didn't tell me
was that you feed
off the light of others
because you, yourself, have none.
Thank you for sharing this :-)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Mishelly, you are an angel - I so thank you for being moved by my work. You may have been able to tell that this write was very important to me. Blessings for being on my wave-length, and also, of course, for your lovely '6'!
Best wishes and much, much appreciation,
Sharyn
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is way too often true-there are those who only want to take and manipulate. I'm glad this had a positive ending. A very nice free style poem. Take care, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This is way too often true-there are those who only want to take and manipulate. I'm glad this had a positive ending. A very nice free style poem. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thanks so much Deb!
Comment from GWHARGIS
I never knew Butterflies cold be so strong. I really liked the analogy of the light stealer and the box as a way of imprisoning the subject. This was both exciting to see the butterfly stand up for herself and scary when I think about the poor guy opening the box. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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I never knew Butterflies cold be so strong. I really liked the analogy of the light stealer and the box as a way of imprisoning the subject. This was both exciting to see the butterfly stand up for herself and scary when I think about the poor guy opening the box. Nice job.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx GW!
Comment from mumsyone
Good for you, for not staying in the box and letting him control you. We each have to be our own person, to a fair degree, even when we're part of another. Good poem, Sharyn.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Good for you, for not staying in the box and letting him control you. We each have to be our own person, to a fair degree, even when we're part of another. Good poem, Sharyn.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx mumsy!
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your characters are vivid and understandable in a way that reveals the conflict you have with him and your answer to his challenge. This is an excellent write in free verse. The digital art fits the poem.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Your characters are vivid and understandable in a way that reveals the conflict you have with him and your answer to his challenge. This is an excellent write in free verse. The digital art fits the poem.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thank you so much Alan!
best wishes,
Sharyn
Comment from Mai Mai
This review need only have one word "BRAVO"!!! Unfortunately, the site won't allow it. I know that sociopath and have not only been the butterfly but have also watched many butterfly. I believe I came out a much more magnificent butterfly, others turned to ants or stone but the one I still worry for turned into a black widow spider. Thank you for sharing.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This review need only have one word "BRAVO"!!! Unfortunately, the site won't allow it. I know that sociopath and have not only been the butterfly but have also watched many butterfly. I believe I came out a much more magnificent butterfly, others turned to ants or stone but the one I still worry for turned into a black widow spider. Thank you for sharing.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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aaaah you have the message then Mai Mai! Thank you SO much! I really appreciate both your magic '6' and your deep understanding of my writing. Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Heaven Bound
This is a very well-written story (yes poem) with a clever plot. I appreciate the message within that the person develops his/her own inner strength to stand up to the taker. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This is a very well-written story (yes poem) with a clever plot. I appreciate the message within that the person develops his/her own inner strength to stand up to the taker. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx HB!
Comment from wordsareus
The poem is captivating and well written compelling us to read between the lines. I wouldn't change anything about the poem. The format is eye catching.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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The poem is captivating and well written compelling us to read between the lines. I wouldn't change anything about the poem. The format is eye catching.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx words!
Comment from Kingsland
There is a bit more depth to a person than first meets one's eye. This is what I took away from this piece of poetry. This was well written with very good emotional thought transference... John
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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There is a bit more depth to a person than first meets one's eye. This is what I took away from this piece of poetry. This was well written with very good emotional thought transference... John
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx John!