Patti
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Barbara,
It's peculiar that it's taken this long to run into you. I've been a member of Fanstory since June of 2010, a retirement gift to myself. I thought you must be new to this writing community.
Your daughter's passing must have been very hard for you. But you have that knowledge that you'll see her again. This life is short, but eternity in Heaven... well, I can't even fathom what awaits us.
You've created nice imagery here. It reminds me of walking along Seaview Beach in Prince Edward Island with our cairn terrier, Annie. She is gone now, but I close my eyes and I can still see her little footprints in the sand. She'd stop and smell tiny crab legs. She was a good pet, and I believe our pets will be waiting for us, too.
The only thing I'd change in your poem would be to omit "your". It makes it sound like Jesus is only her Savior, and not your own. But I don't think that's the case.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Hi Barbara,
It's peculiar that it's taken this long to run into you. I've been a member of Fanstory since June of 2010, a retirement gift to myself. I thought you must be new to this writing community.
Your daughter's passing must have been very hard for you. But you have that knowledge that you'll see her again. This life is short, but eternity in Heaven... well, I can't even fathom what awaits us.
You've created nice imagery here. It reminds me of walking along Seaview Beach in Prince Edward Island with our cairn terrier, Annie. She is gone now, but I close my eyes and I can still see her little footprints in the sand. She'd stop and smell tiny crab legs. She was a good pet, and I believe our pets will be waiting for us, too.
The only thing I'd change in your poem would be to omit "your". It makes it sound like Jesus is only her Savior, and not your own. But I don't think that's the case.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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No, you are correct. Jesus is my Savior also. Proudly. Thank you. Glad this gave you Happy memories. Blessings, Barbara. xo
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barb. Yes, you've mentioned your daughter before and this is truly a fitting poem for her passing. The artwork is perfect. How have you been? Good I trust. Bob
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Hi, Barb. Yes, you've mentioned your daughter before and this is truly a fitting poem for her passing. The artwork is perfect. How have you been? Good I trust. Bob
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Thank you Bob. It is the anniversary month of her passing and it brings it home more it seems. This month has been hard. I am doing well Bob and hope this finds you doing well also. Blessings. barbara
Comment from Twomoon
well, my friend, this is so beautiful, and I know it was so hard on you, and it is something that one can never really find releive from..we all journey alone to be greeted by others..xx twomoon
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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well, my friend, this is so beautiful, and I know it was so hard on you, and it is something that one can never really find releive from..we all journey alone to be greeted by others..xx twomoon
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you dear friend. Yes I know it is true. It seems when the anniversary looms each year, as it is this month it all replays in the raw more. I suppose that is normal. Blessings. Barbara
Comment from adewpearl
Barbara, I know how hard your daughter's loss was on you. My thoughts and prayers remain with you.
And what a lovely poem you have written, filled with genuine soulful emotion and with a strong spiritual message :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Barbara, I know how hard your daughter's loss was on you. My thoughts and prayers remain with you.
And what a lovely poem you have written, filled with genuine soulful emotion and with a strong spiritual message :-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you Brooke. It never really leaves. Blessings my friend. Barbara
Comment from rgabel
Simple, short and sweet. What a gift to have been able to hold her and see her off to the next stage of existence. I enjoy your voice!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Simple, short and sweet. What a gift to have been able to hold her and see her off to the next stage of existence. I enjoy your voice!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you and yes a tremendous gift that helps. Blessings. Barbara
Comment from dmt1967
I am sorry for your loss my heart goes out to you this is a nice poem and well written its like that song when you walk through a storm thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I am sorry for your loss my heart goes out to you this is a nice poem and well written its like that song when you walk through a storm thank you for sharing
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you Blessings. Barbara
Comment from jmdg1954
A beautiful poem for a beautiful daughter and wonderful mother. I couldn't begin to imagine how hard you must have prayed for the courage to tell her to let go! My eyes are tearing now writing this to you. Jesus has her now in his arms to watch over her family.
John
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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A beautiful poem for a beautiful daughter and wonderful mother. I couldn't begin to imagine how hard you must have prayed for the courage to tell her to let go! My eyes are tearing now writing this to you. Jesus has her now in his arms to watch over her family.
John
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you. Blessings. Barbara
Comment from Bindu Saxena
Your author notes are very touching. I believe Patti was your darling daughter's name.I dread to imagine your dearest someone leaving you for ever.Pray you gather all the prayers of all the readers to let her be in peace.Brave parent.May Jesus gives you strength to bear this loss.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Your author notes are very touching. I believe Patti was your darling daughter's name.I dread to imagine your dearest someone leaving you for ever.Pray you gather all the prayers of all the readers to let her be in peace.Brave parent.May Jesus gives you strength to bear this loss.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you Bindu. Blessings. Barbara
Comment from The Moonwalker
This is truly a really sad story, and I think your poem is a great tribute. It's a short piece, but neat, and you have chosen a beautiful artwork to accompany it :)
Best regards,
Jim
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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This is truly a really sad story, and I think your poem is a great tribute. It's a short piece, but neat, and you have chosen a beautiful artwork to accompany it :)
Best regards,
Jim
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you Jim. Blessings. Barbara
Comment from robyn corum
Oh, honey. I can't begin to imagine what your own journey has been like. I wish you peace and good memories. And I am so glad that you got to be there. There at the first breath and the last. What a blessing.
The only thing I would do to improve is take away the capitalization. I would put everything in little letters. Except the words, "alone" and "Jesus." You might try it and see how it looks? Maybe not even 'alone'. No distractions at all, you know? Good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Oh, honey. I can't begin to imagine what your own journey has been like. I wish you peace and good memories. And I am so glad that you got to be there. There at the first breath and the last. What a blessing.
The only thing I would do to improve is take away the capitalization. I would put everything in little letters. Except the words, "alone" and "Jesus." You might try it and see how it looks? Maybe not even 'alone'. No distractions at all, you know? Good luck!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you robyn. I changed the caps. I really didn't have them caped spell check advised and I followed. My writing is usually much more casual. I appreciate your kind words and advice. Blessings. Barbara
