Poetry, Dreams In Motion.
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Dear Lord, I Pray..."A collection of poetry.
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Comment from Wendyanne
This is a lovely prayer which I could easily imagine congregations chanting out loud. If only people followed the words of your prayer, the world might be a better place. Thanks for sharing.
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This is a lovely prayer which I could easily imagine congregations chanting out loud. If only people followed the words of your prayer, the world might be a better place. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2005
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Wisdom's truth and lesson's(drop the apostrophe. This is a simple plural.)
I liked it!
I would've liked to have seen Son capitalized, but I liked it all the same. :0)
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Wisdom's truth and lesson's(drop the apostrophe. This is a simple plural.)
I liked it!
I would've liked to have seen Son capitalized, but I liked it all the same. :0)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2005
Comment from Balladeer
WONDERFULRicouard~
Great Write~
Your choice of topic was excellent~
The story flowed very smooth~
You did an awesome job as usual~
I look forward to reading and reviewing your writing~
~Walk in the Light~Skye~
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WONDERFULRicouard~
Great Write~
Your choice of topic was excellent~
The story flowed very smooth~
You did an awesome job as usual~
I look forward to reading and reviewing your writing~
~Walk in the Light~Skye~
Comment Written 19-Mar-2005
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Use my faith, that I might see
Wisdom's truth and lesson's weaved.
Use my tongue, that I might speak
Of You to all I'll chance to meet.
Use my hands, that I might reap { These verses had good
When others toil and only weep. loose rhyme
Use my feet, that I might find
A better path on which to set my life. {these don't fall into the poem
Use my heart, that I might strive with good flow. although, your
To never be cruel, and always be kind. your thoughts are sincere and
Use this body, I claimed as mine worthy of striving for!
For the glory of your son, Jesus Christ.
I give all of me to you above...
With all my joy, all my love.
As a poem I think it needs work
as a prayer, it is wonderful.
I hope it is answered for you.
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Use my faith, that I might see
Wisdom's truth and lesson's weaved.
Use my tongue, that I might speak
Of You to all I'll chance to meet.
Use my hands, that I might reap { These verses had good
When others toil and only weep. loose rhyme
Use my feet, that I might find
A better path on which to set my life. {these don't fall into the poem
Use my heart, that I might strive with good flow. although, your
To never be cruel, and always be kind. your thoughts are sincere and
Use this body, I claimed as mine worthy of striving for!
For the glory of your son, Jesus Christ.
I give all of me to you above...
With all my joy, all my love.
As a poem I think it needs work
as a prayer, it is wonderful.
I hope it is answered for you.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2005
Comment from bobdabuilder0804
Dear Lord, I pray... is a very nice little poem, I love anything spiritual. I think you captured the meaning behind the prayer very well here, and this line, for me was very powerful,
Use this body, I claimed as mine
For the glory of your son, Jesus Christ
The ending was good too, it wrapped it up nicely. Thanks.
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Dear Lord, I pray... is a very nice little poem, I love anything spiritual. I think you captured the meaning behind the prayer very well here, and this line, for me was very powerful,
Use this body, I claimed as mine
For the glory of your son, Jesus Christ
The ending was good too, it wrapped it up nicely. Thanks.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2005
Comment from WritePoeticSorceress
This is a very beautiful poem. The best poetry comes from true passion within. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep Writing!
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This is a very beautiful poem. The best poetry comes from true passion within. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep Writing!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2005
Comment from Lainee
Hi Ricouard,
A simple prayer of wisdom and hope from the heart, beautifully written giving an example of what one's life should be about and giving inspiration to all along the way. Thankyou for sharing.
Goodluck,
Lainee :)
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Hi Ricouard,
A simple prayer of wisdom and hope from the heart, beautifully written giving an example of what one's life should be about and giving inspiration to all along the way. Thankyou for sharing.
Goodluck,
Lainee :)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2005
Comment from ladykay
Hi...
Just did one of yours on earthly passions, and now I see another one up but more about Godly love.
You communicate well with your poems and this one reaches out too.
"Use this body, I claimed as mine
For the glory of your son, Jesus Christ.
I give all of me to you above...
With all my joy, all my love. "
ladykay
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Hi...
Just did one of yours on earthly passions, and now I see another one up but more about Godly love.
You communicate well with your poems and this one reaches out too.
"Use this body, I claimed as mine
For the glory of your son, Jesus Christ.
I give all of me to you above...
With all my joy, all my love. "
ladykay
Comment Written 18-Mar-2005
Comment from CarolinasAngel
Of (You) to all I'll chance to meet.
I just found the one boo-boo.. I liked this poem a lot. For some reason it made me think of my papaw... Which is always good!
great poem! Write on, you do it well!
:o) Candy
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Of (You) to all I'll chance to meet.
I just found the one boo-boo.. I liked this poem a lot. For some reason it made me think of my papaw... Which is always good!
great poem! Write on, you do it well!
:o) Candy
Comment Written 17-Mar-2005
Comment from elizabethpryde
This a was a very well worded poem and touched ones emotions. I am not a religious person but I could sense you had a great faith. Good luck in your writing, you deserve to become an author. .......elizabethpryde
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This a was a very well worded poem and touched ones emotions. I am not a religious person but I could sense you had a great faith. Good luck in your writing, you deserve to become an author. .......elizabethpryde
Comment Written 17-Mar-2005